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@kaya-young yeah, I’d love for you to read it! 😀 You’ll probably have to request access.
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@jenwriter17 I love it! I didn’t request access because I had a really hard time getting access to Rochellaine’s WIP, but I really enjoyed what I read so far!
I love Rin! She seems super spunky and awesome!
What you did with the cross was really cool, and a great way to put Christianity into it without feeling forced!
The only thing I would change is to vary your sentence length. Like use some more commas and combine a few of your existing sentences… 😉
The Kingdom has been torn asunder...
http://www.encircledbygrace.com/@jenwriter17 Well, apparently I was able to request access to your second chapter, so just so you know, I’m who requested access. 🙂
The Kingdom has been torn asunder...
http://www.encircledbygrace.com/@kaya-young Okay, you should have access now.
I am super glad you like it! I like Rin too 😛
Yes, I tend to have choppy writing. I’ll work on that. Thank you so much for reading it! 😀
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@seekjustice Hi! Just letting you that I have chapter 2 of my WIP ready for you to read, if you’d like. I posted the link several days ago, but I thought I’d tag you again just to make sure you got it (Skredder was having trouble with posts not showing up). So here’s the link!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m8V_wWL-Owutzcuu3Cyk6r1JhJ9iH8XQX1JQcV8kHqM/edit
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@seekjustice @skredder @kaya-young (if you want to) I have my third chapter ready to read! You don’t have to do spelling/grammar checks, just so you know. 🙂 You probably have to request access.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LjQVVp5BoRrCco9m9ZJQhOTv1V9Yo1W25ztoHu9jF_U/edit
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@jenwriter17 Sweet! Can’t wait to read it! I just requested access. 🙂
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
@jenwriter17 Now that was a cool chapter! I really, really enjoyed that one. The way it read felt really smooth to me. I loved it! 😀
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
@skredder aw, thank you for reading it! 😀
I do have a question though: Jane said that I was struggling with telling instead of showing, how do you think that was in this chapter?
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@jenwriter17 I’m not the best person to ask this. So, um, based on what I read, I think there’s is still some telling, but I think it’s better than before. Again, I am not the best person to ask this. I could be completely wrong either way. 🙂
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
@skredder Okay, thank you 🙂
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@jenwriter17 I had kinda forgot to tell you, but I loved chapter 3! Skredder is right, it flowed really well. 🙂
I can’t wait to find out what happens next!
Also did I mention how much I really just love Rin? 😉
The Kingdom has been torn asunder...
http://www.encircledbygrace.com/@kaya-young Aw, thank you! 😀 I’m so glad you like Rin 🙂
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.com@seekjustice @skredder @kaya-young (if you want to again 🙂 ) Here’s chapter 4!
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ro5uxtEZf1RuXDWL4lLi9Y2_Pr_acN8KG7glu5YiDdI/edit
I'm a Kapeefer 'TIL WE'RE OLD AND GREY!
www.jennaterese.comCool! Hopefully we’ll get more internet in two or three days and then I’ll be able to comment properly on your chapters!
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