Hannah

@Daeus— Verily, saidst thou? Pray, what is this verily of which thou speakest, brother? Methinks thou dost speak of some… some word of olden times, but alas! I have no skill in the understanding of such antiquated languages… thy ‘verily’ hath quite overcome me…

*claps hand over mouth, smothers hysterical snicker*

Sorry, couldn’t resist. 😉

It’s quite beautiful— love the title! A few lines I would change, just for the sake of better rhythm. The first is

Spotlights shine on the scene

I would just replace ‘on’ with ‘upon’. And the last line of that stanza… I’m not sure which would work better, or if either would work best at all. You might try saying something about a ‘dream’…[Read more]

Hey, glad it was helpful guys! I should just start a topic called ‘mistakes’ and post all the writing mistakes I make in that one. 😉

@Jadamae… well… I’ve got several lined up already, but I’m not about to turn anyone away if they’re interested… 😀 I just hate shoving my work off on other people so I don’t like to ask. 😛 😉

KeePers of the Kingdom? 😉

Grace, peace, and high word counts to you, my brothers! And… er… sisters.

*laughs hysterically*

That’s awesome, @Daeus!

Nope. Didn’t work. I’ll just give you the link. https://www.pinterest.com/pin/341710690457182648/

Love it, @bluejay! Looking at that prompt, I couldn’t decide whether it was a sword on his back or the pipes of a bagpipe. 😛 I ended up not mentioning it at all, and I guess that was fine. 😉

Now let’s see if I can figure out the ‘image’ setting so I can post the picture and you can actually see what I’m talking about. Here goes…

@kate-flournoy, Good to know! I know I’ve said this before, but thanks for sharing your mistakes with us so we don’t make the same ones. 🙂 Congratulations on finishing your novel!!!!!

@kate-flournoy Yeah, totally get that. One thing I’ve started the habit of doing is keeping a list of all the little things that could become important later. Never just let it drop when the character sticks something in their pocket, meets a stranger or something little like that. 😛

@bluejay, The suspense is killing me! What happens to the man? XD

@writefury, what a great idea!

@Daeus, Oh my word, that’s an awesome name! 🙂

@daeus YESSSS XD
But we do need an entrance ceremony or something, @faithdk. I’ll get on that. 😉

Haha, we were posting at the same time. Yes, it’s really good. We should do it again tomorrow, around the same time. (Actually I won’t be able to do it in the morning, {for me} maybe the afternoon {for me})
Yes, I think it worked. My fingers have never flown so fast. 😛

@daeus How did you go? Believe it or not I finished a first draft on a new short story. I’ve called it ‘A Ticking Bomb.’ It will be interesting to see what the rest of my family (mainly my mum who is my editor) think of it. It was fun to do though. 🙂
It’s kind of weird to think that two people who have never met and live on opposite sides of the…[Read more]

@daeus me too. Good luck! 😛

@daeus. YES! We made contact. Yeah I can do that. (Which story should I work on???) 😀 This is going to be interesting. Three minutes to go….two minutes to go…..

@sarah-h No I haven’t read that book. I should. 😀
@daeus Thanks. I’ll see what I can come up with. 🙂

The fog drifted silently through the trees creating ghostly objects. The rider sat motionless, only his moving eyes revealed that he was alive. Every now and then his horse shook its mane and the jingle of the metal parts of its bridle resounded in the silence. Suddenly the horse jerked up its big head. The crunch of snow under heavy feet could be…[Read more]

Yep that would work. I could even mention a check list here. Thank you. 😀 😉 And “check” would work.
So glad you enjoyed it. It is definitely one of my favourites. 😀

Thank you all. I have pretty much figured out what to do. Do you think that (based upon Disney Aladdin) would they have had stalls/shops like that in Noah’s day? I have no idea how to find out. What are your views?