Anne of Lothlorien

@emma-flournoy Good point. ‘She leapt over the fence and cried out in pain as her hair caught in the wire’s deadly barbs. Grunting with frustration, she drew her knife and with one quick slash, the tangled orange mass was left behind.’
True about the muttering… Weird. In my actual document, I don’t have a comma after ‘Aunt’. Must’ve been a typo.

@that_writer_girl_99 Oh, tell me about it. I am such a perfectionist.

Numero 5. *jaw drops*
@that_writer_girl_99 I should probably do the same.

Hello @Moriahs! Welcome aboard!! Do you know your MBTI personality type?

@f5a8c3e92 I’m coming! Haven’t had time to do this yet.
But now that I’m here, I have something really helpful to say: what everyone else said. *sheepish grin* I know, that’s resounding, but there you have it. Most of what everyone else said I was thinking too, especially concerning the info-dump-ishness of the stuff about her having lived with…[Read more]

@christi-eaton Yes, Slade Wilson. I don’t watch Arrow, but I’m a huge DC nerd.

@christi-wilson Yes, Slade Wilson. I don’t watch Arrow, but I’m a huge DC nerd.

@Northerner *chains the bear up* ‘e won’t get out for some time yet. Now go forth and conquer.
(Btw, @Kate-Flournoy just almost lost that stuff, but we were able to fix it in time. After great stomachache. Otherwise…*coughcough* her computer might have suffered great damage from a certain being.)

@Christi-Eaton That’s an amazing drawing, but what I really noticed is how much the face looks like yours. Seeing it right next to your profile pic…the resemblance is striking. Other than that she’s not smiling, but if she were I think it would almost match perfectly.

@f5a8c3e92 YES. Much better. *thumbs up* Notice how the details ground you.
And I think it would be really cool for that to be part of Maya’s dream. Go for it. 😀

@daeus @winter-rose @kate-flournoy @jane-maree Could you guys tell me if you think it’s a good idea to make Halle part of Maya’s daydream? Please note that they will meet in person at the Academy in a few chapters. Here’s an update on the Prologue:
Halle’s heart raced. They’re coming. They’re coming for me. Her hair flew out behind her, blend…[Read more]

@daeus @winter-rose @kate-flournoy Tell me if you guys like the idea of Halle’s prologue being a dream-sequence of Maya’s. She’ll be meeting Maya herself at the Academy, so… I don’t know. Any other opinions are most welcome. Here is an updated version of the prologue:
Halle’s heart raced. They’re coming. They’re coming for me. Her ginger hair…[Read more]

@christi-eaton *crashes in through ceiling* …Did you say… Slade?!!!

@winter-rose Yeah, the prologue… I’m still trying to incorporate properly into the story. I have just come up with a brilliant idea! What if that sequence with Halle was part of Maya’s daydreaming and she is a character in her story? (However, Halle will be coming in later, as she turns out to be one of Maya’s classmates at the new school she’s…[Read more]

@MoriahS Hello there, fellow North Carolinian! Welcome to KP! What are your favorite books? 😀

@Christi-Eaton thanks. 😉

@Jane-maree Whoops, I forgot to respond to this! Thanks. I’m okay with outlining, I just don’t want to be bored out of my mind! 🙂

@Jenali I wrote about 1,500 words, so I’m leaving. Happy writing!

@Jenali, just saw this. I’ll actually be writing for another twenty minutes now. 🙂

@f5a8c3e92 I like this.
*switches into professional mode* Your prose is stronger than a lot I’ve seen, and you show a lot of promise with dialogue and characterization. Your sense of flow and pacing does seem to be a bit off— the prologue was too short and vague, for one. It didn’t connect me to the story, which is what a prologue is for. I…[Read more]