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  • #95079
    Anonymous
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      @scripter-of-kingdoms Gurl, you know I love this poem! I ain’t got a single negative thing to say! Fabulous job!

      #95083
      Kads
      @scripter-of-kingdoms
        • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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        @gracie-j Awww, thank you! What’s your favourite part of it? <3 πŸ™‚

        staring at the fields
        if nothing's really real
        i'll make the winter now my home

        #95098
        Alexa Autorski
        @writerlexi1216
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          @scripter-of-kingdoms

          Awwww, this was SO SWEET! I love every line of this poem! *heart eyes* And thank you for having a happy ending; I was hoping nothing sad happened because that would’ve broken my heart and I already feel so connected to these characters and it’s just so sweet and… *inhale* Sorry about that. I just love this so much! I don’t have any critiques, so take that as a very well done!!! πŸ™‚

          #95103
          Kads
          @scripter-of-kingdoms
            • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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            @writerlexi1216 Thank you so very much; you have no idea what that means to me. I really tried to express the emotion through it and how the characters felt!! Haha np for having a happy ending, these two deserve it! I could never break their small character bean hearts πŸ’•(yes i love them and they have pet names and everything, these guys are like the new owners of my heart) I’m actually writing a short story about these guys, based off of the poem, so if you want when that’s done I can contact you for beta reading!! <333 Nono, it’s fine XD This made me so happy to read!! Thank you very much!!! ❀️✌️

            (p.s. you still like the idea of making a kp book club/writer’s collective? i actually really wanna do it lol <3)

            staring at the fields
            if nothing's really real
            i'll make the winter now my home

            #95104
            Alexa Autorski
            @writerlexi1216
              • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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              @scripter-of-kingdoms

              No problem, girl!! πŸ™‚ I’m happy that it means a lot to you, and you definitely expressed the emotion very well!! Oh, I give my characters little nicknames/pet names all the time, and they’ve owned my heart as well, so I totally understand XD) Oh, really??? Yay, I’m so glad, because I feel so connected to these characters and wanted to know more about them!!! Yes, please contact me! I’d LOVE to beta read! πŸ˜€

              (Oh, oh, oh, yes!!! Thank you for reminding me! I’d love to make a writing club/collective! <3 *fistbump* Let’s do it!)

              #95107
              Kads
              @scripter-of-kingdoms
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                @writerlexi1216 Awww, thank you again!! XD I’m glad that I was able to show a story through that <3 Lol really?? The boy’s name is Kodia actually, but to me he is koko <3 I’m still considering names for the pixie, but the three I’m leaning towards are Lumenne, Luma, or Aerya/Aera. (Which one do you like most? Do you have any other pixie names? What would you picture the pixie’s name as being? XD sorry I need a few ideas for her name) Yayayayayay! I am glad that you like these guysssssss I will 10000000000000000000000000000000000% contact you when the story is doneeeee!!!

                (YESSSS! Wanna exchange emails or something like that? idk how we would contact, but i’d love to do it

                 

                 

                i promise i’m not really a criminal like my tagline says and i won’t steal your email, i just like to pretend i’m a criminal mastermind >:3 XD)

                • This reply was modified 4 years, 1 month ago by Kads.

                staring at the fields
                if nothing's really real
                i'll make the winter now my home

                #95109
                Alexa Autorski
                @writerlexi1216
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                  @scripter-of-kingdoms

                  Of course!!! <3333333 Yes, and I adore those names!!! (Koko is so cute, oh my goshh!) Oh, I love those names! Personally, I think my favorite is probably Luma. That’s sooooo pretty, and, I mean, Kodia and Luma sound so adorable together!! *fangirls* Okay, I’ll stop now… I think that’s a good name, but if you’re still indecisive, you could go with Lumi, Nia, Nyx, Lyra, or Plume… Things like that, idk. And YES, I do, and I’ll look out for the story!!

                  (Oh, sure!! That sounds fun!! We’ll figure something out πŸ™‚ Haha, that’s good to know!! Sometimes I like to pretend I’m a criminal mastermind too πŸ˜‰Β But don’t tell anyone! >:3 lol!)

                  #95110
                  Kads
                  @scripter-of-kingdoms
                    • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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                    @writerlexi1216 Thank youuuuu <33333 (ikr??!?! he’s so cuteeeee) Yes, I like Luma- I’ll probably go with that πŸ™‚ (Yes, they dooooo they’re the best couple ever reeeeeeeeeeee can i be in their world-) Yay! I will definitely let you know then :3

                    (Yesss, what do you think we should do about contact or whatever? XD

                     

                    AND CRIMINAL MASTERMINDS ARE UNDERRATEDDDDDD)

                    staring at the fields
                    if nothing's really real
                    i'll make the winter now my home

                    #95111
                    Alexa Autorski
                    @writerlexi1216
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                      • Total Posts: 1011

                      @scripter-of-kingdoms

                      Yeah!!! It’s the cutest name eveeeeeer!!! πŸ™‚ Yay, I really like–no, I LOVE that name!! You should totally use it if you like!! Awwww, they are the best couple ever!!! Sorry, I get all fangirly-ish when there’s romance involved… *sigh*

                      We could use email, if you’d like? Here’s mine (it’s pretty basic, and I’m prolly gonna change it soon because my brother made it for me when I was, like, a teeny-weeny child): alexalouwilliams@gmail.com

                      Lou isn’t my middle name, btw, everyone just calls me that for no reason XD AND YES! CRIMINAL MASTERMINDS/LEGEND OF ZELDA FANS/KP BOOK CLUB MEMBERS/FAIRY LOVERS UNITEEEE!!!

                      #95113
                      Kads
                      @scripter-of-kingdoms
                        • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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                        @writerlexi1216 He is just the sweetest li’l thing! (Don’t tell my other charries but he might be my fave XD)Β Β I picture Koko as kinda looking like a younger Ferdia Shaw (google him he’s really cute)Β but with really, really green eyes.Β Lolllll, same. I am very much a fangirly person too XD

                        Sure!! Lol, I don’t actually have myΒ own email, but my mom said it was πŸ‘Œ for me to use hers. I’ll email you right-a now-a! *attempts to type in italian accent*

                        XD Lou is a cute name, I like it! And I have a cousin named Alexa lol.

                        yES! CRIMINAL MASTERMINDS/LEGEND OF ZELDA FANS/KP BOOK CLUBBERS/FAIRY LOVERS UNITE FOREVER AND EVER AND EVER AND EVER AND EVERRRRRRRRRR!!!!!

                        staring at the fields
                        if nothing's really real
                        i'll make the winter now my home

                        #128813
                        Charityanne
                        @charityanne
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                          Beautifully done! Amazing! Inspiring! Dazzling! Marvelous!

                          very good very goodπŸ‘πŸΌπŸ‘πŸΌπŸ‘πŸΌ

                          Applause everyone applause!

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