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Shucks.
I changed Ruth’s name to Hope in one sentence. I was almost positive I had on accident.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
I guess I was sort of confused by Joseph’s fears about talking to Ezra, then. He seems to have multiple flashbacks to the soldiers, which is a good way to show how the events have affected him. I was probably confused (I’m assuming now that this scene is replacing the one before where he talks to three young men) about why he was so worried about Ezra in specific.
“I didn’t come this far to just come this far.”
Yes.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God