Ariel Ashira

@rochellaine It does sound a little bit rambly. Which I don’t mind since I know the person who wrote it. But if I just picked up a random book at a bookstore or library I think it would annoy me a little and I wouldn’t finish it. I do like the main character though and i’m curious as to what happens next!
“She looked scared at me.  I was scared,…[Read more]

@rochellaine It’s interesting to read, and feels nicely connected to the narrator. It’s a little bit too rambling for me, though. I would like it more if it had more focus and streamline. Also, Joshua is a really funny character XD 😀

@jenwriter17 I haven’t really read modern dystopia, but I do get the impression that it has lost something it used to have. Namely, all the early dystopias were prophesies. The authors looked at the culture around them and, knowing what they did of mankind, civilization, and technology, they constructed a model of the future that they thought was…[Read more]

@emily-d

I love Lauren Daigle! Whats your favorite song by her? Mine is hands down salt and light. So beautiful <3
I also like for king and country and casting crowns a lot 🙂 Rend collective is a christian band who happens to be Irish 🙂 (I noticed Irish/Celtic music coming up a lot)

@rochellaine  I like it! I love how casual the narrator sounds. Except he sounds a little too bumbly to me. It’s an interesting story, but I think I would cut out some of the “bumbling” if you know what I mean. That would make it much more interesting in my opinion. But then again, I personally favor action. What can I say? *shrug*

Anyway, I…[Read more]

@clairec  Hehe, do you like biology? I think it’s cool! What have you dissected?

@waterlily  Haha, that’s perfect! I might use that… Ohh, unless you’re already using it, which is fine XD

@clairec  She said she did it when she was eight or something, so I doubt it

*looks at fish brain picture*  Eww…..  Cooooooooooll

(I like biology XP )

@rochellaine  Oh, that’s funny!! Good signature choice! 😉

@mnvalentine  Okay! I’ll write an article!! Not sure about the book though XD

@audrey-caylin No, your response wasn’t confusing at all! Very helpful, actually. 👍Thank you for all your advice, I have been considering a pen name….

@gh24682468999 Thank you too!

@skredder Thanks! I’ll continue to look for ways I can make my story more unique.

@aratrea I’ll look forward to that video!!!

@jenwriter17 Ha. I actually have a KP Cinema video about cliches in dystopian novels coming out sometime this month. xD So a lot of my “advice” would be in there. I wouldn’t say oppressive governments are cliched because they’re required for that genre, but I would recommend studying classic dystopias like Animal Farm, Fahrenheit 451, Brave New…[Read more]

@jenwriter17 I’m not sure about cliches specifically, but some of the things that I’ve seen pretty often in this genre are: having family members on both sides of the fight, the reluctant hero, family members of the MC being killed (reasons vary), bad guy who thinks they are doing the right thing for the majority, having a hero in the lower-class,…[Read more]

@seekjustice I love reading a Scottish accent!  🙂

You said your sequel will be based on A Tale of Two Cities?  Doesn’t everyone die in the end of that one, too?

@rochellaine

Okay, I’m sorry that I misinterpreted you! I’m glad we’re in agreement on this. I’ll attempt to explain it all better as I revise it. And yes, I definitely tried to portray Justice as unhealthily obsessed with his country (at this point, he doesn’t believe in God, no).

Yes, that all made sense! And no, I don’t believe that all…[Read more]