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  • #197353
    Keilah H.
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      @the_lost-journal your stories sound AMAZING!

      "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

      #197394
      Kefa
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        @keilah-h

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        Thanks! 🥳

         

        "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

        #197395
        Kefa
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          Ik it is late, but here are some of my favorite quotes from Carrot Cake!!!:

          “I didn’t disappear, I just decided I didn’t want to be seen!” She cheerfully said.

          “Hello, hello, hello!” Carrot Cake yelled, appearing out of nowhere.

          “Isn’t wonderful!? We all are together for the end of the world!” Carrot Cake smiled widely.

          “Okay, I’m bored.” Carrot Cake turned and strolled away, not caring for an answer.

          "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

          #197398
          Kefa
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            OOPS!

            It should be “She said *cheerfully*”

            and

            “Hello, hello, hello!” She *called*

            "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

            #197409
            hybridlore
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              @the_lost-journal

              Sorry I dropped off the face of the earth for a day. It was super busy.

              Okay, sounds cool! And yeah, kind of creepy too 😂 Carrot Cake sounds like a character. I like how you came up with the different races and how they become empowered when they fall.

              'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

              #197418
              Kefa
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                wait… what happened to it? I sent something out, saying:

                “I have decided to change the lore and world build of P.I.C.A.F.E.!

                I know it is a horror/thriller. but I don’t want it to be super depressing, so instead of the whole world being infected, it is just certain cities and areas! So that was the movement just locked them in from escaping, and other settlements will be untouched!”

                What happened to it?

                "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

                #197419
                Kefa
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                  @hybridlore

                  Carrot Cake sounds like a character.

                  Yes. she is a character. (It is meant to be said flatly but it is a joke 😂)

                  I like how you came up with the different races and how they become empowered when they fall.

                  Yeah but the fallen are bad, and they only become empowered when they become fallen…

                  "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

                  #197431
                  hybridlore
                  @hybridlore
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                    @the_lost-journal

                    Sometimes KP has weird glitches… the joke around here is that “Wyoh” the “ghost” eats our posts.

                    'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

                    #197438
                    Kefa
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                      @hybridlore

                      NO! NOT WYOHHHHH!!!!

                      "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

                      #197448
                      Keilah H.
                      @keilah-h
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                        @the_lost-journal

                        you’re welcome!!

                        "When in doubt, eat cheese crackers."-me to my charries who don't even know about cheese crackers

                        #197477
                        Kefa
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                          @keilah-h

                          ^-^

                          "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

                          #197497
                          Kefa
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                            Okay guys, I want your honest opinion on this story!

                            (It is creepy, and short)

                            I heard it… 

                            I awoke to an awful shriek. in my reached up to my ears, to feel them blood… leaking out of them…

                            I shot up in my bed, and ran to the window, I saw the back of a beautiful woman. She glowed silver under the moon, her white hair blew in the wind. I was stunned.

                            She was looking through my parent’s window, she left as soon as she came, and then I head a cry, from my mother.

                            I went to her bedroom, to find my father, she was dead… He explained that he woke to her cry, and found her dead beside him. I asked him about the scream.. But he didn’t know what I was talking about… I showed him my ears, but he said they looked normal…

                            I touched them, and sure enough, the blood was gone… But I felt it, I touched… I explained to him about the woman, but he said I was most likely dreaming. But I heard it, I saw it…

                            He sent me back to bed, saying that things will be okay. But I couldn’t sleep, after what I heard, after what I saw. “I swear I saw it, I heard it too!” I said to myself, all night.

                            I still had to go to school, but I didn’t mind. The school day would help me get my mind off of things. I told my closest friend what happened. He was truly sorry for me, but he didn’t believe about the woman. I told him, “But I heard it! I saw it!” He still didn’t believe me. But I felt it, I touched it…

                            I swear I did! I heard it, I saw it! Later that same night, I heard it again, I saw it to. It went to Ms. Gabe’s house. I know it did, because I heard it! I saw it!

                            The next night, after the funeral, was the same thing. I heard it… I saw it… but this time, it saw me… It stared from across the street, then from underneath my window… then from across the room.

                            “Is that everything kid?” The man said to me. “Yes sir. But I am telling you, I heard it, I saw it!” I tried to explain.

                            “I understand, listen, Joey, we are going to keep you here for a few nights, okay?” He asked friendly, but he was not my friend, I knew that. The mental professional walked towards the nurse, he whispered something to her, I didn’t listen, I was too focused on the thing behind her. Because I heard it, I saw it…

                            So, what did you think?! It is from, A Cellar’s tales!

                            "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

                            #197554
                            Kefa
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                              hello?

                              "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

                              #197564
                              hybridlore
                              @hybridlore
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                                @the_lost-journal

                                Wow, that was creepy. I guess I don’t like horror. But it was pretty well-written, I think. It was cool how you tied the ending into the beginning.

                                If you want feedback faster in the future, I would tag people, otherwise your post gets buried underneath all the other topics and we have to go scrolling for it. Although, if you end up posting any more scary stuff, skip me. I’d like to see more about your other WIPS though.

                                'Whoever dwells in the shelter of the Most High will rest in the shadow of the Almighty.'

                                #197571
                                Kefa
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                                  @hybridlore

                                  Thanks! I will make sure to remember that 😅

                                  horror is not for everyone!

                                  but thanks!

                                  "MAMA! I AM SCARED MOMA! MOMAAAAAA!!!!!!! TALK TO ME MAMA!"

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