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Good. That’s what I assumed was happening.
The emotional/spiritual aspect will be addressed later.
I’m afraid I was more concerned over the emotional/psychological aspect, but I suppose that’s kinda what you meant.
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*Cackles*
Oh, and I wasn’t sad. I was almost angry. Slightly mad. Highly miffed. And rather sorry for Joseph.
The question is: should the short story outright punish Ellette, or a character she cares about?
*Twirls gold pen*
First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)
Fork the Gork
Lolol. And yeah, I can see what Koshka is saying, but that wasn’t really what I was thinking while I read it. I thought the scene was great.
"Be careful, for writing books is endless, and much study wears you out." Eccl. 12:12
Aha!
*pulls on gloves*
*Grabs gold pen*
Lisa was looking for that. You don’t want her looking for you instead!
*Looks around*
Oooo, nice story, Ellette. I like Julian.
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
Thank you! I like Julian too. Though it’s really funny that he’s the character that you like. lol.
May I ask why?
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God
Not sure. Maybe because he’s a guardian type, protecting his younger brother. Maybe because he reminds me of a centurion, and I always loved the centurions in the Bible. He doesn’t understand everything, but he has a strong sense of honor.
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
You nailed the exact reasons why I like him! lol.
Man is born for the fight, to be forged and molded into a sharper, finer, stronger image of God