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@savannah_grace2009 I know 😅 Yes, an accurate representation…made me cry so many times writing it tho! XD
Aww, tysm😭😭💕 Haha! XD I already have someone at Church that wants me to sign his copy “To my biggest fan” 🤣
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made me cry so many times writing it tho! XD
I haven’t actually cried while writing any stories (though I have a feeling that my current WIP will do it sometime soon as it deals with abuse, romance, and evil in general and some parts are sad!). I once wrote a sad chapter last spring for a school assignment about this boy who was pushed off a water tower (sounds dumb, I know) and his siblings later found him and were crying over him.. and I literally teared up.
Do you have a website for your book? Send me the link if you make one/have one when you become an accomplished author, I will order all your books, lol
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I haven’t actually cried while writing any stories (though I have a feeling that my current WIP will do it sometime soon as it deals with abuse, romance, and evil in general and some parts are sad!). I once wrote a sad chapter last spring for a school assignment about this boy who was pushed off a water tower (sounds dumb, I know) and his siblings later found him and were crying over him.. and I literally teared up.
It depends on how emotional I am in the moment, lol. 😅
Oof, sounds pretty sad to me…poor siblings 🥺 (sounds pretty angsty XD)
From what I’ve read, your book seems really interesting!! 💕🤩
I do not have a website, but I’ll certainly let everyone know when I have one! 🥰
it means a lot, girl <3
@freedomwriter76
Only read this if you want too…but look how outdated the style is!!! I can’t believe I used to write like this, and that was just last year! CRINGE. This is one of the only scenes that I teared up during…and i still don’t really get why. It’s not that good tbh…
Jorryn
After what seems like at least a million more steps down, I dare to look up. I have come so far! If only my gym teacher could see me now!
Well, he would probably make fun of me for crying, or get mad at how stupid I must be to climb the water tower. But that doesn’t really matter right now. I take a deep breath and begin to descend the ladder again. My legs are shaking, not from fear this time, but from exhaustion. How much longer can I keep this up? Just when my arms are ready to pop out of their sockets, and just when every muscle in my legs is about to snap like a twig, my foot touches the ground. I collapse into the soft grass, breathing in the cool forest air. The grass tickles my face like something awful, but I don’t care. I’m safe and on the ground!
I muster up the strength to yell.
“Jayce, I made it down!” I turn my head in every direction, trying to find him. He doesn’t answer. Everything is still. I strain to hear something, anything!
My breath catches in my throat as I hear the sound of crying. I grab onto the rung of the tower in front of me and use it to pull myself up to a standing position. My legs feel like Jell-O, and my arms ache so bad! It doesn’t take me long to spot Jayce and Lilitu. Jayce has his head in his hands, and Lilitu has his arm around Jayce. I forget all about the pain as I jog over to them.
“What’s happening, why are you-” and then I look at the ground. And I scream
Lilitu
He could only watch in stunned silence as the two children fell to their knees in front of the body. Their tears fell to the ground like rain drops as they mourned the loss of their brother. He wanted to comfort them, to tell them that he was sorry, but he doubted that it would mean much to them. Jorryn held her brother’s cold stiff hand for the last time as she cried for him.
He hadn’t noticed it before, but the air was chilling to the bone, and there was a strange feeling about the situation. As he looked at the body, the pieces began falling into place, all at once. The Traitor had been here, and he had killed this innocent child.
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With his immense strength, Lilitu heaved another large branch onto the pile. He knew they had to make a shelter, and fast. Lilitu was not familiar with the flora and fauna of this planet, but he had heard tales of large monsters that had a whip for a tail, and knives on their feet that could jump twice their height. Though he also didn’t think that a shelter made of branches and twigs would do much good against one of those, he preferred not to think about that.
He glanced over at Jayce and Jorryn. They had been crying for the last hour or so, and they didn’t show signs of stopping. He had never had a brother; his parents abandoned him when he was a child. Azazel was the only family he had, and now that too was taken from him.
Normally he would shove that thought into the depths of his soul, but something in him wondered if maybe, maybe this time it would be okay to stop putting off what he should have done. To mourn the loss of his family, and to mourn what could have been his. Against his will, he pulled himself over to the two children, and sat between them. He put his arms around them and pulled them close. He felt their shuddering breaths against his body, and then he did what he hadn’t done for many years.
Lilitu, the mighty Forgotten One cried.
Jayce
“Jayce, Lilitu made us a shelter,” Jorryn touches my shoulder.
“I want to stay out here,” I reply.
“Please, Jayce?” Jorryn pleads. “Staring at his…body….isn’t going to make him come back to life.” The words are so true, but I don’t want to believe them.
“I just can’t believe this is real,” I whisper.
“I know, but just please come with me. Lilitu caught a rabbit for us,” she takes my hand and gently tugs me away from my brother.
“How did he even…die?” I manage to say through the pain. My throat is burning from holding back tears. And I thought that an hour ago I had used them all up. Another question that I dare not say aloud: where is Jay? Is he alive? Is he somewhere by himself, alone, waiting to die?
“Lilitu says that he fell off the water tower somehow, but I think he knows more than he’s letting on.” I nod. How is she being so calm and casual about all this? We just lost our brother! I yank my hand away from hers.
“Just leave me alone! Do you even care? Did you even love him?” I yell. I know I’m being ridiculous, but I can’t stop. “You act like he’s some stranger to you! He was your brother, Wren!” Jorryn backs away, stricken. Her face is as though I had slapped her.
“I did love him! Stop being so selfish, this isn’t all about you, Jayce!” She turns away and begins to run to the shelter. I see Lilitu bent over a steaming pot. Right now I’m not very hungry.
“I’m taking a walk,” I yell over my shoulder. What did she mean? I’m not being selfish, and I am definitely not making this all about me. He’s my brother! I kick a stick across the dirt. The feeling of anger stabs me in the chest, closing in. Jude was taken from me, and there’s absolutely no solution to get him back. I realize that my face is wet. I’ve been crying so much that I don’t even realize when I’m crying.
I walk out of the clearing and into the forest. What is wrong with you, Jayce? Where are you even going?
“Far away from them,” I mutter under my breath.
Lukas&Livia
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Sef&Chase
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Oof, sounds pretty sad to me…poor siblings 🥺 (sounds pretty angsty XD)
From what I’ve read, your book seems really interesting!! 💕🤩
Well that scene was from an old story, which gave me the idea to write my current WIP based off of that. So it didn’t make it through editing, neither did most of that very sloppy 41K very rough “draft”/novel for school, but it did set my inspiration in motion!
I know you’re probably busy with editing and such, but if you want I can either tag you in the thread I have for my WIP or just give you the link here: https://editor.reedsy.com/s/p8SdhuQ
If you don’t have time, that’s fine!
I do not have a website, but I’ll certainly let everyone know when I have one! 🥰
it means a lot, girl <3
Aww thanks! (or maybe you’re welcome? idk XD)
Lukas&Livia
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LEFSE FOREVER!!!!!! <333Here is a random mood board I made… Markus is the MC in Plugged In (a novel I was working on a long time ago that I’m considering re-writing…).
I can’t decide if I should re-do this board… cuz’ there are some things I don’t like about it…. 😒
🤍 Ira | Jara | Evelyn | Flaz | Blaine 🤍
@savannah_grace2009 @grcr @acancello @freedomwriter76 @everyone
Hey all! If anyone needs/wants help with moodboards or something like that, I’m happy to make one for one of your characters!
I know most people on here actually enjoy making them, but it could be interesting to see someone else’s ideas for one of your characters… Just throwing it out there!
"Be careful, for writing books is endless, and much study wears you out." Eccl. 12:12
Okay, awesome! I have to finish my school Friday but I could probably start working on it this afternoon. What’s your character like? Any pictures or references you want in it?
What genre/aesthetic is the story, also?
"Be careful, for writing books is endless, and much study wears you out." Eccl. 12:12
School Friday…. Lol I meant “finish my school first” sorry that sounded weird.
"Be careful, for writing books is endless, and much study wears you out." Eccl. 12:12
lol
Ok! Lets see… (sorry this took so long to type…)
…. I do need a board for my warrior trainer Kazimir Ransley… (his is the one I’ve been struggling to make…)
(I don’t know how applicable this is but…. 😜) He’s 36 years old when I first introduce him in the story. He has dark black hair, pale skin, and gold eyes. He’s kind of gothic… aaannnddd I don’t have a picture for him yet…
Kazimir is quiet, with lots of leader traits. He is a professional swordsman (and knows how to use tons of other weapons as well), and he loves working as a warrior. He’s been through a lot of childhood trauma, and he is the only one in his family who is still alive. He likes knife making and (chainsaw) wood carving.
I don’t really have any references… but I did want the Bruce Lee quote “The successful warrior is the average man, with laser-like focus.” to be on the board somewhere.
The story genre is… adventure, I guess… kind-of… mostly… yeah… I think…
As far as the aesthetic… mmm… I’m not really sure. All of the MCs in the story have sad backgrounds, but I don’t know if “grief” or “sorrow” is an aesthetic, and the story is rather focused on the MCs becoming warriors… but then, I don’t know if there’s a “warrior” or “military” aesthetic…
Anyhow, sorry if this is kinda confusing…. Thanks a whole ton!! 😊
🤍 Ira | Jara | Evelyn | Flaz | Blaine 🤍
Okay, sounds good! No problem, I get it XD
Soo, does he have a certain color aesthetic? Or what are some other things important to his character (if there is any)? I think military type might be an aesthetic, I’m sure I could find some stuff online.
It might be easier if you try to find the reference pic, because I know how hard it is to find one that looks like your character. Unless you really don’t care, I just don’t want to go with one that’s completely wrong with how you’ve been picturing him, lol.
"Be careful, for writing books is endless, and much study wears you out." Eccl. 12:12
lol 😅
Soo, does he have a certain color aesthetic? Or what are some other things important to his character (if there is any)?
(Oh dear, should’ve thought to mention that… 😑) Yeah… His aesthetic color is dark gray. Aannndd I can’t think of anything else that’s important to his character, rn.. (my mind is going blank…)
I think military type might be an aesthetic, I’m sure I could find some stuff online.
Oh. Alrighty!! 😄
It might be easier if you try to find the reference pic, because I know how hard it is to find one that looks like your character. Unless you really don’t care, I just don’t want to go with one that’s completely wrong with how you’ve been picturing him, lol.
lol… (I looked just now and I can’t really find anything close enough… *sighs sadly* So we can just exclude the pic for now…)
🤍 Ira | Jara | Evelyn | Flaz | Blaine 🤍
Okay, sounds good!
"Be careful, for writing books is endless, and much study wears you out." Eccl. 12:12
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