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August 1, 2017 at 12:26 pm #38652
I wrote a novelette for Camp NaNo. It’s woefully under the upper limit, which is kind of a good thing, and very unsettling, because that never happens to me. At the moment it’s a rough draft, somewhere around 12,000 words.
This is intended for submission to Rooglewood’s contest, so if you’d like to read it but think you wouldn’t give fair criticism, there’s your warning.
The main problem at the moment, besides the usual first-draft things, is that I don’t know how it ends. I have two possible endings sketched out, and I’m not looking for beta-readers just yet (though I will be soon, because this has to be submitted by the end of the year), but one person, maybe two if I get enough interest, to read it and tell me which end they think fits better, and why.
@emma-flournoy, @dragon-snapper, @daeus, @hopeYou will draw water joyfully from the springs of salvation. (Isaiah 12:3)
August 1, 2017 at 12:45 pm #38653@northerner I’m afraid I can’t read it, but if you’d like to summarize it for me, I could probably tell you which ending would be best. Endings are kinda my thing.
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August 1, 2017 at 2:00 pm #38656Endings are kinda my thing.
HA.
You mean, like, endings that leave readers emotionally wrecked at 3 a.m.?
*is probably geeking out about something*
August 1, 2017 at 2:14 pm #38658@graciegirl I suppose so.
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August 1, 2017 at 4:33 pm #38663@northerner I might be able to, if I could work on it next week?
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August 1, 2017 at 4:37 pm #38664@Dragon-snapper, sure! I can share the Google Doc with you, if that works? I think I’ll need an e-mail address for that, though. You can contact me here: https://ofdreamsandswords.wordpress.com/contact/.
@Daeus, I have your e-mail, so I’ll send you a summary that way, so as not to spoil things for other people.
@Graciegirl uh oh. . . is that his time-travel one? I shall be doomed. *Hardens already-emotionless INTP heart.*- This reply was modified 7 years, 3 months ago by Northerner.
You will draw water joyfully from the springs of salvation. (Isaiah 12:3)
August 1, 2017 at 4:56 pm #38668@Northerner
No, I actually meant Edwin Brook. 😜*Hardens already-emotionless INTP heart.*
😂 INTPs are awesome.
*is probably geeking out about something*
August 1, 2017 at 7:37 pm #38691@Northerner welp, I’m entering that contest too so I’m afraid that disqualifies me. Good luck though. 😉
August 2, 2017 at 1:16 pm #38746@Northerner I’m obviously not entering the contest, but I really have NO SPARE TIME. Very sorry, but good luck anyway. 😀
August 3, 2017 at 6:24 am #38800@northerner I would, but I already have more going on than I actually have time for. Besides which, I’m also entering the contest (If I get time to sit down and write). 🙁
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August 3, 2017 at 12:29 pm #38808@Graciegirl, aw, thanks!
@Kate-flournoy, it is possible that both of us could win, but I understand. Same to you!
@Emma-flournoy, @Hope that’s okay. The Dragon Snapper will take care of it.You will draw water joyfully from the springs of salvation. (Isaiah 12:3)
August 5, 2017 at 7:41 pm #38989@northerner I like how you called me ‘The’ Dragon Snapper.
Question about the contact page, it says I need to add a comment. Will that go on the website, or will it simply be sent to you?
If you want, we can also exchange emails by KP’s email. Your email does not have to go on the site. (and now the word email is overused) 😛☀ ☀ ☀ ENFP ☀ ☀ ☀
August 5, 2017 at 7:42 pm #38990@Dragon-snapper, the comment will be the body of the e-mail you send me, if that makes sense, not a public thing. It is confusing the way it uses the word there.
You will draw water joyfully from the springs of salvation. (Isaiah 12:3)
August 5, 2017 at 7:50 pm #38992@northerner *nods*
I have done the thing for the thing. The thing is done.☀ ☀ ☀ ENFP ☀ ☀ ☀
August 5, 2017 at 7:53 pm #38994@Dragon-Snapper Got it.
You will draw water joyfully from the springs of salvation. (Isaiah 12:3)
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