Hannah Whatley

Till about 10, if I had to guess.

@winter-rose I’m beta reading.

@That_Writer_Girl_99 well I’m here now. XD *folds hands primly**ahem* You had a question?

Bethany grins awkwardly first at @anne-of-lothlorien and then at @faithdk “Umm, I thinks I’ll try the spinning thing-thanks guys!” With 2.5 paces forward, a twirl, and a trip down four crumbled marble steps, she finally reaches the Volleyball Court. “Okay fellow Scribbling Serfs. I’m here. Where would a tall person be most helpful?”

@dragon-snapper That’s so exciting that you’re entering a contest!
I liked taking this little adventure with Daniel and Jack. Your descriptions are clever 🙂

The one part I was confused by…

“For a while, I trekked about the house with a whisper of guilt trickling into my head. However, I knew that if there was indeed a problem,…”

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Bethany searched the somewhat confusing signs pointing her to the volleyball court. “Hello? Anyone else know where we’re supposed to go?”

*shakes head* You guys… XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 YAY!!! *tackles you and smothers you in blankets and pillows* We knew you could do it! Way to go! *fuscia confetti*

@Dragon-Snapper lol! XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 nope. Not yet. I want to get him good and proper in my head before I try it. 😉

@Anne-Of-Lothlorien too late. 😀

Christi Eaton had stepped off of the train a while ago but had remained unnoticed by the others as she headed away from the volleyball court and over to the kingdom’s rose garden. Red roses were her favorite flowers, and she planted herself down on the little bench, her legs crisscrossed and hunched over on her laptop, her fingers either busy…[Read more]

@That_Writer_Girl_99 yep. And thoughts are actually the least necessary of those three. Oftentimes I just cut them out and let the actions tell the story. Emotions and actions go a long way to cluing people in on what someone’s thinking. 😉 😛

Yeah… maybe it means easy as eating pie? XD

@That_Writer_Girl_99 *hugs you*

Thanks @DelightInLife. 😀 It took me forever to get that actually… :/

@That_Writer_Girl_99

I didn’t write that, and I don’t think I can right now. I’m not that good.

*wise Yoda look* That— is why you fail.

*goes off into gales of smothered laughter* Okay, okay… so it’s not that drastic. I have a reputation to live up to apparently, though, so… *shrugs*

No, you’ve got enough humility to sink a ship.…[Read more]

@Daeus awesome. I got 506 words written. 🙂 See ya.

@that_writer_girl_99 Signing off. I got a chapter edited. Hope you get your breakthrough.

@kate-flournoy See ya.

Also, see how much I told you by not telling? *grins*

@That_Writer_Girl_99 Ahhh… yes. You’re POV telling. That makes it boring and dull; you’re right. See, what you’re doing is giving us Kara’s thoughts instead of showing us her emotions through the way she acts. Instead of doing this:

That was strange. I think to myself as I—finally—enter my cell. I wonder what Matthias was talking about?
I tak…

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