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December 27, 2017 at 5:51 pm #57859
‘Sup Kapeefers!
Over my nice hiatus, I finished editing the first draft of one of my novels, Sector One: Insurrection. I’m pretty excited about it too, especially since I can send it out to more betas. AKA You all! π
I’ll try to throw together a half-decent synopsis to explain it.
Ike Benrai inherited a lot from his father. His looks. His out-of-the-box intelligence. His arrogance. But one thing that Ike didn’t inherit was the tendency to fight. He loves it, although his childhood enemy, Zelaya Lotrene, might disagree.
But when he’s chosen to be an apprentice to one of the Colony’s most renowned Teachers–and the most dead-pan–in the colony, Ike starts to realize that being a Ruler is not all gold and glory. Especially when conspiracies and threats are lurking in every shadow. Then one of the threats manifests itself, and Ike is thrown into a rebellion against the very government he dreamed of ruling. Is his inherited wit enough to keep him alive, or does he need more than just his pride to keep him alive?There. I did it. π
Anyway…
- The book is just about 86000 words
- I was thinking I’d give you till March 1 to read it, though if you need longer, I’m sure we can discuss it. I won’t melt your chair, I promise
- And I don’t use Google Docs. I’d send this to you in a Word Doc. You could comment on it in a Google Doc, and then send it back to me, but I won’t reply to comments or anything. After you send it back, I’m just going to convert it into Word. So yeah, Word is good. π
- It’s science-fiction. Nothing questionable in it.
Sooo…does anyone want to beta-read it? I’ll take as many as I can get.
@emily @shannon @seekjustice @epicaddie2 @ingridrdΒ @daughterofthekingΒ @corissa-maiden-of-praise @winter-rose @dekreel @anyone
@daeus I’m pretty sure you don’t need to read it again. π XDβ β β ENFP β β β
December 27, 2017 at 5:52 pm #57860And why didn’t those tags work?
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December 27, 2017 at 5:58 pm #57865@dragon-snapperΒ Hello! I’m glad you had a nice and relaxing hiatus π
I’ll beta read it! It looks interesting, and I need to read sci-fi more, so this will be perfect! π
You can pronounce it however you want.
December 27, 2017 at 6:02 pm #57868ME ME ME ME ME ME ME ME ME ME ME ME!!!!!!!!!
*waves both hands frantically in the air while standing on tiptoes on a table*
Please, Dragon Snapper!?!? I can read super fast and I’m good at editing and I REALLY WANT TO READ YOUR BOOK!!!!
(I asked second so I need to be in.)
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https://forums.theaetherliDecember 27, 2017 at 6:13 pm #57878@aislinn-mollisong @dekreel Great! π
Aislinn…I can’t say no to that, can I? XD
To all and anyone else who’s going to beta-read this, here is the customary procedure for getting my email, cause no way never will I post it here. π
Anyway, email kingdompen at their kingdompenmag email gmail which is in the subscribe bar up there. @hope You’re up. That way, no one has to post their email. π
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December 27, 2017 at 6:25 pm #57880Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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@dragon-snapper *jumps up and down, waving hands wildly* Pick me! Pick me!
December 27, 2017 at 6:45 pm #57885@winter-rose Frodo! π I would be honored for you to read my book. You don’t have my email do you?
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December 27, 2017 at 7:00 pm #57892@dragon-snapper *claps hands* Well done on getting the editing finished! I, regrettably, will not have time to beta read. *sniffles* *dries eyes daintily with a handkerchief* I’m greatly intrigued by your synopsis.
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December 27, 2017 at 7:00 pm #57893Anonymous- Rank: Eccentric Mentor
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I don’t believe I do. I will ask Hope if she minds sending mine on.
December 27, 2017 at 7:13 pm #57899@dragon-snapper I’m happy to beta read but I’m literally about to go on hiatus so I’ll discuss it with you when I get back. π
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December 27, 2017 at 7:18 pm #57901@seekjustice Sounds great! π
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December 27, 2017 at 7:19 pm #57904Ike Benrai inherited a lot from his father. His looks. His out-of-the-box intelligence. His arrogance. But one thing that Ike didnβt inherit–but developed quite on his own–is the tendency to fight. He loves it, although his childhood enemy, Zelaya Lotrene, might disagree.
But when heβs chosen to be an apprentice to one of the Colonyβs most renowned Teachersβand the most dead-panβin the colony, Ike starts to realize that being a Ruler is not all gold and glory. Especially when conspiracies and threats are lurking in every shadow. Then one of the threats manifests itself, and Ike is thrown into a rebellion against the very government he dreamed of ruling. Is his inherited wit enough to keep him alive, or does he need more than just his pride to keep him alive?Perhaps the bold would make it more clear. I don’t know. It sounded less clear in my mind. π
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December 27, 2017 at 7:23 pm #57909@dragon-snapper I would love to read it! If, you want anyone else, that is…
*Giarstanornarak tries to melt chair*
Also, Daeus has 22 turtles in his signature.December 27, 2017 at 7:55 pm #57918@dragon-snapperΒ Um… What if I’m already subscribed? Do I email kingdompen that I want to read your story?
You can pronounce it however you want.
December 27, 2017 at 8:10 pm #57920I have now returned from my hiatus.
WeΒ were going on holidays, but literally just as we were driving out the gate we noticed my horse hopping on three legs. So I’m not going on holiday for the present time.
I have a blog email which is not my personal one which I’m happy to post on here.
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