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  • #81694
    Linyang Zhang
    @devastate-lasting
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      @leon-fleming Ah, my cousins are all boys, but they and my sister and I make a perfect staircase (we’re all only one year apart). Then there’s my youngest cousin, who is eight years younger than me.

      Ah, my family’s pretty messed up too. My grandparents were around before the Communists came along, so they’ve been through some pretty crazy stuff. (My great grand uncle’s family as well as another family were murdered to death on the front lawn of the house that’s been passed through my mother’s side for generations.)

      I hope you feel better now…? Though I don’t want to discount sad things; they’re important to talk about too.

      Lately, it's been on my brain
      Would you mind letting me know
      If hours don't turn into days

      #81695
      Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
      @william-starkey
        • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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        @devastate-lasting Wow. Yeah, that’s true.

        #81696
        Linyang Zhang
        @devastate-lasting
          • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
          • Total Posts: 1700

          @selah-chelyah @leon-fleming

          I like how whenever KP sends me the update that either of you posted something, they’re in separate tabs. I dunno why Leon’s in promotions and Selah’s in updates. It’s weird XD.

          Also, a poem of 25 lines or longer? I’ve written plenty of poetry when I was younger, several over 25 lines. You want me to post one? Or write one on the spot?

          Lately, it's been on my brain
          Would you mind letting me know
          If hours don't turn into days

          #81697
          Linyang Zhang
          @devastate-lasting
            • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
            • Total Posts: 1700

            Did I really just write “murdered to death”…

            Lately, it's been on my brain
            Would you mind letting me know
            If hours don't turn into days

            #81698
            Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
            @william-starkey
              • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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              @devastate-lasting XD Well, I think we can definitely discuss the promotions and updates here, yeah…

              Oh, yeah, write one on the spot. But take your time with it. 🙂

              #81700
              Linyang Zhang
              @devastate-lasting
                • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
                • Total Posts: 1700

                @leon-fleming

                Something struck

                Like the weight of a truck

                And he flew through the air

                And hit the wall, filled with pain

                And thought he was dying again

                But he saw her hair

                Hanging down in front of him

                And there she was, smiling at him

                And helping him up

                Apologizing for the excitement that she had

                At seeing him.

                But he was merely dreaming

                Nothing was what it seemed then

                And he was drifting away

                Into sleep, into night

                Until he could no longer see the light

                The blood flowed down

                And obscured his sight

                But was she really there

                Welcoming him up the stairs

                To a place

                Where he could be happy?

                Or did he have to die again

                Again and again and again and

                He opened his eyes once more.

                (I’m sorry I only know how to write sad stuff based on stories I make up)

                Lately, it's been on my brain
                Would you mind letting me know
                If hours don't turn into days

                #81701
                Selah CJW
                @selah-chelyah
                  • Rank: Loyal Sidekick
                  • Total Posts: 245

                  @leon-fleming

                  Bah! A poem? Me? I haven’t written a poem for years, and the ones I wrote then I never want to think about again. That’s not really my forte…


                  @devastate-lasting

                  Lol, that’s funny. I wonder why it does that.

                  Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

                  #81702
                  Selah CJW
                  @selah-chelyah
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                    @devastate-lasting

                    Murdered to death…XD That’s twice as graphic.

                    • This reply was modified 4 years, 6 months ago by Selah CJW.

                    Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

                    #81704
                    Selah CJW
                    @selah-chelyah
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                      @devastate-lasting

                      Whoa, that was good. And dramatic! How do you guys do that? So cool. It’s really crazy, too, with your signature at the end like that. XD

                      Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

                      #81708
                      Linyang Zhang
                      @devastate-lasting
                        • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
                        • Total Posts: 1700

                        @selah-chelyah Haha thank you! I didn’t even notice the signature at the end lol.

                        Hmm…then can you write a five sentence story? XD

                        Lately, it's been on my brain
                        Would you mind letting me know
                        If hours don't turn into days

                        #81709
                        Selah CJW
                        @selah-chelyah
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                          @devastate-lasting

                          XD Yeah!

                          It was a cold and windy night. The Indians were sitting around the campfire. The Indian chief stood up and said, “It was a cold and windy night. The Indians were sitting around the campfire. The Indian chief stood up and said…”

                          XD No really, sorry, I need to go write. My brain is nuts right now. Ugh. 😛

                          Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

                          #81710
                          Linyang Zhang
                          @devastate-lasting
                            • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
                            • Total Posts: 1700

                            @selah-chelyah Haha, that’s great. You’re excused :).

                            Lately, it's been on my brain
                            Would you mind letting me know
                            If hours don't turn into days

                            #81711
                            Selah CJW
                            @selah-chelyah
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                              • Total Posts: 245

                              @devastate-lasting

                              XD!

                              Prendre garde ~ I bleed ink

                              #81714
                              Alien and Sojourner in a Foreign Land
                              @william-starkey
                                • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
                                • Total Posts: 634

                                @devastate-lasting Nice poem; now write one in full octosyllabic lines with an AABB, etc rhyme scheme: three to five stanzas long on something you’ve never written about before. You can take your time. 🙂


                                @selah-chelyah
                                Oh, come on now! 🙂 You can try; it’s really quite simple actually. All you have to do is start writing. Don’t think about rhymes. And I mean AT ALL. Rhyming doesn’t matter. That’s rule number one for someone who doesn’t know how to write poetry. It’s not all about rhyming. Rhyming is just an extra added facet to the package; it adds a musical theme that carries the poem to an extent. But poetry doesn’t lean on rhyming for its backbone. Try this: write out a description of a very emotional scene (don’t worry about content, just the wording), and try to make your sentences as long as you can get them without breaking any rules of English grammar. Focus mainly on description. And write this in prose, not poetry. Somewhere around five to seven sentences long. This should only take around ten to fifteen minutes. Then split that paragraph into lines of eight syllables each. I say eight syllables because that’s a fairly simple meter scale. Then send it to me somehow. Maybe Google Docs?

                                This is just a simple exercise that helps beginners (not that you’re a beginner or anything, or even that you’ll actually do this at all XD) to realize that writing poetry is as easy as drawing a stick figure on a paper with a pencil. You get the bare bones, then add on extra features.

                                NOTE: Getting the bare bones then adding extra features is just one way of writing poetry.

                                #81728
                                Linyang Zhang
                                @devastate-lasting
                                  • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
                                  • Total Posts: 1700

                                  @leon-fleming Here’s my best shot

                                  The French fries lying on the floor,

                                  Have been stepped on, and are no more,

                                  The ketchup splattered everywhere,

                                  All over my apron was smeared.

                                  Pick it up and now try again,

                                  A handful in the frying pan,

                                  Hot oil splatters, burns my skin,

                                  Isn’t my fault my shirt’s too thin.

                                  “Would you like fries with that, good sir?

                                  It only costs 60 cents more.”

                                  So life is constantly this way,

                                  I’m covered in filth

                                  By the end of the day.

                                  Lately, it's been on my brain
                                  Would you mind letting me know
                                  If hours don't turn into days

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