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@sleepwalkingmk Nice! I’ve put in a couple of comments on the actual doc for you. 🙂

@sleepwalkingmk *grins ear to ear* This is so sweet!! Let’s see… I like how you set the scene, but I also think you should spend more time talking about what the narrator is thinking. It’s a little idle right now, talking mostly about the things going on around her. It’s still awesome though! Also, “a while” is one word: “awhile.” 🙂

Nice job!! 😉

@xonos-darkgrate  My dad was laid off too! We’re in this together!! 😁😉 Anyways, yeah I’ll definitely pray for you!

Whenever I begin my stories, I like to build a sense of intrigue. Ending the first part in a mystery or subtle cliffhanger that’ll make the reader want to read/find out more.

Hey, guys. Praying for you ALL! (too many tags to count.. :p )

Anyways, my dad recently got laid off, so if you guys could pray for him to get a new job soon, that’d be great!

Also, my family is going to visit some friends. (They’re part of a ministry you guys might know).

Please pray that my family will get there safely and that things will go…[Read more]

Nope, the whole scene there was supposed to connect to something, but I didn’t post that part.  I don’t really do scenes like that for no reasons.

@ingridrd  I missed this 😛  Nice! I like how you showed the different backgrounds 🙂

@leumeister  Well, we know for sure that the green one’s name is Rafael 😀

@epicaddie2 Continuing to pray! <3

@alia This is cute! I like the story! I think you could tweak some of the lines, so they don’t sound too short and choppy, but other than that, it’s awesome 🙂

@cindygreen Good idea! Why didn’t I think of that?!

@supermonkey42  @princessfoo Thank you!! 😉

@ingridrd  *licks chops* Ooh! Is it that good that it deserves cake?? 😀

I put some thought into it, and I came to this conclusion:

Darkness and things like that, (that’s not over-the-top-described), are acceptable in a story IF it is clearly portrayed the Darkness and the Light.  Basically, writing for God or something like that?

The theme of The Hole In the Brick wall is superheroes, but the moral is sort of the q…[Read more]

“In time, you will know what it is like to lose.  To feel so desperately that you are right and fail all the same.”

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“Fun isn’t something one considers when balancing the universe, but this” *chuckle* “does put a smile on my face.”

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“I was designed… to save the world.  People would look up to the skies and see… hope. I’ll take that f…[Read more]

@xonos-darkgrate

Hey!
So I haven’t read the thing, because I’m a bit of a ‘link-a-phobe’ (not you, just the internet), but my main thoughts are dark themes and darkness in literature in general is that if you’re not comfortable showing it to someone close to you, like your mom or dad or brother or sister or best friend, then it may have gone to…[Read more]

Awesome topic! We have something just like it on another forums I go to! 😀

Anyways, I don’t really have time to read through everything, but I hope you don’t mind if I join right in.

Is it okay if we quote famous people too? Or is this just movies and TV?  Either way, I’ve got a lot of awesome quote from my favorite characters. Mostly…[Read more]

I think that Camille, Raphael, and Kenneth are the best.  I mean, it just makes sense in my mind that robots posing to be normal people would have less conspicuous names.  Not that they aren’t good or anything, I think that the other options are great, but I don’t think that they fit the hiding robots well.

Hey, guys.  Here’s another question.  It’s not the same thing, but to reduce spam and unnecessary posts (which the other forums I’m a part of is very big on), I’ll just keep it here.

Anyways, I know that it’s fine to add darker elements to stories to make them more realistic. (not cursing though, 😉 ), but what, exactly, would be the limit or t…[Read more]

@leumeister I like Camille, Raphael, and Tristan. Tristan is one of my favorite names!

@amy-l-klob  You’re very welcome! Yes, exactly! I love how deep it sounds, her normal life being “separated” from her. I have to agree that a good background is essential for that!

Anyway, I’m glad I could help! What is your novel about, if I may ask? (If not, that’s okay 🙂 )