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I have just finished my first (real) film script, planning to film this winter!! So, can ya’ll do me a favor?? I need a few “outsiders” to proof my script. You can read it here . I hope. :/ Anyways, there is on unfinished part (it is marked, and to be honest, I totally forgot about that, abut I’m getting to it!) Please comment here with any edits you deem necessary. I really appreciate it! =)
@ceaseless-prayer A film script! OOOOOOOHHH! 😀 😀
I can’t seem to access it though, it keeps trying to give me a tutorial
You can pronounce it however you want.
@ceaseless-prayer Awesome! I’d like to proofread it for you, but like Dekreel said, I don’t think we can access the link via the website you’re using. Could you maybe share through a document or some other medium?
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literatureforthelight.wordpress.com@ceaseless-prayer you could try copying it to a Google Doc if you use Google 🙂
You can pronounce it however you want.
Okay, here is a google drive link. Hopefully this works better lol btw, we are in the process of changing the title, so any ideas on that would be helpful as well…https://drive.google.com/drive/u/0/my-drive
@ceaseless-prayer, I would be willing to do it, but even with the new link I still cant seem to be able to access it
WIP - Decisions
Kapeefer til we're old and greyHmm, well, I could attach a pdf file, if someone could tell me how? I didn’t see any options for that… but then, I’m not super good with computers… I’ll try something tomorrow. 🙂
@ceaseless-prayer Oh my goodness! Does that link have a reference to Oak Brook College of Law? What’s your connection? I’m a third year student.
"Sylvester - Sylvester!"
If you open your google doc, go to SHARE and get a sharable link, and then post the sharable link here, your readers should be able to see it. You will also need to put it on the setting ANYONE CAN EDIT or ANYONE CAN COMMENT, if you want them to be able to give feedback. Hope that’s helpful!
INFP Queen of the Kingdom commander of an army of origami cranes and a sabre from Babylon.
Oops, looks like last time I posted, I was logged in as my little sister, who does happen to be quite handy with computers and such. 😛 Anyway, here we go: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1OKBGO8SRoMDNrtyJC-8U2-XteHiy4aXa/view?usp=sharing Thanks for the help everyone! I allowed editing… just curious, will the edits show up in a different color or something?
@ceaseless-prayer I think you attached a PDF file (it ends with Ian calling over the phone, “you know, just within boundaries”) so I’m not exactly sure that’s what you wanted–?
But I’ve read the story, and so far, I think it’s pretty cool even though the PDF doesn’t contain all of it yet. I can kind of see where you’re going with the death theme, and its interesting that you have a teenage boy wander around graveyards. It adds the layers of familial tension and reflections on the deep things of life, so I can’t wait to see how this finishes!
A few formatting tips — at the beginning when the teenager is narrating, you should probably put that into the format usually used for dialogue (which starts page 3). Otherwise its easy to mix up description with the actual words being spoken. If Tommy is narrating you can put “TOMMY (V.O.)” (standing for voiceover) in the character cue. Also, you might be putting a bit more action into the parentheticals than you’re supposed to — for example, Madeline looking at Tommy curiously on page five should be in the description format.
Hope this helps!
It's g-h, 2-4-6-8 twice, three 9's
literatureforthelight.wordpress.com@gh24682468999 Yes, it does! Hmm, I will check it out after I get off work… Thanks for the comments and encouragement. =)
Okay, I redid it. Here is the entire script:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1E0sy1mLG6ViQBCtxCTU5oGImTTDKnQ2l/view?usp=sharing 🙂
@rochellaine @gh24682468999@seekjustice @alia @dekreel Don’t feel like you have to or anything, but if any of you guys were wanting to proof my script, I’d appreciate if you could get it done this week, or early next week… Thanks for the tips @gh24682468999 🙂
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