Aranel

@esther-c

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you want some ideas or need a brainstorming partner just lmk!

I will!!! TYSM!!! 🙃

Yes I totally get it!! You definitely don’t have to go through and try to fix everything in the first draft 🥴

ahhhh hahaha yeah, I’d definitely get in trouble with @ellette-giselle if I did that…. (jk jk h…[Read more]

@esther-c

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

Glad I was able to help!!!!!

I do love your dialogue though…you’re so talented in that area!!! Just maybe breaking it up would help A LOT. Because too much o…[Read more]

@stephie

I feel like it totally depends on the situation.

Though, at least for me, something doesn’t feel right about saying “your religion is wrong and false.” Because that tends to get people defensive and push them away from Jesus. I feel way more comfortable with saying “I believe that there is only one God….(etc…)” and just sharing what…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sorry I’m just now getting to this!!!!

My main critique would be that you spend a lot of time on dialogue. I kind of feel like we just got thrown into the story and all we know about the characters is because of what they say. Maybe breaking up some dialogue and really showing us who they characters are would help…it kind of feels l…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

tbh, I am also confused about the teachings  XD And I do wonder why. But also I get this feeling of fullness after going to confession. So whatever it is, I think I am going to stick to it! Also  thanks for the prayers. I won’t be able to get back to anyone for a while btw. I AM GOING SKIING! ^o^

I agree, it does help to tell oth…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

okay hahahaha sounds good lol

@whalekeeper

no I haven’t!!!

Doesn’t everyone have at least a fragment of virtue though? (Sorry, I don’t mean to shut down everything you’re saying, this is just my thoughts. 😅) I’m not saying they have to be someone that the readers will look up to and be like, “Oh my word I want to be just like them.” I understand mankind is sinful and there probably are people out there t…

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@esther-c

Now, you mentioned your characters not knowing God. And I liked how you put that—“without God there is no hope.” But…you have to think that these characters are probably looking for hope, right? Even just an occasional thought of wishing there was a way out of this darkness they’re living in.

So I know with where they’re at right now,…

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@esther-c

I also hope I didn’t come across as rude or brushing you off…I really do appreciate your thoughts because that means I need to work on foreshadowing! And explaining my book to others helps me flesh out my thoughts a little more! Thank you so much! <3

@esther-c

Ok, so the biggest thing I noticed was the lack of hope throughout the story. The characters seemed to think about death a lot and were put through a lot of physical pain. There’s nothing inherently wrong with that, but it needs to be balanced out with hope. When I got to read those Lilitu/Sef memories from when they were little, that w…

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@the_lost-journal

correct, the priest isn’t forgiving the sins. It is God.

*is confused* If you know it’s God forgiving the sins, then why do you guys go to confession to a priest at all? Why not just ask God?

I’m sorry if that sounded rude…I don’t mean it that way, I’m just very confused and trying to understand.

And about mega churches, my c…[Read more]

@esther-c

I’m so sorry, I forgot about this!!!!

I think it’s a new day, so where do you want to continue? XD

@esther-c

are you looking for critiques? Or just posting for fun?

I just wanted to make sure…I don’t want to assume you want critiques if you’re just wanting to share it with us! 🙃

Saraaaa… 🥹 Girl you’re so sweet.

I’M SERIOUS…I LOVE IT SO MUCH

@esther-c

That’s so funny…My sister Hallie’s nickname is Hal…we call her that all the time XDXD

When she was little we used to call her HalPal…we don’t really use that anymore but I laugh remembering that, it was pretty cute hahaha

@freed_and_redeemed

girl I need you to write that book!!!

MUST. HAVE. MORE. FANTASY.

🤭🤭🤭

@esther-c

girllll

i love thissss

Keep writing ✨✨

@esther-c

Girllll, you’re so sweet!!! 🤪🥰 Seriously, your reaction really means a lot. 😊

Awwww ofccc!!!!

That was actually kinda my goal—I wanted this story to be someone’s comfort book, because I loosely based a few aspects of it off of my comfort books. (I’m not stealing any of that author’s ideas, I promise!!! just some of the vibes in certain s…

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But just to clarify, I don’t really ever listen to secular music. I only want to listen to music that glorifies God!