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Hi,
My name is Aedesia. I just joined Kingdom pen. I would really like for someone to help critique my first chapter of a short story I am writing. I am the cousin of Dekreel. @dekreel
@aedesia Hi! Welcome! You should introduce yourself in the “Start Here” section of the forum so we can get to know you. 😀
If you want us to help critique your short story, could you post a shareable link to it in a google document? If you don’t know how, I can explain, or you can probably google it to get the information.
When you’re ready for us to critique, either @dekreel or I can tag people for you. 😀 Again, Welcome!!!!
"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
@aedesia WELCOME, my dear cousin, to the bestest place in Cyberspace!! *scratches walls in ecstacy* 😀
@rochellaine Technically that’s what she doing: introducing herself. Just in the wrong……. Yeah *sheepish grin*You can pronounce it however you want.
@dekreel I have never scratched walls in ecstasy, but I can understand a wolf feeling the need to do so.
(Because, my dear, you are technically a wolf.)
"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
@rochellaine *shill voice* I AM NOT! Look at this tail! Does it look like a wolf’s tail to you?!
*whimpers* Don’t… make me… disappear…
You can pronounce it however you want.
@dekreel *speaks sweetly and logically* It looks like a wolf tail would look if it were shaved. A lot of canines shave their tails for aesthetic appeal.
Anyway, I promised that if you behaved enough like a human I wouldn’t make you disappear. So you’re safe for the present. Just don’t do too much of that growling and scratching random walls.
(Also, because the walls around here belong to Kingdom Pen, they could probably sue you for ruining their property. Come to think of it – someone should do that to @dragon-snapper too, before she melts any more chairs.)
"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
@dekreel Whoops! Looks like I accidentally did make you disappear. Let’s see if I can undo the damage. *Shuts eyes* I believe in her. I believe in her. I believe she is real.
"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
@aedesia Welcome to kp! We’re glad to have you! 😀
@rochellaine Having our chairs melted is just one of the many occupational hazards of being kapeefers! 😉and I was so confused
@rochellaine *reappears* X’D Don’t worry — it wasn’t you, it was school. B-p I’m overriding the effect right now. *strains a little* X) But thanks anyway for believing in me! 😀
Do they now? *raises an eyebrow* Hmmmmph… Well I don’t think it looks like a wolf’s tail. They don’t get that long. It looks more like a cat’s tail
Sorry, as long as Snapper melts chairs, I scratch walls. Also, Snapper has been melting chairs for about a year now, and as far as I’m concerned, she hasn’t gotten sued. So I think I’m okay XD (Right? @dragon-snapper, have you ever gotten sued for melting chairs?)
*sizzles* Yipes, my school-overriding procedures are failing. See you later! *disappears*
You can pronounce it however you want.
@aedesia Welcome Aedesia! It’s great to have you here! 😀 What’s your story about? What are some of your favorite books?
@notawriter I didn’t realize that being a kapeefer was an occupation. *goes to update my professional profile on LinkedIn* *realizes that I don’t have a profile on LinkedIn* *wonders if there ever was a point anyway, because it would be hard to explain how being a kapeefer raises my value as a business person*
UGGGH! Notawriter, you have confused me.
@dekreel *sighs with relief* Hooray! I’m glad I didn’t make you disappear. That was honestly not my intention. I only make unimportant pets disappear. Except dragons. I believe in dragons, too. I just call them dinosaurs. Fire-breathing dinosaurs. Leviathons. Why am I talking about dragons? Oh, right. Because you didn’t disappear. But you did disappear again. *realizes I’m rambling* *stops rambling and submits post so as to confuse readers all and sundry*"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
@aedesia Welcome to KP!
What do you like to write?
Writer. Dreamer. Sometimes blogger. MBTI mess. Lover of Jesus and books.
@Rochellaine
Confusing people is my 2nd occupation! 😀
Sadly neither of my jobs pay well. Or ..y’know at all.and I was so confused
@aedesia Welcome to Kingdom Pen! 😀
@dekreel Nope. Never been sued. Though I should be. *grins* @rochellaine *looks at you* *promptly melts a chair*☀ ☀ ☀ ENFP ☀ ☀ ☀
@aedesia Welcome to the bestistest place on the Internet! Hope you enjoy your time here.
I would be happy to critique your short story chapter! 🙂
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