Allison

@jonas

Wow…this is a lot to think about and really helpful! Thank you!!

I don’t think there’s anything wrong with it as it is, it really evokes a certain mood, and has really strong imagery.

Okay good XD

Yeah, the first line of the book is always the hardest because that’s how the readers decide whether or not to keep reading!

These three par…

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@theshadow

It’s all about why the darkness is there. Top questions when reading something dark: Is this melodramatic? If so, what does that say about the writer’s reasons for including it? What practical reason does the writer have for including it, if at all?

Tbh I see no problem with big bombs in a story, I have one in my project. It’s a magic…[Read more]

@theshadow

Ellette nailed it. I pretty much would have said the same thing (if I could articulate it that well, which I could not)

@loopylin

Ooh, I love those ones.

@loopylin

*agonizes over question*

Mmm… I think it’s Big Sky, MT for me, but there are so many great ones it’s really hard to pick. I’ve never heard one of their songs I didn’t love. How about yours?

I want to help a little bit more since you appreciated my help before! 😋 So I mostly had the same thoughts as Jonas. The greatest enjoyment I got from the prologue was the twist from ‘we’re doing this to save the baby’ to ‘what’s this baby doing here?’ That was great.

I only have a couple extra notes.

Please, Jesus, save my son, he begged, ref…

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@savannah_grace2009

Aww that’s so sweet of you! 🥰 I’m honored to be called out in the acknowledgements, thank you so much!!

Teleportation is no longer something Seb can do. I realized it isn’t true to his character, more so when he gets older. Umm since he could teleport earlier in this roleplay, we can say he was given a 24 hour teleportation ability to get to the school. 👍

@loopylin

Marcel

The other boy shrugged. “I don’t care as long as I’m not there for the romance part.”

@savannah_grace2009

(EDIT: this took longer than I thought, so I only got through he prologue. I’ll do chapter 1 tomorrow and chapter 2 on Wednesday.)

Alright, here’s some feedback. I’m just reading through and commenting as I go. As a warning for anyone else reading this, there may be spoilers in what I say here, since I’m familiar with much o…[Read more]

@loopylin

Hey I wrote additional stuff if this helps 😛

Marcel

Before Lois could react, Marcel broke down into soft chuckles. “Nah… everyone’s a fool. Hey. If you think a romantic skyline would do the job -“

A business venture suddenly occurred to him. He positioned his body to block the other students from sight, as if selling somethi…[Read more]

@rae

Aww that’s so sad 😭

WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME

@princesachronicle22 that’s good with me! I’ll wait for someone else to RP.

I expect it to have twice that many pages by the time I’m done.

@whalekeeper the thing about the TF2 fandom is that everything, and I mean everything, is so heavily memed that I can find an answer meme to virtually any question

so in answer to “how did I start writing that fanfic”…..

this was an actual line. from their medic who SHOULD know what he’s doing but doesn’t because he’s a total psychopath.

@ellette-giselle LOL

@linus-smallprint ahh ok

@rae ok scratch that. But I would like a picture of at least the species Tenz is (or if he’s a hybrid, images of each creature he’s a hybrid of) if you have any.

By the way, when’s the deadline?

@rae nice job!!