Audrey Caylin

*is jealous* Well, I’m doing school, but I’m here with you in spirit, Gabby. @winter-rose

And this one is for the sequel to Sector One: Insurrection.
Her name is Dyemon.
And she’s awesome.

@catwing To be honest, I want to read it too. *sigh* Now I have to finish writing this trilogy to get there….
Little details: There’s a hat, a jet and a party.
Eventually, it will have beta-readers. Eventually…

@catwing I like the second one too, and I like the suggestions @perfectfifths has made. I would read the book based on that blurb, which is ultimately what you want!

@catwing I prefer your second version heaps, it’s more… blurby. And I also really like the few little tweaks that @perfectfifths made. *thumbs up* Good job!

@Catwing well I was away last night and this morning, so I failed to see this until just now, sorry. xD Looks like you’ve have lots of great advice though. 😀
I second what Louise said–her rewritten synopsis of suggestions is basically what I would’ve said myself. 😛

@mariposa So glad you asked! 😀
It’s a Utopian Science Fiction, the setting is Earth in the 22nd century.

@Shannon @Emily good to hear!

You guys these are so awesome!!! Great job all!
*steeples fingers* And now thou have all inspired me to make another.
I give you a collage for a new book which will be a standalone that I probably won’t get to until next year (AAAAHHHH WHY? GRR!) Anyway, yes. I absolutely cannot wait to write it and I think it’ll probably be my most thematically…[Read more]

@Aislinn-Mollisong got it. 🙂 You did mention that you weren’t going to use that in the final, but I wanted to make sure. They’re fine to use for fun, but if you’re going to use them commercially in any way… yep. Copyrights. 😉

Awesome! Show it to me when you’re done.

@Aislinn-mollisong it looks great, but I’ve seen that image floating around and I’m pretty sure it’s not free; did you find the artist and ask for copyright license?

But as far as composition and layout, it looks great. The only thing is you might want to consider a slightly bolder, straighter font. Something more in tune with the fantasy mood.

Here’s a link to an article I found: https://www.hunker.com/12587271/what-cuts-through-steel

@ethryndal

@that_writer_girl_99 I’m actually very interested to know what you found out…

You know you’re a writer when you google to see what kinds of materials can cut through steel… @dragon-snapper @ethryndal @kate-flournoy

@Emily @Shannon I’ll definitely be praying for your vacation!

Okay @catwing, I’ve re-pasted this below for you to see if that works any better in your mind without changing any words.

Jack, Alex, Cele, John, Chase, and Amelia are not normal.

Even before they met a mysterious messenger, who says they have to save Allore by finding three jewels and giving them to the king. But the king was said to have…

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@catwing a lot of people have already put in their opinions, but I just wanted to add my two cents worth. I personally think there are too many people mentioned in your blurb. Its confusing. I don’t know how you’ve written the story, but do you have one or two characters that are more main than the rest? If you do, I would rewrite it like…[Read more]

Farewell @Aislinn-mollisong

@Catwing okay, see you!! *salutes*

I’m gonna tag @daeus because he’ll probably be able to tell you more than I can.

In my opinion, this is a bit too long, and it reveals a bit too much about the story. I can’t tell you how or where to cut, but that’s just my thought. You want to keep a bit of the story to reveal later, right?