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Kirrtes is horrifying.
If I had ever learnt, I should have been a great proficient.
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Yep, that is the intention. The question, however, is why?
He is perfect in Justice, yet He is perfect in Mercy, even when we fail Him. For this, He is good.
Nice! Would this actually count as a full short story? I couldn’t detect any full plot, but maybe it’s there. One piece of advice my writing teacher gave us for our short story assignment was ‘make sure you write a short story and not just a scene.’ Putting aside whether it counts as a short story, it’s a really good snapshot/scene at least. Your use of first person narrative worked really well with what you were trying to convey. It’s interesting: I usually don’t think of different perspectives being too different, but this really wouldn’t have worked in 3rd-person. And as HighScribe said, Kirrtes is indeed horrifying.
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Thanks! Great point, it definitely is just a scene, but I regard it as a complete concept, because it has a rounded and closed off structure, so adding anything else would be jarring, and I simply had a goal of explaining the concept well, and maintaining intrigue, so I put it up as a short story because it has a narrative structure that presents my concept, although said narrative structure is too small to constitute an actual, well, narrative. I have written more legitimate short stories before, like Life through the Eye of Yesterdays, which is still pending to potentially be published on KP.
Your use of first person narrative worked really well with what you were trying to convey. It’s interesting: I usually don’t think of different perspectives being too different, but this really wouldn’t have worked in 3rd-person.
Indeed, I really enjoy experiential writing, despite being a very hard worldbuilder at the same time. Stream of Consciousness is a favorite style of mine, which only really works with first person (usually), and it’s perfect for this story, because we experience Liren’s experience of experiencing other’s experiences😂 Third person is great for show not tell when it comes to the actions of characters, and it can switch prospective easily, but it doesn’t really work as well when it comes to show not tell of the character’s perceptions. And again, these are more guidelines than rules, there can be a style of third person that could convey perception really well, it would just look and feel very different.
And as HighScribe said, Kirrtes is indeed horrifying.
Yeah, I want Kirrtes to be a truly terrifying concept on multiple levels. It’s very sentient, It has cosmic level plans, and is mercilessly evil, but I plan to make it scary in more ways as well, not the kind of monster in the closet scary, but the kind that shatters the mind, and the whole sense of self.
He is perfect in Justice, yet He is perfect in Mercy, even when we fail Him. For this, He is good.
I regard it as a complete concept, because it has a rounded and closed off structure, so adding anything else would be jarring, and I simply had a goal of explaining the concept well, and maintaining intrigue, so I put it up as a short story because it has a narrative structure that presents my concept, although said narrative structure is too small to constitute an actual, well, narrative.
Yeah, I figured that was the idea.
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