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Okay, yet another visual poem. Hey, as anyone but me on KP written one? I’d love to talk to you then. Please tell me what you think of this.
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Unselfish feeling,
Great affection for something,
Desire to care for,
Emotion.Joy
Great happiness,
Satisfaction for a job well done,
Deep contentment,
Delight.Peace
Absence of stress,
A state of harmony and serenity,
A tranquil feeling,
Silence.Patience
Tolerant in troubles,
Calmly enduring trying moments,
Long suffering always,
PerseveranceKindness
Caring nature,
Considerate of others needs,
Generous act,
Courteous.Goodness
Moral excellence,
Pleasing qualities to behold,
Desirable character,
Virtuous.Faithfulness
Remaining true,
Believing without needing to see,
Loyal to the end,
Reliable.Gentleness
Soft spoken,
A friend to those who need one,
Mildness of manner,
Polite.Self-control
Exercise restraint,
Able to control one’s feelings,
Calculating problems,
Careful.@Bluejay this is really interesting. I’ve never read a poem quite like this before, but I like it. Nothing really to point out. Great job.
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I think this is a beautiful poem. It’s like, a dictionary/thesaurus for the Fruits of the Spirit! 🙂☀ ☀ ☀ ENFP ☀ ☀ ☀
@kate-flournoy, You’re probably going to get a chance to read a lot more. I like writing poems like this.
@dragon-snapper Yes, I was reading through the dictionary and thesaurus as I wrote it. 🙂It was rather interesting, because the two that I struggled on, gentleness and self-control are two that I have major failings in. So I obviously know less about them.
@bluejay. Just lovely! 🙂
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@bluejay Yeah, I like it. Focusing on symbolism could make it even better, but it’s good.
Actually though, I wouldn’t call this one visual poetry. Visual poetry is where you write a normal poem, but the way the words are arranged forms an image. For instance, you could write a poem about your ancestors in the shape of a tree. Your one about the ocean was a perfect example of visual poetry because the stanzas formed wave shapes — fitting for the sea.
Now this poem also has a wave shape, but that isn’t visual poetry because the poem has nothing to do with waves. It’s still cool and fun to read, but not exactly in that category.
I’ve written two visual poems, but I doubt they’ll transfer here. The spacing will probably get removed. I’ll try it though. Let’s see…..
(Since it didn’t work, I removed it.)
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Bah. It didn’t work. Well, you can see one of them here if you want to. Unfortunately, I don’t have the other one online currently.
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@bluejay This is really great. I’m not sure what kind of poetry it is, but I like it a lot. The only thing that seemed out-of-place was the word “Polite” ending the gentleness verse. I’m not sure why. Maybe because the other lines are focusing on the sweet, thoughtful, er…gentle nature of gentleness. Is that helpful?
Visual poetry is a lot of fun, because you’re literally creating a word picture. I’ve only written one visual poem: it’s about (lost) freedom in America and it’s supposed to be shaped like the Liberty Bell. It worked out great when I drew it up on paper, but not so well typed out. It doesn’t look like I can center align on here, but I bet I can type it up on Pages, and then take a screenshot of it and post the picture. I can do that next time I go to the library, if you want. (Only if you want to read it, though. I did it a few years ago, so it’s not that great. 🙂 )@sarah-h I’d love to read it. I am really beginning to like visual poetry. As Daeus pointed out, this one wasn’t visual poetry, but I’m going to keep trying.
I like it. But I do agree with @Sarah-h. Polite, doesn’t quite seem to fit with gentleness. Maybe placid or quiet.
I looked up about forms of poetry and it’s rather similar to a cinquain, but that has the fourth line longest.
@bluejay Great poem, again! I really do love it. The varying length of the lines creates a beautiful sort of rhythm while you’re reading. I usually prefer rhyming poetry, but you pulled this off really well. Keep up the great work! 🙂
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@bluejay Awesome! Keep it up!
@everyone. Thanks. I’ve now changed the word that was bothering people and I’m very happy with it. 🙂
Oh, btw @daeus I had a look at your visual poem. WOW! That was amazing. And it’s rather funny, but I got the notification with your poem in it and it actually worked. I wonder why it didn’t work here. 😉
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