The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga

[Koshka]

@hybridlore

*Straightens sunglasses*

 

@ellette-giselle

I’d say don’t kill the boys. You could bring them close, scare the living daylights out of the others, but don’t kill them.

I expected them to get captured and killed. It felt like “here we go again”. So many characters by this time have been killed, that it was almost…boring? Change things up. Let their fight for survival actually matter this time. Even if they walk away with scars, set someone free.

Another thing. Why would you kill them? If you’re just taking both boys out because you don’t know how else you’re going to continue the story, then their deaths are pretty much pointless. Why do you have these characters at all? What impact do these characters make on your MC, the book’s point, the general plot? Aaron’s death was impactful, because it mattered. It was the culmination of his arc, of his personal story.

Death is powerful, but life is stronger than death. Make their lives matter even if they don’t get much screentime.

First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the Gork

[hybridlore]

@koshka YES. Thank you.

WE ARE REVIVING THE PROTECTION SQUAD! *steals Joseph and Eric from Ellette*

[Koshka]

@hybridlore

*GASPETH*

*Throws confetti*

*Offers you a medal of honor for your bravery in the Character Protection Squad service*

First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the Gork

[hybridlore]

@koshka

*graciously accepts confetti and medal* Thank you, thank you very much.

WE ARE REVIVING THE PROTECTION SQUAD! *steals Joseph and Eric from Ellette*

[Ellette Giselle]

@hybridlore   @koshka

 

okay!! Fine!! I give in.

I’ll rewrite that whole scene tomorrow.

y’all win.

*slams down pencil in despair.*

it actually won’t hurt the plot much, and you are actually making sense.

fine. I’ll do it.

they go free. Both of them.

I can’t believe I’m doing this.

Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

[Ellette Giselle]

@hybridlore   @koshka

having hybridlore on the protection squad is scary! Why did I ever tell her about it?

Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

[hybridlore]

@ellette-giselle

YESSSSSS!!! We convinced you!!! 🙌🙌

Thank you, thank you, thank you!! I can’t wait to see the new scene! 😁

having hybridlore on the protection squad is scary! Why did I ever tell her about it?

Because you wanted me to kidnap all your characters. MWAHAHAH.

WE ARE REVIVING THE PROTECTION SQUAD! *steals Joseph and Eric from Ellette*

[Keilah H.]

@ellette-giselle you could have one or both of them get really, really close to death, and everyone thinks they’re dead, but then someone notices them still breathing or something, and they rush to save them.

 

I do agree with the others that letting them die was kinda getting old. Them dying was……sorta tolerable for me, but it was like the third public execution in two books, and it was a little repetitive. Plus yes, I expected it to happen now.

Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.

[Koshka]

@ellette-giselle

WHAT???!!!

*Undignified squealing commences*

Oh, she is kinda scary. I think she’s done a good thing though. She deserves the medal.

First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the Gork

[Koshka]

Also, I am working on a short story for the prompt, it’s just gotten a little delayed (I decided to totally scrap my first idea in favor of another one Thursday. It’s been interesting)

First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the Gork

[Ellette Giselle]

@hybridlore   @koshka

Don’t rub it in.

Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

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