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January 24, 2023 at 2:07 pm #129850
Felix is their father
#IfMarcelDiesIRiot
#ProtectMarcel
#ProtectSebJanuary 24, 2023 at 2:07 pm #129851@freedomwriter76
AHHHHHH!! Poor Adolphus! šš
That is sooo sad!!!! But it looks really great nonetheless.
I love Grimm’s! Looks amazing, and his color scheme is really cool! XD
"And so I left this world just as I had entered it. Confused."
January 24, 2023 at 2:16 pm #129853@godlyfantasy12
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@anyoneelsethatseesthisHey. Is it just me or is KP down again?
Anywayā¦
@godlyfantasy12
Your charries seem interesting. Specifically Joclyn. I loked the mood boards.@freedomwriter76
Thanks for explaining Adolphus. He looks like an intriguing anti-villain. I also like how you have woven together your series. I always feel that it is best to show the humanity of our characterās (especially the villainās).Through darkness,
light shines brightestJanuary 24, 2023 at 2:46 pm #129861@otherworldlyhistorian Yup. KP is down. š
He must increase, but I must decrease.
January 24, 2023 at 2:56 pm #129862@freedomwriter76
Here’s my idea in one sentence:
Federacja- (1939) When the treasure of Poland, the mare Federacja, disappears, a determined German soldier and a patriotic Polish girl set out on two desperate paths destined to intersect.
He must increase, but I must decrease.
January 24, 2023 at 3:13 pm #129866Oh ok.
Yep. it should fix sooner or later.
Write what should not be forgotten. ā Isabel Allende
January 24, 2023 at 3:59 pm #129870@godlyfantasy12
@mineralizedwritings @esther-c @freedomwriter76 @lightoverdarkness6
@anyoneelsethatseesthisIt has fixed.
Through darkness,
light shines brightestJanuary 24, 2023 at 4:51 pm #129879Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@felicity. Oooohhhhh…I’m intrigued already. š¤š¤š¤
Itās so cool how you connect all your characters in all your books!! I love that so much!
Aww, thank you!!!! I try to connect almost all of them in some way, so I’m so glad you like it! šš
Haha, yeah. Oh, I just remembered something he did in one of your chaptersā¦no loving him right now šš šš” š¤
Yeah…š š¬ What thing exactly, may I ask? š¤ Hans has done a lot of bad things…š š§š¬
*Gasps* AHHH!!! Adoulphus!!! His moodboard is so awesome and heartbreakingšš š. Love it!
Aww, thank you!!!! ššš And IKR!?!?!? šš
Heyā¦he looks a little bit like Leo!!
Yeah…I noticed that too. Even though they don’t share a parent…they look pretty similar…š§š š¤
@esther-c. Thanks!!! ššš Yeah, as Godly said, Adolphus is The Boys’ oldest stepbrother. šAlso, that board seems very fitting for Aloth!!! š¬š¬š¬ Great job!!! ššš
@godlyfantasy12. UGHHHHHHHH, IKR!?!?!?!? šššš
@mineralizedwritings. Thanks!!! ššš IKR!? Poor baby!!!!Ā ššššI have to say…I’m slowly beginning to take a liking to Adolphus…what have I done!?š š
@otherworldlyhistorian. You’re very welcome! š Aww, thank you!!! That’s very kind of you to say that about Adolphus. ššI also like how you have woven together your series. I always feel that it is best to show the humanity of our characterās (especially the villainās).
Thank you!!! It’s taken a lot of planning to get them all connected. šš Yes!!! I wholeheartedly agree with you!!! Everyone has good and bad in them, even our villains, and in the end, we’re all human!
January 24, 2023 at 5:10 pm #129885@godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @esther-c
I love the moodboards!
I’d share mine but they look terrible…so maybe I’ll post some when I make new ones…- This reply was modified 1 year, 11 months ago by Gwyndalf the Wise.
"...I did not say to the seed of Jacob, 'Seek Me in vain..."
(Part of) Isaiah 45:19January 24, 2023 at 5:21 pm #129891@freedomwriter76
Also, that board seems very fitting for Aloth!!! š¬š¬š¬ Great job!!! ššš
Thanks!!! š <3
I love the moodboards!
Thank you!!! <3
Iād share mine but they look terribleā¦so maybe Iāll post some when I make new onesā¦You totally should!! My first few werenāt the greatest either. (I had no idea that you could look up quotes even when you didnāt have Pinterest. XD) The more you do them, the better you get! š
Plus, not all the colors have to match. š Itās just something Iāve done a for most of mine.
Write what should not be forgotten. ā Isabel Allende
January 24, 2023 at 5:30 pm #129895@godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @lightoverdarkness6 @gwyndalf-the-wise @mineralizedwritings @anyone-else-interested
Ok! I have written a brief history of the Aletheia, the country in my WIP!
Be warned: It is unedited. XD
(It may sound very similar to the history of a country that most of us are familiar withā¦)
Aletheia was founded on the Bible. Three centuries ago, there was a group of people seeking religious freedom. Where they had lived before, they were persecuted for their beliefs and were forced to comply with the countryās religion or face punishment. They couldnāt handle it any more. So, they set out, three hundred people on a boat made for two hundred, seeking refuge.
They had heard of a land to the north of them that had no known inhabitants. That was their end goal. They sailed for months and months. Finally, the land they seeked was spotted. Excited, they soon built houses a few miles from the shore and settled down in this fertile land. They faced many troubles and had to deal with shortage of food and supplies, the friendly and unfriendly tribes that inhabited the land, and harsh winters and sweltering summers. The years went by and they established a community. More and more people came, enlarging their settlement. More years passed and they expanded, conquering this new land. Less than thirty years after the first pilgrims had arrived, a government was established.
In this land, they found the freedom they wanted. The freedom to worship however they chose; the freedom to have a say in their government; the freedom to speak their minds without the fear of being condemned for it. Still more years passed and they grew and grew, claiming more land for their growing nation. A century after the first settlers arrived, they had become an independent nation: Aletheia. Founded on the truth of the Bible, they gave all the glory to God for how far they had come. They held fast to their roots for the years to come as they faced many wars and national and economic instability. Though they were surely out perfect, they had a strong start by being founded in Godās Word.
But the joys of prosperity chipped away at them like an ax to a tree trunk. All too soon, they had fallen. Strayed from their roots. They thought that they could succeed on their own. That they could rise above their problems by their own power. No longer did they cling to morality and truth. It was as if they were running away from it. And it was destroying them.
To make matters worse, a man by the name of Bayron Len instituted a structure known as the Orb over all of Aletheia. It shut down their trade routes and cut off communications to other countries. Many escaped during that first yearā¦ but they never came back. Len increased his security and placed more guards near the edges of the Orb. No one dared to escape, for they could lose their life. The Orb slowly closed in on the nation. No, it did not destroy any buildings or other structures. It smoothly went through those. But it destroyed the nation. They were torn apart. Families were separated and even whole cities were being cut off. The āinsidersā, the people within the Orb, did not want to give up quite yet. Riots broke out often. Rebels tried to overthrow Len. Nothing worked. Within five years, everyone gave up hope. They succumbed and didnāt try to stop the inevitable. Yes, some still tried to escape and did succeed, but most stayed put.
They had to rework their lives to fit Lenās regime. He didnāt persecute anyone purposely, but everyone felt under pressure. Nobody boldly spoke out anymore. And if they did, it was within their small circle of people and spoken in a whisper. The fire that had started Aletheia had burned out. If only the insiders would take action. If only there was an ember of hope. If only the glorious light of truth would shine once more.
The end of that kind of sets up the titles for the books in the trilogy. I think I may change the title of the first one (The Insiders) to be more parallel to the other two (Ember of Hope andĀ That Glorious Light).
Write what should not be forgotten. ā Isabel Allende
January 24, 2023 at 5:37 pm #129899@esther-c
Oh, cool! XD Yeah, I can see the similarities to America…"...I did not say to the seed of Jacob, 'Seek Me in vain..."
(Part of) Isaiah 45:19January 24, 2023 at 6:35 pm #129910@esther-c
Seems interesting. I do have one question though. How different is their world from ours. Also due to you mentioning the Bible I assume you are using real christianity instead of allegorical christianity.Through darkness,
light shines brightestJanuary 24, 2023 at 7:35 pm #129916Anonymous- Rank: Chosen One
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@godlyfantasy12. @gwyndalf-the-wise. @mineralizedwritings. @lightoverdarkness6.
Sooooo…do y’all remember that scene I shared on the old WIP rant chat that hadĀ FrauĀ Adelmann…where Leo tried to steal money so he could buy medicine for Wolfgang…?
I don’t know if anyone remembers…but…well…I wrote the scene that occurs right after that one and wanted to share it here. š š
I kinda fell in love with this scene a lot when I was writing it…I just love writing scenes like this. š
And again,Ā FrauĀ means Mrs. in German, so she’s basically called Mrs. Adelmann through the whole book, lol. š
Joshua tried to focus on his Bible. He was reading through the book of Matthew.
But today, he couldnāt focus. And scarier still, he didnāt even really feel like reading the next chapter.
Joshua covered his face with his hands. āDear Lord, whatās wrong with me?ā he moaned.
A small, racking cough sounded from the bed. Joshua closed his Bible and stood.
He walked over to Wolfgangās bed, stroking hair off his youngest brotherās forehead and flipping the damp cloth on his forehead over. He was still burning up.
Slowly, Wolfgangās eyes fluttered open, bloodshot. āJ-Josh-Joshua?ā
Joshua smiled softly. āGood morning, Wolf. Hungry?ā
Wolfgang shivered and shook his head. āNot reallyā¦ā He mumbled, just as the door opened and Jakob and Reuben stepped inside, Reuben with a small bowl in hand.
āAre you hungry yet, Wolfi?ā Reuben asked softly, sitting down on the bed beside Wolfgang.
Wolfgang shook his head. āIām not really hungry.ā He shivered again, and Joshua bit his lip.
Wolfgang was getting weak, and he really needed to eat something.
Jakob walked over to Wolfgang, stroking his hair. āCome on, Wolf, you need to eat. Come onā¦ā
Joshua turned to Jakob and slowly shook his head. āThatās not going to work on him right now, Jakob.ā
Jakob removed his hand from Wolfgang and turned to face Joshua. āHe needs to eat.ā
Joshua nodded. āI know. But we shouldnāt and canāt make him, and we canāt seem to convince him, either. We havenāt been able to.ā
āThen what do we do?ā Jakob asked quietly, concern and even fear filling his eyes.
Joshua bit his lip and shook his head. āI-I donāt know.ā
He knew he was supposed to pray, but he didnāt even know if he could or believed in that right now. Dear God, what in the world is wrong with me!? Joshua thought, clenching and unclenching his fists.
A soft thud sounded as Reuben set down the bowl of broth. Joshua and Jakob both turned to watch him and Wolfgang.
Reuben brushed hair off of Wolfgangās sweaty forehead, smiling softly. āDo you want me to read you a book, Wolfgangā¦?ā
Wolfgang coughed and shivered, but he slowly nodded. āY-yeahā¦Iād like thatā¦ā
āWhat book do you want?ā Reuben asked softly, perusing the shelf beside Wolfgangās bed.
āA Christmas C-Carolā¦ā Wolfgang whispered. Shivered again.
Reuben smiled and grabbed a book off the shelf. āGood choice, Wolfi.ā
Joshua tapped Jakobās shoulder.
Jakob turned and faced him, and Joshua nodded towards the door.
Jakob nodded and followed him.
Joshua softly closed the door behind them, just as Reuben began to read.
They walked down the stairs, entering the living room.
āDid he drink the broth?ā Frau Adelmann asked softly, standing beside one of the couches.
Joshua shook his head. āNoā¦Reuben is reading to him right now. He-heās getting weakā¦ā
āTrust Godā¦he will heal Wolfgang.ā She whispered softly.
Joshua nodded, letting out a deep breath he didnāt know he had been holding. āā¦Thank you for the reminderā¦I-itās easy to forget sometimes.ā His gaze drifted over to Leo, who slept on the couch Frau Adelmann stood besides, fresh bruises on his face, neck, and bare arms.
Joshua bit his lip.
Jakobās fists clenched. āHe just wanted to help Wolfgang.ā
Frau Adelmann slowly nodded. āHe was being a good older brotherā¦but Felix and Frida didnāt take too kindly to it. Yes, he shouldnāt have tried to stealā¦but a beating was unnecessary.ā
āThey refused to help Wolfgang. What other choice did he have other than stealing?ā
Frau Adelmann nodded again. āā¦I know, Jakob. I know they refused to help Wolfgang, and I know Leo didnāt have another option.ā
āTheyāll payā¦one day, theyāll pay.ā
āJakobā¦ā Joshua sighed.
Frau Adelmann slowly shook her head at Jakob. āā¦Revenge wonāt get you anywhere, Jakob. Hating someone brings no one pain except you.ā
āIāll make them payā¦Iāll make them feel all the pain theyāve caused us for so longā¦and I wonāt give them mercy, same as they havenāt given us mercy. Iāll do it.ā Jakob vowed.
āJakobā¦vengeance wonāt get us anywhere.ā Joshua whispered.
Heād watched his younger brother be consumed by hatred. Jakob had once been full of loveā¦full of youthfulnessā¦same as they had all been, but all of that had been replacedā¦taken awayā¦by hatred.
Jakob loved Angelinaā¦he loved Joshua and the rest of his brothersā¦but there wasnāt room in Jakobās heart for other peopleā¦much less room for God. Hatred took up so much space.
Jakob crossed his arms. āAt least it gives me something to look forward to.ā
āThatās not the best thing to put hope inā¦and itās certainly not something you should look forward toā¦itās wrong, Jakob.ā
Jakob uncrossed his arms and clenched his fists, facing Joshua again. āMore wrong than them abusing us all these years!? More wrong than them mercilessly beating us into submission every single day of our lives for eighteen years!?ā
āJakob, thatās not what I-ā
āI donāt want to hear anything about showing them love and forgiving them for what theyāve done. I will never love them, and I will absolutely never forgive them for what theyāve done to us.ā
Joshua felt tears threaten. āJakobā¦I donāt want to see this hatred destroy youā¦ā
Jakobās fists clenched tighter.
āDestroy me!? Donāt you think our father and stepmother has already destroyed all of us!?ā
Joshua threw his hands up in exasperation. āJakob, thatās not what I meant!ā
Jakob jumped. Even Joshua was startled at how loud he had spoken.
Jakob blinked a couple times, fists slowly unclenching. His eyes softened and slightly brightened. āā¦I have something I need to doā¦I-Iāll be back.ā
Joshua stopped. Noā¦he didnāt wantā¦he didnāt needā¦Jakob didnāt have to leave. āJakob, waitā¦ā He whispered, holding out a hand, but Jakob had already walked away.
Joshua groaned in outrage, grabbing his brown curls, pulling them, falling to his knees on the carpet, gaze upward. āGod, what is wrong with me!?ā He yelled.
Frau Adelmannās arms wrapped around him, pulling him close. And with his cheek pressed against her dressā¦Joshua cried.
Tears coursed down his cheeks in droves. He sobbed into the fabric of her dress, as Frau Adelmann held him closer.
āI want them to be savedā¦I try to show them Christā¦I try to be a good Christianā¦a good example to my brothersā¦Iāve been so patientā¦but none of them believe yet.ā Joshua sobbed, his arms wrapping around Frau Adelmannās waist.
She rubbed his back. āYouāve done so muchā¦ā
Her motherly voice only made more tears fall. Joshua buried his cheek deeper into her dress, tears still falling.
He didnāt want to cry.
But he couldnāt stop the tears.
āIāve tried to be optimistic. Iāve tried to be hopeful. Iām trying to be strongā¦ā Joshua let go of Frau Adelmann, arms falling to his sides as more tears fell, āā¦but itās hard. Itās so hardā¦ā He sobbed, closing his eyes.
āā¦Joshua, open your eyesā¦look at me.ā
He silently and slowly obeyed; vision blurred. He looked up at Frau Adelmann, his brown eyes meeting her gray.
She stepped forward and held his face in her hands, a hand on each one of his cheeks. āYouāve been so strong for so longā¦but why donāt you let God be strong for you now?ā
He had tried to hardā¦fought so hardā¦to be strongā¦when Godā¦God had wanted to be the one Joshua depended on.
He had tried to depend on himselfā¦he had tried to save his brothersā¦when no one could do that except God.
Frau Adelmann wiped tears away from his cheeks. āGod just wants to hear you say that you need him.ā
Joshua had depended on himselfā¦heād even tried to be a picture-perfect Christian, as if being a āgood Christianā could buy him his way to salvationā¦when Jesus had already paid the price.
Joshua didnāt have to be strongā¦God was strong when he was weak.
āOh Godā¦Iām so sorry…ā Joshua whispered, closing his eyes again, gaze falling.
Frau Adelmann removed her hands from his cheeks.
āIām sorryā¦Iām so sorry. Iām sorry I tried to rely on myselfā¦Iām sorry that I didnāt realize how much I really need youā¦I need youā¦I should have relied on your strength, not my own. Please, forgive me for trusting more in myself than I trusted in you.ā
A sudden peace blanketed over him, and Joshua looked upā¦and smiled. āThank youā¦for everything.ā
He slowly stood and faced Frau Adelmann.
She smiled softly. āNow, why donāt you go find Jakob?ā
āI will. Iāll go find him right away.ā Joshua promised.
But before he did, he rushed over to Frau Adelmann and hugged her, tight. āThank youā¦for so much.ā
She smiled. Gently grabbed his hands, stood on the tips of her feet, and kissed his forehead. āIāll always be here when you need me, Joshua. Now go find your brother.ā
Joshua slowly pulled away from her embrace, giving her a smile, and rushed off to find his brother, full of renewed strength and peace.
Wonderful, beautiful peace.
That was one of my favorite recent scenes. I just related so much to Joshua in this one, and I love showing how he has struggles too. ššš
January 24, 2023 at 7:40 pm #129917@freedomwriter76
AHH I MUST DO DISHES BUT I CANT WAIT TO READ IT!!!
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