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    Cloaked Mystery
    @jonas
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      (Reposting, because the original was long to the infinite abyss of moderation.)

      This is a novella that I wrote over the last eight weeks for my creative writing class. I am quite pleased with how it came out. If anyone would like to give me feedback, or just read it for fun, here is the link (in reply.) Feel free to give me a chapter-by-chapter critique or wait until you finish.

      This is copy-pasted from a word doc. The word doc has nice and clean formatting, but this one might be a bit messy still. I couldn’t figure out how to share the word doc, or a PDF, so this will have to do.

      Tags: (Let’s see, who to tag…) @highscribeofaetherium (I know you’ve read most of this already) @rae @savannah_grace2009 @thearcaneaxiom @ummmmm…Ican’tthinkofanyoneelsebutwhatever @anyone!

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      #179998
      Cloaked Mystery
      @jonas
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        Are you kidding me, Wyoh, that’s the THIRD time you’ve eaten that link!

        Um, let’s see. I’ll try posting it under my status update.

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        #179999
        Cloaked Mystery
        @jonas
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          Oh, wait, I forgot about this tactic:

          Google doc: h ttps://docs.google.com/document/d/1w_TDIfhF5atyi6gn4zhh3rudnxWtULjnj06LWehEO0g/edit?usp=sharing (delete the space after the ‘h.’)

          Take that, Wyoh!

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          #180005
          HighScribe
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            @jonas

            πŸ‘πŸ‘

            Any noun can become a verb if you don't care enough.

            #180049
            Sara
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              @jonas

              WOW. I am only like 2 paragraphs in but I got goosebumps….

              I feel like I’ve never read your writing before except for RP’s, and OH MY GOODNESS it’s amazing!

              Just wow.

              Lukas&Livia
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              #180055
              Cloaked Mystery
              @jonas
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                @savannah_grace2009

                Thank you! Yeah, I don’t think I have sharedΒ anyΒ actual writing. A lot of world building stuff, but no actual writing. (Oh, yeah, except that short story a while ago. Not sure if you read that one.)

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                #180056
                Sara
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                  @jonas

                  I don’t remember if I read that one or not….lol

                  I finished the first chapter!

                  Lukas&Livia
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                  Sef&Chase
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                  #180073
                  Sara
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                    Oooh, I just finished it! I felt like I was reading a published novel, it was that good!

                    Lukas&Livia
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                    Sef&Chase
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                    LEFSE FOREVER!!!!!! <333

                    #180083
                    Cloaked Mystery
                    @jonas
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                      @savannah_grace2009

                      Thanks! That means a lot!

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                      #180127
                      RAE
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                        :Jonas

                        I’m jealous.

                        That was a great story, I will definitely read it again.

                        I totally concur with Sara

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                        #180132
                        TheShadow
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                          @jonas

                          That was really, really, really good story!! Your writing is amazing!!

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                          -GRCR-
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                            @jonas

                            I just finished reading it, too, and wow. That was really good! Your fight scenes were awesome! Amazing job!!

                            Flaz: *yawns* Did the sun just come up? In the west?

                            #180136
                            Cloaked Mystery
                            @jonas
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                              @rae @theshadow @grcr

                              Thank you!

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