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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
I have ADHD…it’s not my fault!!! 😂😂
you’re gonna hate me when you hear what I’m gonna do! heheheh
So you know how you said that Eloy should die INSTEAD of Cass?
Well, Cass is going to be executed.
Naturally Eloy is angry at his brother for everything he did, so he builds up anger, and then instead of stepping in front of…[Read more]
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
God can also deliver us over to our sins and temptations…another random thought. (see Romans 1)
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
No, you’re fine!!!
I just can never seem to think things through before I say them! I reply too fast…
Thanks for helping me, this gave me a lot to think about! (you too @jonas !) Today I developed sooo much of the plot thanks to you guys!
No it wasn’t your mistake, it was MY mistake…I still feel bad for confusing everybody…[Read more]
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
I’m getting to the point where I don’t even know what I mean 😭
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Goodness I realized I keep contradicting myself.
Sorry guys.
I say things without thinking them through. (blame it on the coffee!)
I know I said there can’t be redemption for Cass, but I didn’t really mean that.
Ugh. Sorry for the confusion!
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Holy cow this thing blew up into a bigger thing than I intended and I feel bad for some reason sorry :/
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
But there’s a problem there. When we chose to live in sin, or even directly comit evil, there is still hope for us until death. Even the vilest of sinner can be redeemed by the blood of Christ. If you make Pythonos unredeemable, you are almost saying that the blood of Christ is not enough for them. You know? Which is why r…
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Pythonos could become loyal to the Great One again…but why would they want to? They lose all ability to love or care or feel regret and are consumed by evil and the desire for power. I just don’t know how that could work without digging a hole for myself XD
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
But Cass becomes a Pythonos, so there’s no redemption. At least, i can’t think of a way that he could be redeemed.
(See post above where I replied to Jonas)
NO I AM NOT KILLING ELOY NO NO NO I love him too much ahhh
Also…Cass doesn’t just get tortured.
He HELPS TORTURE THEM. So that won’t really work…
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Sara replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 4 months ago
BUT ONCE HE CONVERTS HER SHE’LL REALIZE SHE LOVES HIM I KNOW IT
and yes I know Sabina will come to her senses eventually!
I won’t lose hope. XD
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
I said it was a couple posts back….XD XD I thought it was clear 😬😂😂
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Lilitu was kind of my “you’re never too far gone” person, because his parents are Jraldath and Selena! There’s going to be this epic confrontation scene where he wrestles with the knowledge that he was meant to be evil from the moment he was born. Does that work? Or do I still need Cassian?
Because that’s a good idea, but I feel like…[Read more]
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
it’s right above where HighScribe says “no spoilers” and right below the post where you said this:
I don’t think this was on your radar when Cass was first introduced, and in several of the early chapters. (am i right?) so, you need to show a little bit of that in him. just a teeny bit. Maybe he can’t stand it if one of hios bro…
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Sara replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 4 months ago
*gasp* THAT WAY AARON AND TURIN COULD BE BROTHERS FOR REALZ
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Sara replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 4 months ago
yesss! Idk I just love her sooo much!
I am also shipping her and Aaron so if they don’t kiss at ALL during the whole book I will be sorely disappointed :/
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Also have you seen Sef and Lilitu’s character arcs I posted a couple posts back? I tagged Whaley but I’d love to hear your thoughts too!!
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
Ohhhh okay makes sense!
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
That’s fair lol
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Sara replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 months ago
thanks!!! I’ve been having a lot of deep thoughts lately XD lol
I don’t think this was on your radar when Cass was first introduced, and in several of the early chapters. (am i right?) so, you need to show a little bit of that in him. just a teeny bit. Maybe he can’t stand it if one of hios brothers is better at him in som…
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