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September 10, 2017 at 9:59 pm #43084
@shannon That’s totally alright. đ No problemo!
@f5a8c3e92 @leumeister @dragon-snapper For you who are interested in this project, this is my character Zeb. I haven’t really perfected him yet (there’s some empty stuff and whatnot) but I thought you might like to see the gist of what I have:FULL NAME Zebulun Jack Greenmor
TITLE Winged Defender, Bringer of Winds
NICKNAME Zeb
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AGE 14
GEMSTONE Emerald
DATE of BIRTH May 12
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GENDER Male
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WORLD Earth
COUNTRY United States of America
STATE/PROVINCE Alabama
TOWN Ashland
OCCUPATION Average homeschooled boy by day, Bringer of Winds by night.
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SPECIES Human
RACE White
Skin Tone: Medium-Pale
Blemishes: A tiny bit of freckles, barely visible.
HEIGHT 5′ 6”
WEIGHT 109 lbs
HAIR
Color: Black
Length: 6 inches
Style: Slightly wavy, curls around the brim of his cap.
Facial Hair: None really; he’s still got his baby face.
EYES
Color: Blue
Shape: Wide
DESCRIPTION
Attire: He really just likes to wear t-shirts and jeans, most of which are ripped at the knees, and tennis shoes. While these may vary, it is vary rare to find him without an old tattered Ford cap that belonged to his father, with his c-goggles resting directly atop the bill. Also, he typically keeps his umbrella close at hand.
Overall:
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FRIENDS text
FAMILY Salem Greenmor (Father, Deceased), Anne Greenmor (Mother), Arthur Greenmor (Brother, 2nd child), Asher Greenmor (Brother, 3rd child), Star Greenmor (Sister, 4th child, twin to Sailor), Sailor (Brother, 5th child, twin to Star), Esther (Sister, 6th child).
ROMANTIC STATUS Single
ROMANTIC INTEREST Nah, he’s good.
SPOUSE Uh, no.
CHILDREN Definitely no.
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HOBBIES Memorizing poetry, reading (mostly science), playing with his younger siblings, making up games, thinking, practicing umbrella techniques.
SKILLS Curing boredom (for his siblings, of course), organization, giving orders, leading.
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PERSONALITY:
MBTI text
POSITIVE TRAITS:
Responsible: description
A Leader: description
Street-smart: description
Long-suffering: description
Aware: descriptionNEGATIVE TRAITS:
Uptight: description
Condescending: description
Cynical: description
Over-protective: description
Overly ambitious: descriptionQUIRKS Rubs forehead and tilts head down when stressed/irritated, inhales and exhales deeply as a cathartic procedure, puffs cheeks when mildly stressed, tends to stay up late, traces constellations with eyes at night, drums fingers and constantly changes position when forced to sit still for over five minutes, skips steps when ascending stairs, runs practically everywhere (not because he’s in a hurry, just cause he enjoys it), will hum songs when working hard on something, will occasionally make a pun when he’s not too busy to think, lands in a ninja-like position every time he jumps from somewhere.
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DISLIKES
When people he doesn’t really know hugs/touches him.
Pointless drama. Or any drama, for that matter.
When people take themselves too seriously.
Complainers.
Rain. He loves thunderstorms, but just rain he finds lame.LIKES
His family.
The Bible.
The ocean.
Pride & Prejudice (with Keira Knightly) soundtrack (he hates the movie, but the music is nice).
Cats.FEARS Ruining his family, making the wrong choice, life-or-death dilemmas.
DREAMS To be at peace, and full, and alive, and to keep his family and friends safe.
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HISTORY
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FAVORITE MOVIE He doesn’t watch movies.
FAVORITE SHOW No shows, either.
FAVORITE BOOK The Hobbit (J. R. R. Tolkien)
FAVORITE AUTHOR J. R. R. Tolkien
FAVORITE SUBJECT Science
FAVORITE BAND Casting Crowns
FAVORITE SONG East to West
FAVORITE FOOD Japanese fried rice.
FAVORITE DESSERT Ice cream, specifically Bluebell Peppermint, sold around Christmas.
FAVORITE DRINK Lemonade for every once in a while, water for always.
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LOVER OR FIGHTER? Fighter, but that doesn’t mean he doesn’t love certain people. He fights because he loves, really.
NIGHT OWL OR MORNING BIRD? Night owl.
INTROVERT OR EXTRAVERT? Introvert.
OPTIMIST OR PESSIMIST? Borderline pessimist, though if something is undoubtedly good he’ll accept it.
HOT-HEADED OR COLD-HEARTED? Cold-hearted.
POP OR ROCK? Rock.
HUGS OR KISSES? He’d rather you not touch him unless given permission, thank you.
HEAD OR HEART? Head
INDOORS OR OUTDOORS? Indoors, unless it’s Fall or Winter. Then definitely outdoors.
FUN OR WORK? Work.
BOOKS OR MOVIES? Books.
LOUD OR QUIET? Quiet. Please.
HOT OR COLD? Cold.
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Myers-Briggs Type (MBTI đ ): INTP-T
September 12, 2017 at 4:55 am #43207Here’s my guy. Also, what’s the gemstone entry for?
FULL NAME Levi Dagwood
ALIAS (Robot Codename): UV
TITLE N/A
NICKNAMES Levi
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AGE Between 15 and 18
GEMSTONE ????
DATE of BIRTH Sometime between 1999 and 2002
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GENDER Male
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WORLD Earth
COUNTRY – United States of America
STATE/PROVINCE – Unknown (probably somewhere foresty)
TOWN – Yet to be named
OCCUPATION – Student, test subject for military remote pilot robotics experiment
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SPECIES Human
RACE Caucasian
Skin Tone: Lightly tanned
Blemishes: Maybe a few freckles
HEIGHT 166cm (short for his age)
WEIGHT 56kg
HAIR
Color: Light brown
Length: Medium
Style: Longer at the front, with a middle part
Facial Hair: None
EYE
Color: Green
Shape: Regular
DESCRIPTION
Attire: Shirts (Long sleeve, short sleeve, collared), Jeans, sneakers. Doesnât like hats.
Overall: text
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FRIENDS Casey Dagwood
FAMILY Casey Dagwood (brother)
ROMANTIC STATUS single
ROMANTIC INTEREST He has a crush on a girl he met out on mission disguised as a human (currently unnamed – may come on the team later in the series, thinking of calling her Emma Lakes)
SPOUSE N/A
CHILDREN N/A
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HOBBIES Pranking people of authority, video games, reading, listening to music (maybe develops a creative hobby later)
SKILLS Ability to sneak around almost anywhere undetected. Highly intelligent. Brilliant deductive skills
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PERSONALITY:
MBTI ENTP-A The Debator
POSITIVE TRAITS:
trait: Observant
trait: Quick thinking
trait: Flexible – can improvise
trait: Cunning
NEGATIVE TRAITS:
trait: Headstrong
trait: Ignores pain
trait: Hot-headed – However, heâs not afraid to speak his mind and call out injustices
trait: Deceptive
QUIRKS Taps his foot a lot when nervous. Has a mild form of restless legs. A bit on the blunt side sometimes. Doesn’t like eating fish. Likes to quote movies
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DISLIKES
Dislike Boarding school
Dislike Missions longer than a few days
Dislike The laxative powders they use to prepare them for longer missions
Dislike Fighting with his brother
Dislike Being talked down to
LIKES
Like Reading, especially fiction
Like Some sports, like hockey and basketball
Like Pranking People v – These are exclusive
Like Helping people ^ two mutually
Like 5
FEARS Losing his brother Casey – Being taken out of the military robotics experiment
DREAMS Creating and leading his own team of Remote Pilots
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HISTORY Levi and Casey were part of a fairly well-to-do family. They werenât spoiled, but had a few privileges that they enjoyed.
The only issue is that their parents traveled a lot on business, so they sent them to a boarding school for their education. Even though they traveled a lot, they still saw a lot of each other.
However, one night when driving home from the airport, their father lost control of their car, and they died in a head-on collision with a semi-trailer. Their will stated that they were to be looked after in the boarding school until they were taken in by someone, or Levi had come of age and takes control of the money in the will.
Levi and Casey grew very close after that. But some didnât appreciate how close they were, because they often got into trouble, pranked the staff and some students, and were a general nuisance for the campus.
One day, the school went on a field trip to the military base nearby. During the tour, Levi and Casey broke away from the group to explore the parts that they didnât get to see. They managed to evade the soldiers for a little while until they got distracted by something going on in a room with partly closed shutter blinds. A higher officer caught them, and brought them back to the group, which, upon discovering they had broken away, was waiting outside, and the rest of the tour was canceled.
Yet in spite of this, the officer who caught them figured, since they managed to get all the way back there without being caught, that they might make good test subjects for the robotics experiment. And so he and a few other people working on the experiments took them in.
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FAVORITE MOVIE Pacific Rim (after learning how similar the robotics experiment was to it)
FAVORITE SHOW MacGyver (his dad introduced it to him when he was younger)
FAVORITE BOOK Outbound Flight by Timothy Zahn
FAVORITE AUTHOR Unknown
FAVORITE SUBJECT History and Science
FAVORITE BAND TheFatRat
FAVORITE SONG Windfall, by TheFatRat
FAVORITE FOOD Pizza, but likes most foods
FAVORITE DESSERT Chocolate brownies
FAVORITE DRINK 7-Up
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LOVER OR FIGHTER? Fighter – Once he got himself straightened out, he wants to fight for the good of the world.
NIGHT OWL OR MORNING BIRD? A combination between the two. Can stay up fairly late, but still get up early for a teenager.
INTROVERT OR EXTRAVERT? Extravert
OPTIMIST OR PESSIMIST? Optimist
HOT-HEADED OR COLD-HEARTED? Hot-headed
POP OR ROCK? Electronic, actually.
HUGS OR KISSES? Hugs
HEAD OR HEART? Sometimes one, sometimes the other, sometimes both
INDOORS OR OUTDOORS? Outdoors
FUN OR WORK? Fun
BOOKS OR MOVIES? He likes both, but not at the same time.
LOUD OR QUIET? Loud.
HOT OR COLD? Hot (why?)
âSeptember 12, 2017 at 12:24 pm #43212@leumeister I love this! And the gemstone thing is literally just something fun I put in there – there’s a gem for every month. It isn’t necessary that you use it, haha. Anyway, the Hot or Cold question at the end is supposed to say which he prefers. I love your character! He’s very interesting. And is his age unknown, or are you giving me leave to choose his age?
Myers-Briggs Type (MBTI đ ): INTP-T
September 13, 2017 at 2:17 am #43257Hey, thanks! đ Oh, I see. I think I knew that, but I forgot. đ
Oh, okay. Preference. Makes sense
I don’t think his age is unknown, per se, but that’s the age range that I picture him in, and since the series is set in 2017, his birthday would have to be set between 1999 and 2002, if he’s going to be those ages specifically.
Anyway, I thought of him, and after I looked up the Modern Four crossover series, I thought he’d be a pretty good fit, considering the talents and abilities and technology the characters had access to. I can endorse him in a non-canon crossover series if that works. đ
September 13, 2017 at 3:31 am #43258@daughteroftheking Glad you like her. I actually made her a bit of a fusion of a close friend of mine and a teacher I really like and see as a mentor.
@graceofspades2017 Yes, I am from the glorious ‘Land Down Under’! XD
Yeah, a mentor kind of character would be fine. Well, Australia is a wonderful place.
Um… We’re pretty similar to the US, besides the fact that our accents are more similar to Southern English and that we are far less populous. Aussies themselves tend to be fairly ‘chill’ people and as the coast (and a little inland in our Eastern states) is the only livable part of the country, many of us tend to go to the beach quite often. I’d say that Clara is from Brisbane, which is the capital city of Queensland.
Not exactly sure what to tell you about Straya but if you have any more specific questions, I’ll be happy to answer them. đ"Not all who wander are lost."
Wild Australian. INXJ.September 14, 2017 at 8:01 pm #43348@leumeister Feel free! I don’t mind at all. đ
@f5a8c3e92 That is so cool! And thank you – that’ll do for now. đMyers-Briggs Type (MBTI đ ): INTP-T
September 22, 2017 at 10:06 pm #44486Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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FULL NAME Kiera Anne Haigh
ALIAS Princess Coral
TITLE Countess
NICKNAMES Kier by friends
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AGE 16
GEMSTONE Aquamarine (fyi, I’m choosing not to associate this w/ birthstone)
DATE of BIRTH May 15, 2001
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GENDER Female
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WORLD Earth
COUNTRY The United States of America
STATE/PROVINCE California
TOWN Huntingdon Beach
OCCUPATION Student, Babysitter, Dreamer
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SPECIES Human
RACE European; Caucasian
Skin Tone: Fair
Blemishes: Birthmark on upper leg
HEIGHT 5â 6â
WEIGHT 100
HAIR
Color: Reddish Gold
Length: 20â
Style: Long, loose, and wavy
Facial Hair: None
EYE
Color: Gray
Shape: Prominent
DESCRIPTION
Attire: Tank tops, shorts in summer. Prefers anything western styled in the winter.
Overall: Likes to stay neat and orderly, never wears make-up
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FRIENDS Rylee Hanover (3rd cousin twice removed, but mainly just a good friend), Jax Christian Moore
FAMILY Mother: Maria Father: Hubert Sister: Jana Brother: Cameron
ROMANTIC STATUS Umm, nope!
ROMANTIC INTEREST No way!
SPOUSE Obviously notâŚ
CHILDREN Nu-uh
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HOBBIES Singing, guitar (acoustic), jewelry making, babysitting, listening to music (all the time with her iPod), chatting with friends, and spending money
SKILLS Guitar, reading, editing, teasing people, singing
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PERSONALITY:
MBTI ENTP
POSITIVE TRAITS:
Sees the best in othersâ¨Very truthful
Creative; Adaptiveâ¨Activeâ¨Independent
Loves to get up with the birdsâ¨NEGATIVE TRAITS:
Speaks before thoughtâ¨Likes to be in control; micromanagerâ¨Worries about the futureâ¨Stresses about everythingâ¨QUIRKS Hates make-up, high heels, and finds it more difficult to talk to peers. Has no problem w/ adults and younger kids, slight English accent, hates dessert (all except for sorbet, creme brulee, stracciatella gelato and coffee, sweet cream, or vanilla ice cream), and candy (except for dark chocolate)
âDISLIKES
Scorpionsâ¨
Snakesâ¨
Satan
â¨Hot weather; unless you can go swimming
â¨Make-up, high heelsâ¨
LIKES
Cool, refreshing weather
Wind
A hot cup of tea and a classic book
â¨Horses
Mountains and big trees
Singing
â¨FEARS Doesnât want to hurt other peoples feelings, not telling the truth
DREAMS Wants to get married someday, have 4 kids, maybe own a dude ranch with incredible views, write hit songs, and travel the USA
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HISTORY At the age of 9, she was adopted from an English orphanage. Had trouble adjusting to life in America at first, but made it through alright. Her adopted siblings gave her the nickname of Princess Coral because of her European heritage and her unquenchable love for the beach. As she got older, she discovered that she had special powers. She feels like she is in sync with nature. Whenever she wants, she can have the stamina of a fox, the eyesight of an owl, the hearing of a falcon, the agility of a mountain goat, the swimming power of the dolphin and the power of a horse.
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FAVORITE MOVIE McLintock!
FAVORITE SHOW The Andy Griffith Show
FAVORITE BOOK Eight Cousins, Calico Captive, What Katy Did series, Classic books like âThe Count of Monte Cristoâ, âJane Eyreâ, âPride and Prejudiceâ, âIvanhoeâ.
FAVORITE AUTHOR Louisa May Alcott, Elizabeth George Speare
FAVORITE SUBJECT Historical Fiction
FAVORITE BAND Cozi Zuelsdorff, Alan Jackson, Toby Keith
FAVORITE SONG Shouldâve Been a Cowboy (by Toby Keith), Brave Souls (by Cozi Zuelsdorff), So Magical (by Martina McBride), Would You Go With Me (by Josh Turner)
FAVORITE FOOD Mangoes, Italian, and Mexican foods
FAVORITE DESSERT Raspberry sorbet
FAVORITE DRINK Ice water
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LOVER OR FIGHTER? Fighter
NIGHT OWL OR MORNING BIRD? Morning Bird
INTROVERT OR EXTRAVERT? Extraverted; prefers smaller crowds
OPTIMIST OR PESSIMIST? Optimistic
HOT-HEADED OR COLD-HEARTED? Hot-headed
POP OR ROCK? Prefers country or pop
HUGS OR KISSES? Hugs
HEAD OR HEART? Head, but lets her heart get the better of her judgement sometimes
INDOORS OR OUTDOORS? Outdoors
FUN OR WORK? Both, depends on mood. Fun when she can enjoy it with friends, work when she feels bored or knows things need to be done.
BOOKS OR MOVIES? Both, depends on mood. Books on late nights and on rainy days, movies when tired in the evening
LOUD OR QUIET? Both on occasionâŚwould prefer not to yell
HOT OR COLD? Prefers cold because sheâs very hot natured
âOk, @graceofspades2017, this turned out to be an extremely crazily accurate caricature of me (except for the history, place where she lives, name, alias, facial characteristics etc.). Anyway, hope this works for you!
September 25, 2017 at 10:08 am #45257@shannon That is AWESOME! I love it! Thanks so much for your help.
Myers-Briggs Type (MBTI đ ): INTP-T
September 25, 2017 at 10:28 am #45258Anonymous- Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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Happy to do it @graceofspades2017 It was lots of fun!
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