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  • #94305
    Daisy Torres
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      https://docs.google.com/document/d/19XKDhEmp6wnPD6cg-6mgxf8Oz60T1zrP6mDi5nnV2wE/edit?usp=drivesdk

      Thank you to everyone who took the time to read over my prologue!! Here’s the next piece <3


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      • This topic was modified 3 years, 9 months ago by Daisy Torres.

      "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

      #94322
      Linyang Zhang
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        @daisy-torres Cool I’ll try to get to this today!

        Lately, it's been on my brain
        Would you mind letting me know
        If hours don't turn into days

        #94327
        ella
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          @daisy-torres

          That was really good and super suspenseful!!!  I love Tessa’s personality and internal monologue, too, lol!!  You HAVE to post more—please!!!!!! 😃

          what we do in life echoes in eternity
          -gladiator, 2000

          #94329
          Linyang Zhang
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            @daisy-torres I’ve left some comments! Thank you so much for sharing!

            Lately, it's been on my brain
            Would you mind letting me know
            If hours don't turn into days

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            Anonymous
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              @daisy-torres Amazing job! I love this already!

              #94337
              Daisy Torres
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                @nova21 Yayy!! Thank you so much!! I’ll try to! I have a few chapters in progress rn, so maybe I’ll get them out before too long!

                "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

                #94338
                Daisy Torres
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                  @devastate-lasting Thank you so much for reading!! I really appreciate all your comments!

                  "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

                  #94339
                  Daisy Torres
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                    @gracie-j Aww thank you so much!! That makes my heart happy!

                    "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

                    #94340
                    Linyang Zhang
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                      @daisy-torres of course! Anytime!

                      Lately, it's been on my brain
                      Would you mind letting me know
                      If hours don't turn into days

                      #94355
                      Abigail.M.
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                        @daisy-torres

                        This sounds awesome! (I’m a slow reader however XD ). I’ll let you know when I finish though:)

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                        Daisy Torres
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                          @abigail-m Oh yay, awesome!! (Same XD You’re fine.) No rush <3

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                          "It's easy to be caught up in stardust and whispers when reality is so dark and loud."

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