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Hey everyone!
Hello, my names Kefa nice to meet you! I’ve met a few people on here so hello again if I’ve met you!
Ok lets get down to business, the reason I made this is so I could share my story (or what I have so far). But I don’t want to be selfish, so if anyone wants you can also share your WIP story on here or a story that you’ve completed! Just as long as its a story or talking about someone else’s story its fine. (or replying that to)
Rules:
Ok the rules are just the same rules as the KP guidelines so please be nice and don’t be rude! Thanks! (only friendly criticism)
Thanks!
"The more you practice the art of thankfulness, the more you have to be thankful for.”
Awesome! Tag me when you put yours up!
WE ARE REVIVING THE PROTECTION SQUAD! *steals Joseph and Eric from Ellette*
@everyone
ok here’s my WIP so far! (hope you like it I only have half a page lol)
Oh- and if you see a number that looks like this –> (1) its meant to be a little like foot note or something just go to the bottom of the page and it will explain a little! Enjoy!
The Kingdom of Kaimor
Origins
Union day
A Kingdom of Kaimor short story
Ruth awoke with a grin on her face, It would soon be time for the monthly visit from the other Kingdoms.
Her friends would be visiting and many others along with The Keepers the four guardians over Kaimor.
Ruth was extra exited about about this visit, It would be the Keepers one year anniversary in just a week.
Which meaning Union day would be coming up.
This would be Ruths very first Union day She thought it was lovely The Keepers finding there romantic partner to bare a child, if only Ruth knew how they really felt.
While Ruth was getting ready she heard her brother Thomas out in the hall talking to His fellow student(1) who is also his very best friend, Cyrus .
As soon as she heard them she ran right out of her room to greet him for she hadn’t seen him since Unejay(2) which was a year ago.
“How are you Ruth? You look so much older” Thomas asked with joy in his tone.
“I am doing very well deer brother it is so nice to see you again.” Even though Ruth was practically bouncing off the walls she still had to remember her manners.
“Glad to hear that, as I was away in Boulder Town(3) I came back with Jihra.”
“Jihra is here?!” Ruths two favorite people in the whole world are Jihra and Rapha two of the four Keepers.
“Yes, he’s down in the main hall of the castle.” Thomas replied.
Ruth ran past Cryrus and Thomas to greet Jihra, when she got to the main hall all the zeal left Ruths face as she saw him.
And that’s all I have so far, Its been hard squeezing in time to write (because of school and homework) I procrastinate a lot though. 😅
(1) Thomas is a training to become a general you see.
(2) Pronounced UNY-JAY and the 6th month in the Kaimorian (WIP NAME) calendar.
(3) WIP NAME but it is one of the cities inside the kingdom.
"The more you practice the art of thankfulness, the more you have to be thankful for.”
oops ignore this please.
"The more you practice the art of thankfulness, the more you have to be thankful for.”
@everyone
sorry my WIP is full of grammar mistakes, I am fixing it currently so so so sorry uh yeah.
"The more you practice the art of thankfulness, the more you have to be thankful for.”
Oh, it sounds fascinating so far! I like your characters and the world is intriguing. I’ll wait to add critiques untill I understand you story more. 🙂
(By the by, I only have 16 pages for my “main” WIP, and all but four is just me getting distracted by the various backstories. But let’s not despise the day of small things. [Zec 4:10])
You have listened to fears, child. Come, let me breathe on you... Are you brave again? -Aslan
Thanks! still my sis was looking over it and she pointed out all the flaws in the grammar.😅 I feel super awkward cause thats writing 101. 😢😅
"The more you practice the art of thankfulness, the more you have to be thankful for.”
Its ok! First drafts are allowed to be messy. Thanks for tagging me! It’ll be interesting to see where it goes!
WE ARE REVIVING THE PROTECTION SQUAD! *steals Joseph and Eric from Ellette*
Here’s a corrected grammar version!
The Kingdom of Kaimor
Origins
Union day
A Kingdom of Kaimor short story
Ruth awoke with a grin on her face; it was time for the monthly visit from the other kingdoms. She would get to see her friends again, along with the Keepers, who are the four guardians of Kaimor. Ruth was extra excited about this visit; it would be the Keepers’ one-year anniversary in just a week, meaning Union Day would be arriving soon.
This would be Ruth’s very first Union Day. She thought it was lovely that the Keepers were finding their romantic partners to bear a child, if only Ruth knew how they really felt. While Ruth was getting ready, she heard her brother Thomas out in the hall talking to his fellow student(1), who was also his very best friend, Cyrus. As soon as she heard them, she ran right out of her room to greet him, for she hadn’t seen him since Unejay(2), which was about a year ago.
“How are you, Ruth? You look so much older,” Thomas asked, joy in his tone.
“I am doing very well, dear brother; it is so nice to see you again.” Even though Ruth was practically bouncing off the walls, she still had to remember her manners.
“Glad to hear that. While I was away in Boulder Town(3), I came back with Jihra.”
“Jihra is here?!” Ruth’s two favorite people in the whole world were Jihra and Rapha, two of the four Keepers.
“Yes, he’s down in the main hall of the castle,” Thomas replied.
Ruth ran past Cyrus and Thomas to greet Jihra. When she got to the main hall, all the zeal left Ruth’s face as she saw him. He looked tired—very tired. The smile that he normally wore was gone, and his face was a mix of tiredness and stress.
(1) Thomas is training to become a general you see.
(2) Pronounced UNY-JAY and the sixth month in the Kaimorian calendar
(3) WIP NAME
"The more you practice the art of thankfulness, the more you have to be thankful for.”
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