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August 17, 2024 at 1:17 pm #184584
Heyyyy!!! soooo I just recently got back to my Star Wars fanfic after taking a good bit of the summer off, and I have added a bit. I need some fresh eyes on it because I’m kinda in that place where you feel like you’re taking too far of a stretch just to get forward in the story, but idk.
I am open to all critiques (aside from the fact that I threw any and all timelines out the window, but I digress)
@artistodysseyfan @keilah-h @theloonyone and anyone else who likes star wars!!"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
August 17, 2024 at 2:58 pm #184589@eveln-collins yay you’re back!!
and haha, forget timelines this is fanfic we’re talking about! I saw you were rewriting it.
The next part’s pretty good so far. Maybe have her lead the droid into one of the actual cells and just lock it in there so it can’t sound the alarm? she could say something like “wait a minute I think it was the door to one of the actual cells instead of the main door” to get it in there, then just close it on the droid before it can get out or something
then go looking for Crosshair
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 17, 2024 at 3:09 pm #184593@evelyn-collins blahhh messed up your tag
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 18, 2024 at 8:40 am #184611@keilah-h Hellooo!!!
That’s a good idea!! thanks! I get writer’s block WAY too easy.
also, believe it or not, I have been called Eveln in real life face to face with someone, along with just about a hundred other much less acurate names, including Nora… for half a year.
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
August 18, 2024 at 2:47 pm #184619@evelyn-collins yeah I get that, it’s just how it is sometimes…
also, believe it or not, I have been called Eveln in real life face to face with someone, along with just about a hundred other much less accurate names, including Nora… for half a year.
How does someone make that mistake?? LOL
if you have any other questions about your story, I’m totally open!!
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 18, 2024 at 3:15 pm #184621@keilah-h So, I was in a theater program with about 64 other kids, and one time I stole my friend’s name tag, ironically the day before she quit. What I didn’t know was that the choreographer had taken a picture of me in the background. for the next six months, she called me Nora, and I didn’t respond the entire time, not even knowing she was talking to me. on Valentine’s Day, she came up to me and said “Why do you keep ignoring me, Nora?!”
I was just like “Who?”
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
August 18, 2024 at 3:18 pm #184622@evelyn-collins lollll you just can’t make that kinda stuff up can ya?
People mispronounce my name all the time, or they hear it before they read it and then spell it as “Kayla.” I got used to it a long time ago XD
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 18, 2024 at 3:22 pm #184623@keilah-h Also, my biggest issue right now (and kind of always) Is moving forward.
I have this fear when I write about a character that isn’t my own that I am going to be super inaccurate. like, in all the scenes with Crosshair, I have procrastinated SOOOO much.
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
August 18, 2024 at 3:26 pm #184624[quote quote=184622] ] People mispronounce my name all the time, or they hear it before they read it and then spell it as “Kayla.” I got used to it a long time ago XD[/quote]
Relatable!
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"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
August 18, 2024 at 3:31 pm #184626@evelyn-collins ikr?
also here’s a fanfic tip: Wanna learn how to write Crosshair correctly? Learn his mannerisms. Get inside his gray-haired, burn-scarred head. Re-watch Bad Batch, every scene with Crosshair. If you’re allowed to do so, I’m pretty sure you can find YouTube videos that’s like “Bad Batch but only when Crosshair is on screen” or something if you don’t want to watch almost every episode over again. Maybe write a short story from his perspective to get the hang of him. You don’t have to share it.
For me, writing a character who’s not mine honestly comes kinda easily if I’ve seen enough of the works he’s in.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 18, 2024 at 3:41 pm #184628You told me that before, and I have been doing that since Tuesday!! I got a terrible virus and couldn’t sleep, so I was like “It is time” so I watched all the episodes that focused on him, and have been watching the YouTube thingies!
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
August 18, 2024 at 3:45 pm #184629@evelyn-collins Oh I did? LOL I don’t remember that, but ok!
shame you got sick but hey, at least you have free time to learn to write Crosshair’s personality!
also, it’s ok if he’s a little off character, considering we have no idea how he’d react to having a daughter that’s been separated from him for pretty much about her entire existence.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 18, 2024 at 4:05 pm #184630August 19, 2024 at 8:59 pm #184683@evelyn-collins I’ve been doing good!! Been writing a fanfic (It’s not Star Wars but it’s a sci-fi, I have it up in the fan fiction chat if you’d like to see it), and also playing some Minecraft and this game series called World Of Goo. There are two games and I’ve beaten both of them.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 20, 2024 at 9:24 am #184700@keilah-h I will definitely check it out!
"Fives, no!" "Fives, YeS!"
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