Hannah

‘Our questions and our empty words’

Hey… Daeus is starting to use LotR references… must be a good sign… 😉

Good topic, Hope. Daeus got a lot of it, but one thing I would mention is that a quick, very effective way to make someone’s speech sound old fashioned is to play with the sentence structure. Reverse it. It’ll still make sense, but it’ll have a very distinct flavor. For…[Read more]

Oooo, jetpacks; I’d not thought of those either. I’ll have to see…

I’ve done that in a trilogy I’m writing…the MC’s view is in first person, present tense, and occasionally I write chapters from other character’s views in third person, past tense. It actually flows together even better than I’d hoped and I really like it for the style of book I’m writing. I’ve seen it in published books too (the switching of…[Read more]

“Though sometimes we do question ‘why?'”

Interesting idea… though to some people it might be seen as almost cheating. Because in giving yourself a certain set POV, you’re setting yourself rules to work with. There’s a certain satisfaction to making a scene work in a POV that it’s hard it work in.
Not sure if your average reader would have issues reading that sort of thing, but I have…[Read more]

Personally I prefer both reading and writing 3rd person. I like to develop all the characters on an intimate level, and you can’t get that level of character development with 1st person.

You can get good development with 1st person, it’s just you need a LOT more material to do it. You can’t show a simple scene through each character’s POV.…[Read more]

‘For all things live, and and all things die’

‘To know that Love, and see that Love’

Hm, first I thought this was going to be a nature poem, but why not go with both?
So what do we have so far?

‘When Autumn winds excite the leaves
and whisper through the fading grass,
When raindrops tumble off the eaves,
Then, I feel at home.

For wind and rain and leaf and tree
speak of Love much greater…[Read more]

The good thing about 1st person is that you get to know your MC really well and see everything through their eyes. But if you have a large cast and want to switch views occasionally, that might not be the best thing.
I like 3rd person better for most things, but 1st is more to-the-point.
What aspects do you have to this book? Is it more one…[Read more]

Question for a scene of my own. If a young man (around 17) has grown up in the mountains after his mother died not long after his birth, and was raised by a man who he loved (and who died around a year ago, at which point this young man was captured and imprisoned)…anyway, moving on, he ends up finding his real father and speaking to him for the…[Read more]

‘For wind and rain and leaf and tree’

This is going to be either a crowning achievement or a crowning mess. Who cares which one? The point is to do it. This is fun!

Great job, Sarah! It almost looks like it could be a song.
Don’t enter it in the lyrics contest, though. That would be…. very strange.

“When raindrops tumble off the eaves”

Dang, only one line at a time?

Oops— whisper, not whispers. Sorry.

‘You know you’re a writer when you have pages and pages of sentences and ideas for stories that you will write someday.’

YES.

Normal people have no idea…

“And whispers through the fading grass”

Good idea, Daeus. This should be at once ridiculously fun and instructive.

So…any comments about how realistic it would be for a laser weapon with a certain range; where it is lethal inside that range but evaporates or something once it reaches a preset distance?