The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga

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    Koshka
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      @ellette-giselle

      Good. That’s what I assumed was happening.

      The emotional/spiritual aspect will be addressed later.

      I’m afraid I was more concerned over the emotional/psychological aspect, but I suppose that’s kinda what you meant.

       

      *Cackles*

      Oh, and I wasn’t sad. I was almost angry. Slightly mad. Highly miffed. And rather sorry for Joseph.

      The question is: should the short story outright punish Ellette, or a character she cares about?

      *Twirls gold pen*

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      hybridlore
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        @ellette-giselle

        Lolol. And yeah, I can see what Koshka is saying, but that wasn’t really what I was thinking while I read it. I thought the scene was great.

        "Be careful, for writing books is endless, and much study wears you out." Eccl. 12:12

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        Elishavet Elroi
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          @koshka

          Aha!

          *pulls on gloves*

          *Grabs gold pen*

          Lisa was looking for that. You don’t want her looking for you instead!

          *Looks around*

          Oooo, nice story, Ellette. I like Julian.

          You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

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          Ellette Giselle
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            @elishavet-pidyon

            Thank you! I like Julian too. Though it’s really funny that he’s the character that you like. lol.

            May I ask why?

            Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

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            Elishavet Elroi
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              @ellette-giselle

              Not sure. Maybe because he’s a guardian type, protecting his younger brother. Maybe because he reminds me of a centurion, and I always loved the centurions in the Bible. He doesn’t understand everything, but he has a strong sense of honor.

              You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan

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              Ellette Giselle
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                @elishavet-pidyon

                You nailed the exact reasons why I like him! lol.

                Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God

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