Cahndida Serkhaman

I would change some things…

The first verse… not sure what to suggest, but it sounds a little off from the rest of the poem. “And made Him so mad” is a huge understatement, which might work fine for this poem, but this line could be a lot stronger.
“Some seven of, some two” would sound better written as “Some of seven, some of two.”
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