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@jenwriter17 Probably late Saturday or Sunday at the latest I can read your new chapter! I’m really excited about what happens next!! 😀
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
@seekjustice Okay, no problem 🙂
@skredder Alrighty 😉I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@jenwriter17 I just requested access. Sorry I wasn’t able to get to it earlier.
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
@skredder That’s okay 🙂 You have access now!
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www.jennaterese.com@jenwriter17 I read it. And I, um…left a “few” comments. *coughs* You’ll see. 😉
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
@skredder Haha, I appreciate your “few” comments! 😉 That was awesome.
Thank you so much for reading! <3
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www.jennaterese.com@skredder @seekjustice Well, I’ve got chapter 5 here! 🙂
I have a couple questions though: 1) do you like Jax’s POV enough to have more of it? 2) originally my story was set in Japan, so most if not all of the characters’ names are Japanese. Do you think I should change this now that it’s set in America?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1me97aNLJZd26KAasK-lQHcdWFYpl1cBBa_0KQo731Og/edit
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@jenwriter17 I just requested access. I may not be able to get to it until Thursday or Friday, though.
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
@skredder @seekjustice Here’s chapter 6! 🙂
And fear not, I’ll be putting off writing a little bit to catch up on reading both of your books *cough*because*cough*Seekjustice writes too fast for me to keep up *cough* 😉
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PruwKQKCOSdDVpAvs_Avwubpf4wrdfiW-cFHg_WDtcE/edit?usp=sharing
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www.jennaterese.comHey there @jenwriter! I read your first chapter, and I really enjoyed it. And I think I just sent a request to access the rest of the chapters… I’m not sure though. My google account doesn’t like me sometimes. 🙂
Anyways, I really liked the first chapter, and I’ve got a few thoughts if you don’t mind me sharing them.
First, I really liked how you introduced the action and hinted at things early in the story(like the “illegal-size soda”, and Jax Oarson staring at the cross Rin was carrying. One thing I would change, is during the breakout/police-chase scenes, pacing was just a bit to slow. I’d recommend going over the doc and removing unnecessary words, and trying to keep descriptions as simple as possible. It just helps keep things easy to understand for the reader, who doesn’t have the author’s POV and understanding of the scene.
Other than that, I really liked your 1st chapter. It was fun and interesting to read, and I already want to know more about Rin and officer Oarson. 😉
Keep up the great work!
                                                          Â~Sarah
INTJ. Writer. Dreamer. Artist. Dragon.
*vader vibes*
Hey @jenwriter17, sorry to bother you again, but would you mind giving me access to all the chapters you have up so far on your book? I requested access for chapter 6 and I’ve read chapter 1, but I can’t see the other ones(forgive me if it’s just something I’m overlooking in Docs, I don’t use them very often, xD). Anyway, happy writing! 🙂
                                                        Â~Sarah
INTJ. Writer. Artist. Dreamer. Dragon.
*vader vibes*
@sarah-anson Oh I didn’t know you read it! (or maybe I did but I forgot) 😀 Thank you so much for the feedback, I really appreciate it.
I just gave you access for chapter 6, and the other links should be earlier in this topic. 🙂 thank you!
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www.jennaterese.comOkay, thanks @jenwriter17 !
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@seekjustice @skredder @sarah-anson (if you’d like to read it too 🙂 ) Chapter 7! 😀
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1_aD1ola1rVG3cFwLSZ8S87nBtL7_j1xCdWK0rpUgpek/edit
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www.jennaterese.com@jenwriter17 Alright! Just requested access! I can’t wait to read it! 😀
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
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