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One day when I was looking for a little peace and quiet, I saw a man with hat in hand and a small bouquet of violets, he introduced himself to me and I to him again and though his eyes said many things t’was little that was said. When he walked on I stood there long to ponder this young man, he was not unkind or rude to me he was a gentleman.
I liked that! I think some stanzas to separate it might help, I wasn’t quite sure how the flow was supposed to go.
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
I love that! It was super sweet and it flowed really well. I think Min is right with the stanza thing, but it was still fun to read. Also, you could maybe put a period after “rude to me” and make “He was a gentleman” it’s own sentence to make the ending more powerful.
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I like it!
*following @folith-feolin ‘s example* (British accent) How lovely!
Write what should not be forgotten. — Isabel Allende
That was so sweet and lovely! Thanks for sharing!
He must increase, but I must decrease.
Thanks for critiquing.
Yes the spacing is kinda off, I posted that from my phone so it came out kinda weird.
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