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Use the dash if you want it to read as a sudden horrifying shock, use the dots if you want it to be a slow realization that settles into horror.
Ah, okay that works better. Thanks!
I have been swamped lately, but we’ll see if I can have her to you this week.
Take your time! Thanks for the comments, I’m glad the chapter gave some sort of reaction.
Thank you! As for why Adaline and Olivia don’t really seem to care, you’ll find out why later on. Dylan… uh, yeah, Dylan actually does care about his family, so I’ll make a note to include that more.
@everyone
From this point on where the story really picks up, please, please rip into these chapters. Be as brutal as possible, if something doesn’t make sense or is contrived or bothering you, please comment that. Thanks again for reading this.
“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”
“Maybe this corner is a dead end.” Jack remarked, turning round. He started, taking a double look. “Uh, the path behind us is gone.”
Hard to follow the rule of staying on the path when the path itself won’t cooperate.
Olivia turned round, and, with the force of a wave on a stormy day, slapped Adaline.
Nice!
“How do you intend on getting up there, then?” Adaline asked. She had a point, considering the trees towered above with few branches to serve as footholds. “And wouldn’t we set the forest on fire?”
Okay. I was wondering why none of them were climbing the trees to look at their surroundings.
Looks good! Waiting for the next part.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Hard to follow the rule of staying on the path when the path itself won’t cooperate.
Yep lol.
Nice!
You guys really like the slap part huh? XD
Looks good! Waiting for the next part.
Thanks!
“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”
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As of right now, I have re-done parts of The Woods of Rosen which are now integral to where the story is headed (this is because I realized they would work better for the story and characters). So, I’m thinking instead of posting the chapters of the books on KP, that instead I’ll put a link to a google doc and put the chapters there for critiques. This is just mainly because, taking these new additions into account, it would be confusing for you guys to read the next parts without the context of the additions to the pre-posted chapters. If you guys are willing to, could you re-read the first two or three chapters once I post the link because I’ve added new stuff to them? You don’t have to if you don’t want to or have time to, it’s really only to add context to events in the future chapters.
Whoops. That was a long ramble, wasn’t it?
“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”
Hm, tags seem to be working kind of weird. Our names are not in blue, but I still got an email. 🤔
Absolutely! That seems like it would work great. Let me know when you send out the link!
"Don't shine so that others can see you. Shine so that through you, others can see Him." ~ C. S.
Okay, sounds fine, but you might want to check out Ellette’s profile first. She just put some warning there about using Google.
Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.
Thanks! I might switch over to Reedsey though, considering Ellette’s post now.
Oh goodness, thanks for telling me. That’s really scary, I knew Google wasn’t great but that seems much too far.
“Our house is full of ducks!!!!”
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