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August 25, 2024 at 10:49 am #184946
Probably Mandin. I love how much he cares for Nahim like an older brother.
Awesome!
WE ARE REVIVING THE PROTECTION SQUAD! *steals Joseph, Julian, and Sabina from Ellette*
August 26, 2024 at 2:11 pm #184962Chapters 9 and 10 should now be on the docs.
Just note I really do not like chapter 9, and I’m just bearing with it right now cuz I’m not sure exactly how I want to change it.
"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully π)August 26, 2024 at 2:30 pm #184966@rae ahh makes sense. I mean, I don’t think I have a noticeable accent but I chop off the g’s and whatnot when talking sometimes, so I think I’d type my own speech pattern like that too.
ooh interesting! I like that idea, it’s unique. I think it’d be a cool idea that if you’re planning to publish this book/series, to include a guidebook with maps of planets/galaxies, descriptions and pictures of major characters/creatures (both sentient and not) and objects like weapons and spaceships, glossaries of all the words/phrases you have in your created languages, etc. That’d be really cool, and I always love reading those when I find them for a fandom I enjoy.
Where'd I get ya this time? The liver? The kidney? I'm runnin' outta places to put holes in ya.
August 27, 2024 at 10:18 am #185007Okay, thank you! Yay, Mandin is back π That’s totally fine! As long as you can keep writing from that point, you can always come back and change it once you’re done.
WE ARE REVIVING THE PROTECTION SQUAD! *steals Joseph, Julian, and Sabina from Ellette*
August 27, 2024 at 1:32 pm #185021Yay, Mandin is back π
Did you really miss him that much!? he was only gone for…three and a half chapters!
He’ll be sticking around a while until something happens…oh man I just realized how much you’re gonna hate me XD
"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully π)August 27, 2024 at 1:33 pm #185022You’ll find out chapter 20 or so.
"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully π)August 28, 2024 at 9:12 am #185078AHEM… Does this mean what I think it does?? π
Yes, because I wasn’t sure when he would be back in the story xD.
Side note: I was listening to this song last night and it reminded me of your story, it’s called Lean on Me. I’m not sure who was singing it. βΊοΈ
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August 31, 2024 at 3:07 pm #185154AHEMβ¦ Does this mean what I think it does?? π
Umm…no comment
Oh, and I looked up that song and it totally fits. Thanks for the suggestion!
I’m not sure when I’ll have chapter 11 for you. I’m kinda stumped right now. As soon as I finish I’ll post 11, don’t worry.
"You need French Toast."
#AnduthForever (hopefully π)October 5, 2024 at 11:04 am #186725October 5, 2024 at 7:00 pm #186783Oh boy, I have a lot of reading to do…
"Do you want me to keep the sideburns?"
#AnduthForever (Lord Willing)October 28, 2024 at 10:27 am #188465So sorry I missed that! I’ll check back up on it and give you some feedback asap.
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October 28, 2024 at 12:54 pm #188473Ok, Chapter 11. It was good. I liked seeing Nahim with the guys and Mandin haha. There was a lot of unconsciousness and Nahim not responding to people, but I get that (a) they’re fighting spiders that make you fall asleep and (b) Nahim has some issues with talking to other people. Those were my main thoughts. Overall, great job!
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