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March 26, 2018 at 3:08 pm #68700
@skredder alrighty, just gave you access. I’m gonna fix it so that whenever I post the link people already have access 🙂
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www.jennaterese.comMarch 26, 2018 at 3:29 pm #68705@jenwriter17 Okay, I read the new prologue. It definitely had more description and it was clearer to see how it was for Uma to wake up. But you are right in that it felt choppy.
I do wonder though, why’d you change from Uma being able to sit up to being strapped down to the table? I don’t have a problem with it or anything like that. It’s just out of curiosity that I ask. 🙂
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
March 26, 2018 at 4:35 pm #68720@skredder I just thought that maybe mad scientists in the 22nd century might take extra precautions when turning on for the first time a very intelligent robot that can think for itself. ya know, just in case….:)
Thank you for reading it! I’m gonna try to fix my sentence lengths.
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www.jennaterese.comMarch 26, 2018 at 4:50 pm #68726@jenwriter17 Yeah, precautions against something that is typically much stronger than you and can think faster than you and probably has very little idea what is going on is a really good idea! 🙂
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
March 26, 2018 at 7:54 pm #68789I’d love to do a swapping thing!
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March 27, 2018 at 3:29 pm #68931@seekjustice Awesome! 😀
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www.jennaterese.comMarch 28, 2018 at 12:44 am #69013@seekjustice @skredder Hey, reading buddies! 😉
I have my second chapter here. When I had given out my first chapter for everyone, I actually had the next two written. So, if you both would read it and leave comments I would forever be grateful to you 🙂
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m8V_wWL-Owutzcuu3Cyk6r1JhJ9iH8XQX1JQcV8kHqM/edit
By the way, I did kinda rewrite the first chapter a little bit. Let me know if you want to see that too 🙂
Thank you! <3
P.S. I am dying waiting to read both of your stories!!! 😀 (Seekjustice, yes I’m fangirling about Stars Fill Infinity 😉 )
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www.jennaterese.comMarch 28, 2018 at 12:45 am #69014Actually, use this link instead. I think you should have automatic access
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1m8V_wWL-Owutzcuu3Cyk6r1JhJ9iH8XQX1JQcV8kHqM/edit?usp=sharing
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www.jennaterese.comMarch 29, 2018 at 1:18 pm #69331@jenwriter17 It seems that whenever I tag you and @seekjustice my post never makes it. It just vanishes. Poof! Let’s hope this one takes.
I’ve been trying to ask for about the last two days how would y’all like to do the swap thing, especially in terms of the links?
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
March 29, 2018 at 2:09 pm #69336@skredder Oh, sorry, I never saw your posts! I guess they did disappear….
You mean where would we post the links?
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www.jennaterese.comMarch 29, 2018 at 2:31 pm #69339@jenwriter17 Yeah, about all ten of my tries just disappeared when I tried posting. And yes, where should we post the links?
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
March 29, 2018 at 2:56 pm #69344@skredder Well, you and @seekjustice could make a topic for your WIPs, that way we’d have a place to discuss them if we wanted.
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www.jennaterese.comMarch 29, 2018 at 3:44 pm #69354@jenwriter17 Alright. If @seekjustice wants to, I can make a topic for my WIP.
"For God hath not given us the spirit of fear; but of power, and of love, and of a sound mind."
March 29, 2018 at 4:09 pm #69355@skredder Okay! 🙂
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www.jennaterese.comMarch 29, 2018 at 6:51 pm #69392@jenwriter17  I haven’t read your other chapters, but I was wondering if you still would like me to read it? I have some time. 🙂
I know I didn’t do this from the start, so if not that’s fine too. 🙂
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