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Hello…first off, I want to mention how I got to writing this, haha. A writer friend of mine came up with a basic plot structure and said that she didn’t want to write it but to read it. Anyway, the way she listed it confused everyone, but me, being a Christopher Nolan geek and drastically tired at the time volunteered. Anyway, here is the result. Second draft, I should say…?
Any elements to be aware of? Uh, violence, neglect, abuse…not too much, though. Oh, and if you’re looking for a happy story, this is not one.
Anything in particular that I want critiqued? Uh, none off the top of my head. How did I do with character voice? How vivid were my characters? And any other general comments you might have.
Right, and tagging a couple of people…you don’t have to do this, of course. Only if you want to.
@gracei-j @nova21 @issawriter7 @kathleenramm @anyone-else-who-might-be-interested
Oh, and here’s the link…
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1YJhCVKYPCb8Y-HgII_gY6tWurjwJTrWQ/view?usp=sharing
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If hours don't turn into days@devestate-lasting
I read it and really enjoyed it. I liked your style of writing a lot. The plot itself was very interesting and gave me a lasting impression. I thought the characters were well developed and vivid.
Hakfway through, it did become a little more confusing what was happening in the story. I think it is one of those stories you need to read more than once. If you only wanted the audience to read it once, I would recommend making it a little clearer.
Great job! I thoroughly enjoyed that story. Keep up the good work.
@ugroza Ah thanks for reading! I think that I did intend to make it more on the confusing side; when my friend gave me the plot I had to read it five times before understanding it 🙂
I’m glad you enjoyed!
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If hours don't turn into daysOH MY GOODNESS!!!!!!!!!!!!! THAT’S ALL I CAN SAY!!!!!!!! This…This was GENIUS!!!!!!!! I LOVED IT!!!!! The characters…the plot…the story…EVERYTHING!!! I’m sooo blown away right now!! You have sooo much talent!!!! This was FANTABULOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Best thing I’ve read all week!!!!! THANK YOU for sharing this with us!!!! I’m soooo happy I got to read it!
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TeenWritersNook.com@issawriter7 Ah thank you so much! I’m glad you liked it!
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@devastate-lasting How I can compete with Issabelle’s comments? XD
This was fantastic! Yeah, it was a little confusing, but I eventually got it. I love the concept and the characters–all of it was extremely well-done!
@gracie-j Aw thanks! I’m really glad you enjoyed!
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If hours don't turn into daysWhoa. That was AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That was literally like reading a Christopher Nolan book!!!! You go girl!!! Are you planning on going into film? 😜 Linyang Nolan… jk. 😂
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-gladiator, 2000@nova21 Aw, do you really think so? Haha, I wish I was going into film sometimes. But right now I’m on the path of “Most probably not.”
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If hours don't turn into daysThat’s sad, ’cause it should TOTALLY go into film!! It’d be EPIC!!!!!!!!!!
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TeenWritersNook.comAgreed. 😉
I’m serious!!! It was very realistic in that going back in time isn’t always going to work out the way you want it to, because TIME IS A FICKLE THING!!!! 😋 I especially loved how you intertwined all the backstories so beautifully. The last scene just made my mind go dead for a second, lol!!! Great job!! (I’m telling you, write a novel like this and I’ll probably find it in the library… 😃 when it finally opens again, that is!!! 😠)
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@devastate-lasting 🙂 I did! It was so good! I can’t wait to read a full-length novel of yours!
@issawriter7 @nova21 Maybe I’ll see if I can minor in film or something XD
@gracie-j Ahh this makes me want to go and write! I’ll work hard, I promise!
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If hours don't turn into daysLOL!!! YESSS!!!! Do that! XD
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