Corissa Maiden of Praise

@aislinn-millisong  I will do her!

@sage-g  *gasps*  You are really talented.  She looks great!!!!! 🙂  And thank you.

@dekreel This topic is two years old, back when Sarah was still with us.

@supermonkey42 Can’t remember exactly. It was either lack of involvement or I didn’t have enough time.

@hannah-c I am about your age, yes 😃 And I’m in the Netherlands right now – another barrier because right now I only know about ten words of Dutch 😐 The people I’m staying with are really nice, however, and they’re teaching me more words, so it’s not that bad.

I still like romance, but the cut-and-paste characters do get boring after a while. I…[Read more]

@Daeus Yay! *lemonade and cheesecake for all*

I definitely prefer “Awestruck to see that in dark the lights dance”.

@hannah-c

Don’t worry about it; I’m pretty curious myself 😃 I had to move; it’s the first time I’ve been away from home for so long and things are still rather rocky. I used to write Christian romances; can’t help but cringe slightly thinking about that now (!) but I really want to try my hand at fantasy.

Thanks for the encouragement! 😄

Oh, one more question. Do you prefer the ending lines:

“Awestruck to see that in dark the lights dance”

or

“Awestruck to see that in night the lights dance”

???

Thanks everyone! @emma-flournoy @ariella-newheart @rochellaine

I think I’ve got it now. I’ll come back to this a few months from now to see if I can make any small improvements, but I think it’s generally solid. 😀

@skredder  Hopefully her hair is how you imagined it…and I wasn’t sure about her eyes so I just did brown.  🙂

And closer…

@skredder  I may try her today or tomorrow…maybe.  🙂

@daeus Thankee. *bows* Well, I tried incorporating small ‘good’ things and it’s been a lot let dismal lately. I think I just let Ike gnaw on dismal’ness’ for too long. XD

@sarah-anson I really like the italicized bit you said there. *nods* I agree. Thanks!

@Daeus

‘Most comely he smiled’ is better

And little Teedletiden he fashioned for the trees
For all of these a city, Letharill, he made
Its glory was established that it should never fade[ I’m unsure about the meter in these last three lines, especially lines 1 and 3.]

Maybe instead: ‘And little Teedletiden he fashioned for trees

For all t…[Read more]

@hannah-c

Heh, I kind of need this as well. I started a new job overseas nearly two weeks ago now and though it’s been really overwhelming, I’ve also found myself longing to write in a better direction than where I was going before. (That probably sounds weird; I mean writing more for God’s glory and my own enjoyment than for the praise others…[Read more]

@warrioroftherealm *salutes* Awesome!

@christianna-hellwig @rochellaine @emma-flournoy @that_writer_girl_99

Thanks so much for your suggestions, everyone! Here’s what I have now.

“Oh, stars that remember the firstthings forgotten
How earth and its peoples were early begotten
They looked and beheld through a pane of dark glass
The earth in a swirling, untamable mass
From darkness f…[Read more]

@christianna-hellwig Thanks so much! I’ll take a look over this as soon as I get a chance.