Ariel Ashira

@rochellaine I didn’t notice the change in style, actually. Except for the fact that there was more going on and less internal monologue. There are still pieces of narration that seem to go on for too long, mostly in the first half. To streamline things more, you could have the narrator only talk about things that directly pertain to what’s…[Read more]

@supermonkey42 If you really want to know. 🙂 The book is about international business and the specific chapter I’m reading is “The Legal and Political Environment of Global Business.” The first part regarding political systems was kinda interesting, but I started losing interest when they moved on to bribes, corruption, risks, and laws.

@supermonkey42 Welllll…there are parts that are interesting. The part that I’m reading though, not so much.

I don’t suppose that reading a textbook would count for this, would it?

@sam-kowal I had to read Tale of Two Cities for school. I recently finished York by Laura Ruby and Merlin’s Blade by Robert Treskillard. It’s really cool ’cause my family used to go to church with Mr. Treskillard.

@seekjustice Thank you! I will keep all these things in mind.

@dekreel This could be a good place to talk about great books and book recommendations, too.

Recently, I’ve read A Tale of Two Cities by Charles Dickens, The Rithmatist by Brandon Sanderson, and Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland.

@rochellaine

Its fun, isn’t it? I like talking in an Irish accent 🙂

Funnily enough, only one main character (and the antagonist) die.

@jenwriter17

Oppressive governments aren’t necessarily a cliche, they’re actually a requirement (or less, a complete lack of government), some cliches though would be:

MC is “different” (Divergent, maybe? ;P)

Rebellions ALWAYS work

Communist or Socialist governments. Any type of government can go wrong, so you could try exploring something…[Read more]

@clairec

@that_writer_girl_99

@dekreel I think this is a cool idea! I’m like @sam-kowal though; hopefully I’ll remember this while I’m reading.

Anyway, I’m reading Centurion’s Wife and Creating Character Arcs. I kinda want to finish The Centurion’s Wife by the end of this coming week, but I’m only halfway.

@audrey-caylin I really like your pen name! I think you look like an Audrey too, but I may think that just ’cause that’s the only name I’ve ever known you by 😉

@dekreel 😀 This is a great idea. The problem with me is that I get sort of immersed in the things I’m reading and don’t pay attention to anything else.

@supermonkey42 That’s a cool book.  How far are you in it? (I’ve never actually read it, but I know the story pretty well.)

@dekreel I think that’s a great idea! I don’t read nearly enough either.

I’ve never read Richard III.  The only thing I know from that is “My kingdom for a horse!” (At least, I think it’s from that one.)  I’ve read a lot of other Shakespeare, though.  Have you read any of his other plays?

Okay, here is a somewhat updated version of my story with another bit as long as the first tacked on at the end. The second half is a little more story and less ramble.  I tried to fix a couple of parts some of you mentioned, such as more description, and a little bit of dialogue, and I’d like to know how you think this new version turned out.  A…[Read more]

@skredder  Makes sense. I’ll see if I can make it more clear 🙂

@dekreel Sure thing! First was at the beginning. It took me a wee bit to figure out there were three people in the conversation. And when they were talking about being on Pekkore. I think that’s about it.