Ariel Ashira

@jenwriter17 Please do!  I’m glad you like it!  And I will need a lot more advice before I can make this story as clean and smooth as it should be.

Here is the link again, in case it’s hard to find in all the posts going back and forth here.

@sam-kowal Thanks for your comments.

Are his recollections about his street life irrelevant to what is happening?  I wanted to have them in there so you get a little bit of his background, and he uses them to explain why he acts certain ways.

@waterlily I actually agree. 🙂  I never use this type of voice, which is why I posted it here, be…[Read more]

@rochellaine Ah! Thank you, thank you, thank you! I will fix that straight away! 🙂

@skredder I told you before that I thought the idea was a good one. 🙂  The opening you posted sounds great, except for the fact that in the very first couple of sentences I had to read them several times before I figured out who was talking.  I thought the little six-year-old girl was the one who had been gone, which obviously wouldn’t make s…[Read more]

@warrenluther04 Sure! Do you have certain things you like to draw? People? Animals? Chibis? If you want you can post some of your artwork too. I’m going to too, once I figure out a few technical problems….

@alia Oooh. This is a really cool question.

There are a lot of approaches you could take with this. Most importantly, I think you need to think outside the box. Maybe that means reading more widely within the fantasy genre for inspiration. It definitely means asking yourself what if questions.

One suggestion is to make God an antagonist for a…[Read more]

@jenwriter17 Can I join in? I can only really draw manga…but I’m not very good.

Currently reading my history book

@rochellaine I actually really this style of writing! That casualness of it…. I also agree with what Dekreel said.

Could I critique it in Goggle docs too?

@that_writer_girl_99 Thank you! 🙂

@mariposa Yeeees, EPIC! You MUST watch the Star Wars movies!!!!!! If you don’t want to watch them all, watch at least the last three maybe. But the story might make more sense if you watch all the older ones too because there’s a lot of set up and backstory and stuff. Your mind will be blown!

@skredder yeah it’s nice to have family you can trust to kinda critique our work ❤

@gh24682468999 Oooooooh, that makes tagging you easier ☺

Sorry those picture places didn’t work for you…

@dekreel Those are good! I really like the girl

@perfectfifths Your drawing looks really good too! And a bow and arrow in anything gets my stamp of approval 😉

@mariposa I love the Aberdeen comics though!!!

@dragon-snapper I kind of like Evelyn, but I think I’m gonna go with something shorter

@jane-maree Yup, I’ll have to flip open those baby names books!

@jenwriter17 Thank you! I’m glad you liked it! 🙂

I showed this beginning and the beginning of another story to my mom today too and she liked both of them. I really trust her opinion when it comes to my writing, so I’m pretty happy about all of it.

@dekreel Yay! Yeah proportions are a struggle for me. when i look back at some of my drawings, i laugh and cringe at the same time.

hmm…..you want to see some manga, you say……don’t expect too much. I’ll try to post a picture or two soon. I took pictures of my drawings on my tablet, but for some reason moving pics from there to my laptop…[Read more]

@jenwriter17  For good measure…….

I drew this one (below) for a character Xchange:

And finally, one of my absolute favorite villains of all time…

I do have better examples, I just happen to not have pictures of them 😛

@itisastarrynight Well, of course you don’t wanna info dump, but try to weave in parts throughout the story. Maybe just hint at what happened to your MC’s past that’s making him hurt.

I think it’s realistic to be affected like this after someone close to you has died. You never forget them. They visit your thoughts still every so often. Accepting…[Read more]