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  • #81290
    Selah CJW
    @selah-chelyah
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      Hi, all!

      I posted a bit about my current WIP, Out of the Ashes, in my intro topic a bit ago, but this looks more official. XD

      Want to read it? Historical fiction, romance (ish, non-typical), drama, christian, etc, etc. Hard to put into genres, lol. I’m nine chapters into it and adding more all the time, hoping to finish it within a few months. I’d love to have ya’ll read it!

      You can email me at needleworksbyselah@gmail.com if you want to, and I’ll send you the access link to the Google Doc. Thanks! 😀

      Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

      #81314
      Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
      @william-starkey
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        @selah-chelyah You’re welcome. Oh, wait, never mind. XD

        #81400
        Selah CJW
        @selah-chelyah
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          @leon-fleming

          XD!

          *glares*  But you must keep reading, Sir Fleming…

          Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

          #81445
          Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
          @william-starkey
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            @selah-chelyah

            XD OH, I WILL, trust me, I will. 🙂 Hey, here’s a cupcake and a large glass of iced milk. You can go cool off in the screened-in porch with a book and a headlamp. Have a good trip! Don’t forget about that missing cat assignment! Goodbye! Have a pleasant ride! Don’t bore yourself over second-rate candy machines, and PLEASE, don’t eat the gum that you’ll find under the railings in New York City. It doesn’t grow there; you gotta trust me on that, okay? Now don’t worry: I’ll take great care of your mongoose while you’re gone. I’ve done this dozens of times. I’m practically a professional…

            #81454
            Selah CJW
            @selah-chelyah
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              @leon-fleming

              You seriously dare offer me iced milk instead of coffee? Wow. I didn’t think you’d stoop as low as to do something like that.  *shakes head mournfully* And if I can trust you to read the rest of my book, I’ll trust you on the candy gum, I promise…

              p.s. – I already got rid of the mongoose. Actually he rather did it himself. It seems that some animals don’t like rides in WWII-era planes, and I’m afraid he took a dive for the ground at the most unfortunate moment. The mice miss him terribly, as I’m sure you can imagine.

              Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

              #81461
              Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
              @william-starkey
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                @selah-chelyah Why, yes! I thought you simply adored iced milk! Doesn’t everybody?

                XD Oh, uh, yeah… I’ll try to read that within the next 27 hours or so. *shaky laugh* 🙂 Ok, I’ll read it tomorrow. Yeah, I’ll do that. Tomorrow. Me: I’m gonna read it on the morrow. Yeah, that’s what I’m gonna do. I’ll read it then. On the…

                Seriously though, that gum’s a serious problem. You’ve always gotta watch out for those creeps who think it’s nice to do something like that. I mean, is that even sanitary?! 

                Oh, that’s too bad. I’d already killed like twenty snakes (not to mention the eleven fish I caught, the three grasshoppers, and the flamingo); I was really preparing. I even spent three hundred and forty-two bucks on marshmallows. (You know; you told me he liked marshmallows, right?) Well, I’ll just have to send you my bill, anyways. I know how you’re so particular about those kinds of things. Where’d you get the plane? Are you some sort of millionaire? You got a relative who’s in with the government? NOOOOO!!! You’re second cousins thirty-one times removed with the president?! Gosh…

                #81462
                Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
                @william-starkey
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                  Poor Freddy. Poor, poor Freddy. I was just beginning to like him. And the scars from the last time he bit me were just beginning to stop bleeding. That’s really sad. When’s the funeral? (Is there gonna be food?)

                  #81463
                  Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
                  @william-starkey
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                    Not that this is a competition or anything, but I have two more posts than you. And I’ve got coffee waiting in the fridge. And a book waiting on my self. Annndd a really long weekend. I spent all week digging. (My back’s killing me; have I told you that the percentage of grunts passed is going up on an extremely high level?

                    How’s your character development going?

                    #81479
                    Selah CJW
                    @selah-chelyah
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                      @leon-fleming

                      Iced milk? *shivers* I told you I’m an unusual person, did I not? That’s being just purely judgmental. Some narrow minded people! *shakes head*

                      The morrow? But today is the morrow from yesterday. And yesterday was the morrow from the day before that, so that’s subjective entirely. I could tell you that you ought to have it read yesterday, as that was the morrow from the day before that. Very subjective indeed.

                      Speaking of sanitary… *clears throat*…you did happen to read that scene, didn’t you? Or if not, I suppose you’ll do it on the morrow, eh?

                      He did like marshmallows. *sniffles* That is rather vulgar, referring to him as if he were still alive. Don’t you realize that strikes a sensitive chord?

                      I’m afraid my estimation of you continues to plummet. Not only did you refer to Frederick II by a nickname I won’t repeat, but you honestly couldn’t remember my relation to the president? Seriously! For your knowledge in the future (assuming I decide to let you live, that is), I happen to remain the cousin of the president, twenty-eight times removed. I hope for your own sake that your memory clears a little.

                       

                      XD Speaking of who has more posts, you’re technically not being fair when you post three times in one conversation, you know? And I suppose this whole conversation is okay as it’s only a conversation writers would come up with? 😛

                      Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

                      #81485
                      Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
                      @william-starkey
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                        @selah-chelyah Oh, yes, well, in the context of things, that would directly imply to yesterday’s the morrow, which would refer to today.

                        Sanitary what’sit?

                        Oh, sorry. My bad entirely; I’ll pay for all the caviar at the funeral. Oh, uh, I mean the Oreo — no wait, I meant the funeral arrangements.

                        Oh, uh *weak laugh*, yeah, I knew that of course! You don’t look much alike, though. I mean, to be realistic, you look more like someone from South America, whereas, he looks like he was directly imported from France.

                        Totally a conversation summed by the writers’-corner-blocked-by-machine-gums-and-jello-flavoured- taffy. Hey, you never know! Competition is competition! XN

                        #81491
                        Selah CJW
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                          @leon-fleming

                          Oh well, I suppose I’ll have to abdicate on that point. Fine!

                          Just the OOTA scene. Chapter 8 I think? XD You’ll probably know it when you read it…

                          *sobs* The funeral…the funeral already happened! Too late, I’m afraid.

                          What on earth? South America vs France?? XD

                          Oh brother. *eye roll* But I’ll stick to the “official writer’s corner inspiration place” story. Lol!

                           

                          Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

                          #81506
                          Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
                          @william-starkey
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                            @selah-chelyah (btw, XN is a sneeze) I’ll get there sometime. Oh, uh, what do you mean? You mean that I missed it?

                            Yeeeaaaahhh…that. XD

                            Okay, yeah, me too. The other thing takes too long to type.

                            #81510
                            Selah CJW
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                              @leon-fleming

                              Lol! XN is a sneeze? That’s really funny. Like, for real, or did you just make that up? 😛

                              Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

                              #81515
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                              @william-starkey
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                                @selah-chelyah Yeah, no, I totally made that up, but it’s a thing now! XN Excuse me.

                                #81521
                                Selah CJW
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                                  @leon-fleming

                                  Yeah no, eh? Lol. And bless you…

                                  Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

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