ArcticAnimals

@rae

Oh, I also read your scene for Chase’s book. Don’t really have any comments, but I like it. Nice title, too.

@rae

I read your scene, and overall, I think it’s really good. I’m not very good at critiquing, but I did want to mention just a couple things I noticed.

One, Mandin said it would take Nahim several minutes to defeat an opponent with a sword. Exchanges with swords actually usually last for a handful of seconds.

(Btw, do you have an in-…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Mm. Yeah, I guess it’s not bad at all then! 🙂🙂

@ellette-giselle

woah….

It definitely does sound interesting.

I feel like them talking out all of their plans for a whole chapter/prologue isn’t the most… eye catching… at least in my opinion…

But then again, I feel like this could set up for the following chapter pretty well—especially if the next one jumps right in a bit.

I also agree with…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I like this chapter a lot! (And the one you shared before it—I meant to reply to that one but I didn’t have a moment 😅)

Cassian is a good friend! 😍❤️❤️

Um… I know you were asking Ellette… but I don’t think your chapters are cringey.

@keilah-h

lol XD XD

Wait a second… is there no firework emoji??

@ellette-giselle

Happy 4th of July!! 😃😄

@ellette-giselle

I think I’ve decided on a character but I’m still trying to write an adequate description for you. So I should be finished at some point today or maybe tomorrow.

Your drawing of Shadow’s character looks sooo good!

@anyone…

heh heh… I made a board for Tsunami Sayre (Flazzy’s mom). Not fully sure that I like it, but it’ll work for now. 😊😊

@savannah_grace2009

Aww, I love that chapter. Sef and Lilitu are adorable.

@freed_and_redeemed

Awh. Don’t crush my hopes like that! I was so happy for Leon before I got to the end. 😠

Im kidding, but seriously. He was so close… 😭😭

@savannah_grace2009

Awwwwww, that is so cute!! I like how you’re connecting the families in this chapter.

“Hi!” she smiled at him. “Do you want to be friends? Look at my drawing! My name’s Sef, what’s your name?”

The boy sat down next to her. “What is it?” he tilted his head to the side, staring at the drawing.

Sef was offended. How c…

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@theshadow

Ellette nailed it. I pretty much would have said the same thing (if I could articulate it that well, which I could not)