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March 15, 2021 at 4:46 pm #95582
Aye, so I finally finished a short story I started sometime last year…it’s essentially a combination of a lot of things I’m not used to, including but not limited to: description, different character voice, trying to write in a different style, a semi-retelling allegory, etc, etc, etc, etc…. I wanted to practice a lot of stuff, take a break from my usual style of work…
Anyways, if you guys could maybe look it over and tell me what you think? Absolutely no pressure, of course. How was the style? Did it seem ok? Was the character voice okay?
Anyways, the link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ujO0OKa66-BrMcSM6VDuKa5FmSUB9AA1/view?usp=sharing
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@gracie-j @nova21 @issawriter7 @writerlexi1216 @daisy-torres @anyone-else
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If hours don't turn into daysMarch 15, 2021 at 5:13 pm #95583OOooh, girl, this is SO exciting!!!!!!!!! THANK YOU SOO MUCH for tagging me!!!!! I’ll definitely be reading this, but I probably won’t get to it tomorrow if that’s okay. <33 Can’t WAIT!!!!!!! *does not know what wait is capitalized*
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TeenWritersNook.comMarch 15, 2021 at 5:14 pm #95584@issawriter7 Ahh tysm! No problem, take your time!
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If hours don't turn into daysMarch 15, 2021 at 9:12 pm #95609Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@devastate-lasting OOH!! I can’t wait to read it, but ’tis a wee bit late over here, so I won’t get to it ’til tomorrow!!! I’ll let you know then, aight?
March 15, 2021 at 9:14 pm #95610@gracie-j Cool! Thank you!
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If hours don't turn into daysMarch 15, 2021 at 9:18 pm #95613Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@devastate-lasting Of course!
March 16, 2021 at 12:39 am #95623GIRLLL it was AMAZING!!! I loved it sooo muchhh!!!! I never once saw that plottwist coming!!! And it was SOOOO creative!!! Great job!!!! And the foreeeshadowinnngggg. AND THAT END LINE???? Brilliant XD
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
March 16, 2021 at 10:59 am #95627@daisy-torres AHHH thank you so much girl! I’m really glad you liked it! Thank you for reading and your comments! I really appreciate it!
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If hours don't turn into daysMarch 16, 2021 at 1:15 pm #95639Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@devastate-lasting Whoa. that. was. awesome. Like, the intensity, the suspense, the…everything. SO AMAZING! And the ending? I’m with Daisy–that was FANTASTIC!
March 16, 2021 at 1:55 pm #95640@gracie-j Ah thank you so much! I’m really glad you enjoyed it!
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If hours don't turn into daysMarch 16, 2021 at 2:07 pm #95641Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@devastate-lasting You’re welcome! It was fabulous!
March 16, 2021 at 10:57 pm #95688@devastate-lasting Of course!!! Keep up the fantastic work!!!!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
March 17, 2021 at 11:01 am #95706@daisy-torres @gracie-j Ah, one last question for you two! What genre would you say this is? I’m really bad at determining the genres of my work, haha…
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If hours don't turn into daysMarch 17, 2021 at 12:02 pm #95711Hmm, @devastate-lasting My guess is probably Supernatural Suspense/Mystery. Maaaybe fantasy, but definitely supernatural!
"It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."
March 17, 2021 at 2:48 pm #95750@daisy-torres Ah, that makes sense! Thanks!
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