@dbhgodreigns
Active 8 years ago- Rank: Wise Jester
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Animal Farm in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@hannah-krynicki Re-education? Sound more like brainwashing. Definitely like the Soviet Union. That little paragraph about the pups being taken from their mother is foreshadowing for something later in the book.
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Animal Farm in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Animal Farm in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
In case anyone is wondering, the Raven stands for the Orthodox church. (At least according to my memory of a literary analysis I read for school last year)
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Animal Farm in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
@hannah-krynicki I agree with you. I also noticed the voice, which I thought was kind of tongue of cheek. He writes the facts, doesn’t expound on them, yet nonetheless there is a sort of irony. (ex., near the end of Chapter 2, the milk disappears)
On another note, this one structural, the inciting event takes place at about 13% through the book,…[Read more]
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Please critique! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 5 months ago
Nice excerpt! One thing I thought of. Why can’t the MC just say that the food is poisonous?
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Endings in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic What Book Are We Going To Read? in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
I have the book. Agreed.
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic What Book Are We Going To Read? in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 5 months ago
https://kingdompen.org/members/daeus/ I have the book. Agreed.
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic What Book Are We Going To Read? in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 6 months ago
I read Animal Farm for school last year, and it should be in a box somewhere. Now just to find the right one.
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic What Book Are We Going To Read? in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 6 months ago
When are we going to start?
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic What Book Are We Going To Read? in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 6 months ago
Here’s my votes!
1. Chasing Vermeer
2. Animal Farm
3. Cloak of the LightI’m open to audiobooks.
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic THE THING YOU WOULD HAVE ALL BEEN WAITING FOR IF YOU KNEW ABOUT IT (I assume) in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 6 months ago
I’m in! What types of books are we going to dissect?
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic THE THING YOU WOULD HAVE ALL BEEN WAITING FOR IF YOU KNEW ABOUT IT (I assume) in the forum Book Discussions 8 years, 6 months ago
I’m in! What types of books are we going to dissect.
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Let's take this thing apart and see what makes it tick in the forum Film 8 years, 6 months ago
Great film.
Here’s my thoughts on some of the different structural points.
Inciting Incident: Girl walks into square
Key Event: Second musician shows up.
Second Act: When the stakes rise, and the musicians are fighting over the coin.
Midpoint: Coin going down drain. (This changes the trajectory of the story and like @Adry_Grace said, the…[Read more]
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Let's take this thing apart and see what makes it tick in the forum Film 8 years, 6 months ago
Great film.
Here’s where I pinpoint some of the different structural points.
Inciting Incident: Girl walks into square
Key Event: Second musician shows up.
Second Act: When the stakes rise, and the musicians are fighting over the coin.
Midpoint: Coin going down drain. (This changes the trajectory of the story and like @Adry_Grace said, the…[Read more]
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Emergency beta reader situation (HELP!!!!) in the forum Novel Critique Requests 8 years, 7 months ago
What would you want a betareader to look for?
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic Showing the Story in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 7 months ago
I enjoyed Tim Shoemaker’s detective series (which I received as a Christmas gift.)
Showing vs. telling is powerful. Not only in describing a setting, but also in the emotions of a character ex.
Oliver sat at his desk in his dorm and stared at the little squiggly lines that made up his exam. He played a discordant solo with his number two pencil…[Read more]
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic A letter for my story in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 7 months ago
Also, is Joshua writing this letter because he wants to, or someone else (parent, teacher, pastor, etc.) is forcing him to. The mood of each of these two letters could be much different.
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic A letter for my story in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 7 months ago
I agree with Daeus on starting the letter with just the first name. Joshua or I would probably start with the good news, that Chloe was on the mend. If Joshua is the irresponsible sort, he might apologize, but say that he didn’t mean it, or that his teasing was all in good fun.
If it was me personally, I’d be much more heartfelt, though writing…[Read more]
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David B. Hunter replied to the topic A letter for my story in the forum General Writing Discussions 8 years, 7 months ago
I agree with Daeus on starting the letter with just the first name. Joshua or I would probably start with the good news, that Chloe was on the mend. If Joshua is the irresponsible sort, he might apologize, but say that he didn’t mean it, or that his teasing was all in good fun.
If it was me personally, I’d be much more heartfelt, though writing…[Read more]
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