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@jenwriter17, Thank you for tagging others. I think I opened it up so that people can comment on the actual doc. Even if you can’t read the whole thing I’ll be happy with anything I can get

@alia I’d love to read this part of your book (are you wanting us to leave comments?), but sadly due to busy life and other beta jobs, I won’t be able to read the whole thing. 🙁

tagging some more people for you @kaya-young @skredder @dekreel @dragon-snapper @ariel-ashira @catwing @daughteroftheking @kate-flournoy

@seekjustice, right? most of my friends are guys, and according to my two gal friends most of the time I talk to a guy is considered flirting by society, but for the life of me I can’t see where the friendly conversation ends and the flirtation begins.

@seekjustice, good job Zac!

honestly, sometimes being a writer is hard because in order for us to write something like flirting well, we actually have to go and do it ourselves, which just ends up being awkward

@seekjustice, well Zac still flirted better than I can. Which isn’t saying much because A. I don’t flirt, and B. I’m sure I would be terrible at it. But hey! At least Zac is better than someone

@rochellaine, yeah, I guess that is part of it. Probably the main reason I don’t ship them because it wasn’t til near the end of book two that I got the impression that Justice made the faith his own and not simply thinking believing in God was all that mattered.

Ooh, and I agree with what you said to @valtmy about the whole leader thing.

@alia During the first book I got pretty annoyed with Chessy for falling for an unbeliever.  That situation was resolved in the second book, and because I began to feel more sorry for Justice, (and because of the window scenes,) I didn’t mind them getting together.  I really thought she was going to go for Zac more, though.  I would have… 😛 We…[Read more]

@rochellaine, honestly, if a guy did that to me I’d find it pretty darn romantic, but like I said, there’s just something about those two. I don’t even know what it is, but for some reason I do not ship them. No clue why.

@alia Well, window scenes don’t mean as much to you as they do to me. 😉  I tell my sister, “If some guy ever asks you how to make me like him, tell him to talk to me through a window.” 😛  I don’t know, there’s just something really romantic about window scenes, to me.  Mostly from the Patty Fairfield series.

@seekjustice I don’t know the ba…[Read more]

@seekjustice, aren’t we all? Confused by our own writings I mean.

Hey, maybe he was flirting with her in the same way she flirted with him was so that she wouldn’t like him like that. Yep, thats my theory and I’m sticking with it

@rochellaine, well I guess @seekjustice failed with getting me to ship them through the window scene, because I like them as friends and really hope Chessy gets over liking him and he gets over liking her because I really like them as friends, but not as a couple. I don’t know, its just something about them together doesn’t appeal to me

@seekjustice Remember, @jenwriter17 shipped Justice and Chessy, so she must have liked him a bit. 😉

(speaking to your comment to @valtmy )

@seekjustice I don’t think he needs to be a copy of another character.  Like we discussed once, your characters are mix and matches of all the different characters from the original.  So if the “glory of Enjolras” as you call it, doesn’t get fully portrayed in Justice, maybe some of it shows up in the other characters.

The characters that are e…[Read more]

@rochellaine, wait, he didn’t? Never mind, ignore what I said then I thought he did and that annoyed me, but if it was all what other people saw then it makes sense and is fine.

(but I still didn’t like him as a person, that I know)

@alia He didn’t have his own POV in book one, so that’s not a problem, right? 😉  In book two, we were introduced to a man broken by the deaths of nearly all his followers who was struggling with his newfound faith and his impossibly horrible memories.  I felt the drastic change was very realistic, especially once we got to know his backstory.  So…[Read more]

@rochellaine, I agree with you on the most part, but I just didn’t feel much realisticness from him in his own POV

@seekjustice Actually, contrary to what @alia said, I felt Justice was very realistic.  He was stiff, and I pretty much despised him, but I despised him as a human, not as a badly written character, because I thought he was very well written.

I hope you don’t humanize him too much in the revisions, because it would ruin his character.

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@seekjustice, I get him appearing like that in someone else’s POV, but when it was like that in his too is when it started bothering me a bit.

Yeah, I don’t think they care much about honouring (yes auto correct there is a u in honour) their parents. 😉

great.

@seekjustice, @rochellaine, just to be clear, beta readers are kind of what y’all are doing with @valtmy ‘s and what you did with Seekjustice’s book, right? where you read it part by part and critique it?