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    Jenna Terese
    @jenwriter17
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      @dekreel

      Dekreel, I am sooooo sorry it took me so long to read your children’s story!!! I’ve had a lot of reading to do for school, which has been pushing a lot of other stuff off…

      but anyway, my thoughts are pretty similar to everyone else’s. there could be more tension and conflict involved and a bit more character building to make them each unique in different ways. I think maybe the drop off on Demon’s Cliff should be mentioned earlier as well, kinda foreshadowing. (unless you did this? sorry I might forget some thing; I read it in small parts over a long period of time). But I did enjoy this and I’m biting my nails cuz you left off there! 😀

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      Joy
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        @jenwriter17  That’s okay!!

        Makes sense. I will keep all of those in mind 🙂

        • This reply was modified 6 years, 9 months ago by Joy.

        You can pronounce it however you want.

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