Ariel Ashira

@alia Well, window scenes don’t mean as much to you as they do to me. 😉  I tell my sister, “If some guy ever asks you how to make me like him, tell him to talk to me through a window.” 😛  I don’t know, there’s just something really romantic about window scenes, to me.  Mostly from the Patty Fairfield series.

@seekjustice I don’t know the ba…[Read more]

@seekjustice, aren’t we all? Confused by our own writings I mean.

Hey, maybe he was flirting with her in the same way she flirted with him was so that she wouldn’t like him like that. Yep, thats my theory and I’m sticking with it

@seekjustice

I like him as a character. I think what you’ve done with him is interesting. As a person though… I find him really cold and stiff in SFI. I don’t know what Chessy sees in him. I think it runs in the family. Chessy, Sapphire, Jean… they all seem to have really bad taste and judgment when it comes to relationships. I don’t think h…[Read more]

@alia Let me repeat! I wasn’t trying to get anyone to ship anyone through the window scene. Also I’m still confused by Justice’s attempts to flirt with Chessy because all attempts for anyone to flirt with him in the first book met with zero success.

The amount of things that confuse me about my own book confuses me.

@rochellaine

Well, Enjolras actually seems like a balanced mixture of no-nonsense, sense, briskness and actual…politeness. Justice lacks politeness. and sense. and basically everything other than revolutionary fervour.

In fairness, the original window scene was entirely a practical thing. A…[Read more]

@rochellaine, well I guess @seekjustice failed with getting me to ship them through the window scene, because I like them as friends and really hope Chessy gets over liking him and he gets over liking her because I really like them as friends, but not as a couple. I don’t know, its just something about them together doesn’t appeal to me

@seekjustice Remember, @jenwriter17 shipped Justice and Chessy, so she must have liked him a bit. 😉

(speaking to your comment to @valtmy )

@seekjustice I don’t think he needs to be a copy of another character.  Like we discussed once, your characters are mix and matches of all the different characters from the original.  So if the “glory of Enjolras” as you call it, doesn’t get fully portrayed in Justice, maybe some of it shows up in the other characters.

The characters that are e…[Read more]

@valtmy

Your opinions on Justice? Did you like him or not?

(Did anyone like Justice excepting my sister?)

@rochellaine, wait, he didn’t? Never mind, ignore what I said then I thought he did and that annoyed me, but if it was all what other people saw then it makes sense and is fine.

(but I still didn’t like him as a person, that I know)

@seekjustice @rochellaine @alia

Hey guys. I’m here now.

Ooh a discussion on SFI which I can actually participate in now…

@rochellaine @alia

Oooh, I love conflicting opinions! 😛

Personally, I believe he was too emotionless in the first book and waaay too angsty in the second. Neither side of Justice quite captures the glory of Enjolras, which was what I was going for.

@alia He didn’t have his own POV in book one, so that’s not a problem, right? 😉  In book two, we were introduced to a man broken by the deaths of nearly all his followers who was struggling with his newfound faith and his impossibly horrible memories.  I felt the drastic change was very realistic, especially once we got to know his backstory.  So…[Read more]

@rochellaine, I agree with you on the most part, but I just didn’t feel much realisticness from him in his own POV

@seekjustice Actually, contrary to what @alia said, I felt Justice was very realistic.  He was stiff, and I pretty much despised him, but I despised him as a human, not as a badly written character, because I thought he was very well written.

I hope you don’t humanize him too much in the revisions, because it would ruin his character.

Little…[Read more]

@seekjustice, I get him appearing like that in someone else’s POV, but when it was like that in his too is when it started bothering me a bit.

Yeah, I don’t think they care much about honouring (yes auto correct there is a u in honour) their parents. 😉

great.

@alia

Yep, in a nutshell 😀

@alia

I think that’s the way he’s supposed to appear for the most part, but hopefully I’m making him more human in the second draft.

Well, I think that taken out of context it fits them both perfectly. They aren’t so much wanting to be better in order to honour their parents, though, but rather to prove themselves. So its a bit different, but…[Read more]

@seekjustice, @rochellaine, just to be clear, beta readers are kind of what y’all are doing with @valtmy ‘s and what you did with Seekjustice’s book, right? where you read it part by part and critique it?