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  • #8131
    Kate Flournoy
    @kate-flournoy
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      Well thanks! Would you mind posting one of your poems? Or are they all top secret? 😉

      Rosey Mucklestone
      @writefury
        • Rank: Knight in Shining Armor
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        @mas410
        XD Thanks, I’m glad you enjoy it! 😛

        #8134
        The Happy Bookaholic
        @the-happy-bookaholic
          • Rank: Wise Jester
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          Top of the afternoon to you, MK (ooh what does that stand for? Milk Kid? Master King? Massive Kaleidoscope?). I noticed that your first post had a lot of errors in it, and even though I’ve been noticeably (actually I wonder whether anyone noticed me) absent from here, I’ve made a special reappearance to tell you that it’s ‘you guys’ instead of ‘your guys’. We aren’t our own guys.

          And christmas’s? No. Christmases being the plural form of Christmas. But wait—since it’s Christmas Eve here in Singapore doesn’t that make it Christmas Eve Eve all the way in America? Anyway. I won’t make you want to throw a milkshake at me by continuing to edit the rest of that post. But may I add something? Just a teeny-weeny something? Yes? Thanks! Please put apostrophes!!!!!

          Okay that’s all. Peace out.

          #8135
          Hope Ann
          @hope
            • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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            Welcome, and plan to have lots of fun during your stay here 😉 What type of stories do you like to write? Allegorical fantasy and futuristic suspense are my favorites (how do those two even go together?)

            INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.

            #8143
            Masyn
            @mas410
              • Rank: Charismatic Rebel
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              @kate-flournoy lol, most are very top secret. But heres one I wrote a while ago, for a friend. Feel free to critique it or whatever. Or just read it. lol.

              I feel the need to tell you
              Just how much you mean to me
              All the good things that you do
              Do a million things for me
              Every time you’re by my side
              Every time you never leave
              Every thing you do that’s kind
              Always say just what I need
              All the times that you’ve helped me
              During times I couldn’t think
              I cannot repay it all
              But I’m promising you now
              I will be there when you fall
              When you’re lost I’ll keep you sound
              I’ll be there if you need advice
              I’m not the best but I’ll suffice
              When you’re hurt I’ll empathize
              Need to talk, I’ll sympathize
              It may not amount to much
              But all of me I’m promising
              I may not have a healing touch
              But I’m an ear that’s listening
              I have arms, they’re hugging you
              I’ve a heart, its loving you
              You’re my brother til the end
              But yet you may not understand
              Why it seems I push you away
              I still want, want you to stay
              But I cannot trust my strength
              Words shatter hearts, mountains shake
              To keep myself from hurting you
              Sometimes I have to lock me up
              To keep myself from breaking through
              The walls I’ve built, built them up
              During those times please do not think
              You haven’t done enough for me
              Because you have, God knows you have
              And so I’m giving all I am
              I know my best is not enough
              But I’ll be here when goings rough
              When you have no one to turn to
              Run to me, I’ll still be here
              I’ll try my best to always help you
              How you’ve helped me I’ll try to mirror
              I have much, much more to say
              But to write would take all day
              Bottom line, thanks.
              I know I don’t say that enough.
              Saying it now with sister’s love,
              From the heart, I’m saying thanks.
              Thanks again, I love you ____

              #8144
              Masyn
              @mas410
                • Rank: Charismatic Rebel
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                @the-happy-bookaholic, greetings. MK is my first two initials. fyi.
                Ah… ok… so, I’m naturally a lazy person, so I apologize for any and all spelling/punctuation mistakes I made/make. Its just, WAY to hard for me to hit that little apostrophe key, you know?
                One thing I’m confused about– my sentence was, ‘Hows your guys’ christmas’s going.’ You’re saying it should be, ‘How’s you guys christmases going.’? Because, I wasnt talking about you guys being your own guys, rather, I was referring to your guys’ christmases. I may still be wrong, but It would be nice if you could explain how what I wrote was grammatically incorrect. 🙂 thanks and Merry Christmas. OR SHOULD I SAY– Merry Christmas eve.

                #8145
                Masyn
                @mas410
                  • Rank: Charismatic Rebel
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                  @hope, thanks. 🙂
                  I like to write fantasy/action/adventure/scifi/mystery/dystopian/drama/…basically the type of books I like to read lol.
                  love your blog btw!
                  Merry Christmas!

                  #8146
                  Masyn
                  @mas410
                    • Rank: Charismatic Rebel
                    • Total Posts: 19

                    @the-happy-bookaholic, As I’m sitting here thinking about it, my little Brain now sees how you’re correct. My apologies. Thanks for correcting me!! I feel so stupid 😛 Have a merry christmas!!

                    #8147
                    Kate Flournoy
                    @kate-flournoy
                      • Rank: Chosen One
                      • Total Posts: 3976

                      Don’t worry, M.K. @the-happy-bookaholic corrects everyone’s grammar on here. It’s nothing personal. 😛

                      And that poem— wow. As structure goes, I’m don’t know how it was, because I’m not a structure nut (@Daeus is, if you can get him over here) but the words and the raw emotion touched me very… earnestly. You conveyed so much so briefly— or in so many brief lines, and that was really great. I can totally relate to the message, as well. I have four little brothers. 🙂

                      So you’re a sister then? For some reason I’ve been thinking you were a brother. 😛

                      Daeus
                      @daeus
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                        @mas410

                        I like to write fantasy/action/adventure/scifi/mystery/dystopian/drama/…

                        Yes! That is so me.

                        Structure nut has no objections. Structure nut does not care too much about structure. Structure nut loves structure, he does not care about it. Poetry is just saying something in a way that is expressly original, uses words that sound good above all other word choices, and saying what you truly mean. Structure is just a way (for structure nuts) to make this easier and it helps people memorize your poetry better. So who cares if you’re Byron? Sure that poem wasn’t the best ever written, but it was good and it resonates. I liked it. That makes two. Two against none.

                        But if you do want to learn structure (and it really can improve poetry even though it is not necessary), The Roar On The Other Side was my text book and I would highly recommend it.

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                        #8149
                        Kate Flournoy
                        @kate-flournoy
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                          Structure nut is very obliging.

                          Masyn
                          @mas410
                            • Rank: Charismatic Rebel
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                            @kate-flournoy, Thanks. 🙂
                            And yea I ish a girl lol. XD


                            @daeus
                            I’ve never really looked into structure lol, I write as the words pop into my head. Which can be annoying, because I can never really make myself write. An idea has to inspire me to. Lol.
                            I’ll look into that resource, though. thanks

                            #8151
                            Hope Ann
                            @hope
                              • Rank: Eccentric Mentor
                              • Total Posts: 1092


                              @mas410
                              Thanks; I have fun with my blog.

                              INTJ - Inhumane. No-feelings. Terrible. Judgment and doom on everyone.

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