The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga

[Ellette Giselle]

@linus-smallprint

*Immediate and instant cringe*

I hate sharing unfinished drawings. *sob*

 

I have a few more ideas for the Joseph in bed one. In fact, I started the face and arms of the next one, but that’s about it. I am also going to attempt the temple. And I have a Beric standing one in mind….. and one of the boys playing. Not sure if any of those will turn out.

 

Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

[Linus Smallprint]

@ellette-giselle

These look fine as well, finished or not.

Which scene is Joseph and Eric from?

I think that version of Beric does work better.

Also, I think I like the second wedding option better.

Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

[Ellette Giselle]

@linus-smallprint

Thanks!

Um… I’m not sure. I had in my notes that I needed a drawing with Joseph comforting Eric, but now I have to look through the book and actually find said scene. XD

 

Two questions:

Do you think the one with Sabina at the grave could be worked in as her memory/recap when she’s in the bedroom, or does it seem out of place.

and number two, what do you think of the one with Joseph in bed. I’m not sure what I’ve decided on it. He looks plenty miserable…. but I may try something different. Any thoughts?

Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

[Linus Smallprint]

@ellette-giselle

Do you think the one with Sabina at the grave could be worked in as her memory/recap when she’s in the bedroom, or does it seem out of place.

Let me reread this.

I think this is fine. There is no harm in including an illustration of a flashback. I’ve seen it done before, such as in North! Or be Eaten when Podo is telling his tales of being a Strander. Little House on the Prarie books often add illustrations for the tales that Pa tells. It can help add to that flashback.

I would say though, make sure you include a picture of Joseph before this, or perhaps a dark street. Your first illustration should be one that sets the tone for the story. (Think of it like a first chapter.) That picture with the grave does set the grim tone, but it might make it appear that there is a greater focus on Sabina than there really is.

Is the one of Joseph when he is still a child? Maybe it is just because you haven’t finished this, but he does look older here. I might put both of his arms around the pillow instead of one as well as pull both his legs up so that he is curled up. But at the same time, that might make it look like he is in a resigned sleep, which isn’t what you are going for either. I think I may need to see the finished version of this one before I can give you more feedback on it.

Sometimes it is necessary to paint the sky black in order to see the stars.

[Ellette Giselle]

@linus-smallprint

Hmm. Okay. I think I can try to throw in one of Joseph before the Sabina one. I really like the feel it has.

 

Yes. Lol. This is Joseph as a child.

Hmm, Okay. I’ll try to finish it up today, and I’ll sketch out the other options as well so that you can have a look.

Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

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