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    Daisy Torres
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      https://docs.google.com/document/d/1rBAut0ZPBW1GiJ7QXjwNkgFf4EeE3pEt73XakZUKIR0/edit?usp=drivesdk

      Guys, this is it 😱 The fifth chapter. I might upload more to my home page so I don’t bog anything down on the novel critique forum, so if you want me to tag you for updates, just let me know! I don’t want to bug anyone 💕 Thank you all again!! I have really really enjoyed writing with an actual audience to hear feedback from! It has honestly helped me so much.

      @gracie-j @nova21 @devastate-lasting @anyone

      "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

      #94668
      ella
      @nova21
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        @daisy-torres

        YAY!!!  I’m so glad it’s helped you!  Thanks for letting us read it ❤

        what we do in life echoes in eternity
        -gladiator, 2000

        #94671
        Daisy Torres
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          @nova21 Of course!!

          "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

          #94672
          ella
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            @daisy-torres

            *trys to say something but can’t find any words*

            Daisy!!!  This is even better than the last one!!!  Her you-know-who shows up, then she does you-know-what to him, then her other you-know-who shows up and I’m like “this is amazing!!!” and *takes a deep breath to calm down* WOW!!!!  You made me laugh out loud, too, haha!! 😆

            Anyways, I should stop talking before I give any spoilers.  Let me just say that THAT WAS AMAZING!!  You totally need to post more on your home page!!!!!!!

            Ok i’m shutting up now. 😊

            -ELLA

            what we do in life echoes in eternity
            -gladiator, 2000

            #94673
            Linyang Zhang
            @devastate-lasting
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              @daisy-torres Oo, I’ll try to get to it soon! Thanks for sharing it!

              Lately, it's been on my brain
              Would you mind letting me know
              If hours don't turn into days

              #94674
              Daisy Torres
              @daisy-torres
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                @nova21 Hahaa!!! I’m so glad you enjoyed it!! Thank you for all of your amazing comments and help!!!

                "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

                #94675
                Daisy Torres
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                  @devastate-lasting No problem!!

                  "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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                  ella
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                    @daisy-torres

                    Of course, anytime! 😊

                    what we do in life echoes in eternity
                    -gladiator, 2000

                    #94691
                    Anonymous
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                      @daisy-torres YAY! I’ll get to it…but it might be a day or two! I am so excited, and YAS! Please tag me! Btw, this haiku is even better than the last!

                      #94701
                      Daisy Torres
                      @daisy-torres
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                        @gracie-j Haha that’s completely fine!! Take your time! Okra dokra, will do. And thank you!!

                        "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

                        #94705
                        Natalie C.
                        @nanisnook
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                          @daisy-torres

                          Can you please tag me? I’ve been reading this since I joined and it is so awesome! I MUST KNOW MORE

                          Natalie

                          Be still and know that I am God. Psalm 46:10

                          #94706
                          Issabelle Perry
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                            @daisy-torres

                            Ooooh, AWESOME!!!!!!! Did you put chapter one on here? I don’t really check the KP forum as often as I should, but if you did, I’d TOTALLY read it as soon as I’m done with reading the chapters that @e-k-seaver has put up!!!!

                            God gives His hardest battles to His strongest soldiers.
                            TeenWritersNook.com

                            #94717
                            Linyang Zhang
                            @devastate-lasting
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                              @daisy-torres Is done! That was great! Thank you so much for sharing with us!

                              Lately, it's been on my brain
                              Would you mind letting me know
                              If hours don't turn into days

                              #94724
                              Daisy Torres
                              @daisy-torres
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                                @nanisnook Sure!! Thank you so much for reading!

                                "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

                                #94725
                                Daisy Torres
                                @daisy-torres
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                                  @Issawriter7 I did! Just check this same forum. The first part is a prologue!

                                  "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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